Gamergate TriggerHappy page 1
Added 2016-09-29 00:29:50 +0000 UTCI'll not be publishing Triggerhappy openly until i have 4 pages, cause i want to have a defined beginning story on release, but i'll be posting the pages here as i do them for my patreon supporters.
You can give opinions about it, since i'm still not sure about some stuff like how to show the name (triggerhappy, gamergate triggerhappy, gamergate life triggerhappy, numbers, titles, etc?), and i've yet not proofreaded the text in english.
Comments
ok thx
Ku Kuru Yo
2016-10-01 09:44:12 +0000 UTCAnd in the bottom right corner, instead of "such lack of empathy", it might be better to use, "such a lack of empathy." Also, "I'll better go with you," would probably go smoother as, "I better go with you."
Weiss
2016-10-01 05:49:09 +0000 UTCAlright, grammar's a bit awkward in the top right frame, instead of "why we have," it might be more sound smoother to say, "Why do we have". In the bottom left corner, instead of "Set a patreon for donations," might be better to say, "Set up a patreon for donations."
Weiss
2016-10-01 05:47:32 +0000 UTCYou can point the grammar if you want so i can correct it
Ku Kuru Yo
2016-09-30 09:22:31 +0000 UTCSome of the grammar there was pretty fouled up, However, I got the point of it, looks to be a fun series.
Weiss
2016-09-30 01:56:03 +0000 UTC
