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[HELP] Nina Bio

Pretty close to done with the redesign and rewrite of Nina's bio. If you have more traits for in the bottom left, leave them in the comments.

Also your general thoughts on the bio and the writing is appreciated.

[HELP] Nina Bio

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I see. Your issue isn't with the loyalty trait itself, your issue is that it's not explained further in the bio. I'm not sure if I want to limit the traits in that way, though. If I only add the personality-traits that can be read in either the backstory or the sexual-traits, it seems a bit redundant to have a list of traits to start with. So I'm still going to have traits that might not be apparent from the bio itself in the list. Appreciate you big time for your comments.

SFMPORN

I agree but nothing in the bio mentions something or someone they are loyal to. All other traits are very well explained in the sexual notes or backstory so its easy to see how those traits fit Nina's personality. Nothing in the backstory or sexual notes gives me the impression Nina is loyal. If they are loyal, what or who are they loyal to? I think a sentence about their loyalty would help explain that trait. I only bring this up because it's the one trait that stuck out to me.

john

They're non-committal and have a hard time maintaining relationships. I don't see the issue there. I don't think disloyalty and not being able to maintain long relationships go hand-in-hand per se. If you have a hard time maintaining long relationships it doesn't inherently mean that you're disloyal, I think. Do you think otherwise?

SFMPORN

If they are non-committal, does maintain relationships and does not have close friends then why loyalty trait?

john

it's just cute to see some simple standing postures with good lighting. you know, like models on magazines

lisa

I know, work in progress.

SFMPORN

You've got "proficient in deepthroating" twice, though they might just be so proficient that it's justified

Docperian


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