Cursed relic p29 to 36 basic storyboard

How many people die in the introductory scenes, before they meed Eloise again? Its a little unclear here. My personal preference would be few/none, as that avoids putting too much emphasis on that section and any trauma after. Also saves on character development. :) Eloise is almost a Big Dumb Object there for a bit when she has fainted, I like that angle. She doesn't do a thing, the explorers do it all to themselves. I'd not mind if the inside scenes were more naked, like the dissolved clothes in the cow predator. Some scenes are a bit too claustrophobic for me. All of this is subjective, of course.

Carl

Page 34 and 35 made me uneasy to think about if i were in his shoes. of course also if i were in his shoes i wouldnt of pissed a GIANT NEKO off while standing on her snoot :P also reminded me of a song, Completely Miserable by Lit. Pamela Anderson does some prime vore in that music video :D

Vixsune (ThatSlyFox)

I'm very much liking these pages! Elorie is the most adorably hapless predator ever. I love how she keeps trying to be cooperative, and things just keep going further down the predator avenue. x3

PrinnyDood

haha XD

Karbo

hehe I'll make sure to increase that when I put the colors ;)

Karbo

we'll see ^^ I'm sure one of them at least will survive ( besides Elorie )

Karbo

;3

Karbo

hard for them to carry it at this size ! XD

Karbo

that's right it's not something I touched so far ( I think ) ^^

Karbo

it can create some pretty intense situations yeah ^^

Karbo

All we need is them to rub her belly and she purrs like a neko 😂😂😂. Damn she cute doe. At the end she's going to be like You know What, I see why giant predators love to eat lol

Heheh. I'm loving how innocent Elorie is! I think the reason that she works so well for me is that some of the panels just look like she's practically begging for tummy rubs. For example, panel 3 of page 31, panels 1 and 7 of page 32, and panel 1 on page 33. >w<

vfan1155

Thank you ! :D

Karbo

Love the addition of oxygen. Love love love the burping and how it plays with thier supply. She is super cute. Early works are early so I can't say much for how I would prefer it. Your vision is so original that I really just enjoy waiting to see what happens next rather then expect and be disappointed or floored. Keep it up and you have a steady subscriber ou of me :)

Count Swinge

hehe content que ça te plaise ! :D

Karbo

ah yes good idea ^^

Karbo

yeahh he asked for it XP

Karbo

this is the first time since Wem that i kind of hope they make it out ok

Nick2802

Yes good remark ! I'll make sure it's the case ;3

Karbo

She is just the cutest little (big?) thing!

Doc

Tout ça est superbe et j'en veux plus. Élorie est une pred grandiose qui pousse tous mes boutons, sauf celui sur les flat chests. J'ai plutôt hâte de voir ces neck bulges en HD!

Agora

One of my few points of criticism too :( . I also miss some pages like we had in "Check and Mate" and "A Princess Duty" that had fewer but bigger panels (sometimes only 3 per page) in which the predators are shown more clearly in full body view without having to sacrifice too much detail due to other panels because there are not that many. If preys are also included I think big panels often work better to illustrate the level of scale and certain aspects of vore (like the stomach cutaway views I enjoy so much for example) .

JohnboyX

Poor Elorie only wants to do things right yet everything only gets more chaotic and troublesome for her ^^; . She even has good control over her instincts seeing how she really didn't want to swallow the bullyI but of course he had to do something stupid :D .

JohnboyX

Quick! Just have her down a bottle of Ipecac syrup! O3O

GizmoChinasa

Another thing you could do is to have the two people in her stomach being thrown around as Elorie drops back onto the ground.

Signe (dcvfgb1234)

I love how you include the limit air supply in the stomach and have her need to swallow air for them to breath. Perhaps have the stomach quite smaller before she swallows air. I.e. have it not really have much air and not much room for them to move before she swallows air thereby expanding the stomach.

Signe (dcvfgb1234)

Well it's looking awesome so far! A dressing the realistic side of vore concerning oxygen. I wonder how that will play out with fans?

David Dent

Looks great! I love how her little trick to get back at the angry guy accidentally goes to far. However, I do think that it would be more consistent with the first pages of the storyboard if the shrunken characters were somewhat smaller then they are now.

Arzok

I love accidental vore, especially if the pred knows the prey. Looking forward to seeing this story

McKay

Still sad there's no floor level anything, was so hyped to see her full body design with the sandals and not even a low angle like A Princess's Duty or anything

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