Warlock: Book 2 - Preview Chapters - Prologue
Added 2024-11-23 15:08:28 +0000 UTCA day early and not the next chapters, but the prologue.
I went round and round a bit in my head with this, debating whether to include it, include it as a prologue, epilogue, or even an inline interlude.
I think I'm going with prologue, and there will likely be some changes to this. I'm a little unhappy with the amount of exposition in the first scene, so may give some thought to that.
Comments
Having a witch and a warlock both abandoned by parents is weird. A baby witch kidnapped and then hidden inside the orphan system while waiting for her to come of age - oh yes. If true that would have interesting ideas for how Morgan was stolen; or was she sold so her mother would generate despair? If she goes to Willomere would she be recognised and (re)claimed by that coven / family separating Morgan and Noah before joining Noah's coven. Honestly I spent all of the 1st book wanting to see Noah recognise Morgan as a witch, and in the 2nd book she is still a focal point of drama for me above other witches.
Silent Monk
2025-03-13 15:19:50 +0000 UTCThis should be the last chapter of book 2 not the first chapter but it does answer all my questions about Felicity And it gives you a really good foreshadowing things to come I don’t know where you intend for the second book to end, but if it ended with Noah showing up to pick her up and her not being there and starting to freak out and then bam hits you as the last chat to book 2 It will leave us with a cliffhanger, but it would be a really good cliffhanger
Zachary Blevins
2024-11-25 14:29:21 +0000 UTCI like it where it comes in doesn't really matter much to me, I do like learning more about Felicity and her early life. I would hope that she becomes a member of the coven or family while also she doesn't sleep with Noah. Yes she is over 400 but having spent most of that time as a cat I would view it more of a stunted mental growth. I could be wrong for me though it's doesn't sit right. Also more side stories of Felicity and Mel would be really cool like how they meet and what not.
John Curtis
2024-11-24 17:18:24 +0000 UTCI think it’s great!
Jim Payne
2024-11-24 06:06:29 +0000 UTCDepending on where this book ends this might make a good epilogue. If the book ends with Noah picking up Morgan the day she is kicked out of Foster care and both of them being confronted by the Fae this would work well after that.
nicholaus perry
2024-11-24 06:04:17 +0000 UTCI like this but there's too much conflict to unpack in the next book or even two books book one was action packed but none of those conflicts resolved and this piles on top of that its too much
James A. Murphy
2024-11-24 04:20:08 +0000 UTCI liked it as is, just conscious of the danger of piling mystery box on mystery box without payoff. But for a prologue it’s good if it resolves in the same book.
Michael Pokorny
2024-11-24 02:33:49 +0000 UTCMuch also depends on what the book is about. If the book is about Morgan, then it seems to me that the prologue is the best choice—or at least early. If the book doesn't reach that part of the story, then it seems better to include it later on. So much we don't know. 😁
Mason Nyx
2024-11-24 02:16:05 +0000 UTCI was wondering how Sam realized a Witch was present at the meeting with Morgan before she even got close but Felicity with her cat senses never noticed while being petted by Morgan I am unsure about this being a prologue in front of the chapters where Morgan meets Mel. I think Morgan being slowly introduced to Mel and magic without the impeding [The Fey's plan] hovering over the situation feels better. This might work better as an interlude.
Jesse
2024-11-24 01:35:41 +0000 UTCI think the level of exposition is completely reasonable. Prologues tend to have more info in them, and it sure doesn't feel like an info dump.
Mason Nyx
2024-11-24 00:41:18 +0000 UTCTend to agree. Noteworthy freeback in my opinion.
Teis Falskog
2024-11-23 22:59:27 +0000 UTCThat explains the mystery of how they were undetected... Now there's a whole new mystery :)
Mike G.
2024-11-23 18:05:38 +0000 UTCI really like it. I think that it might read better as an interlude later in book 2. The concern that I have is that you give a lot away at the start that kills some of the mystery of Felicity that Noah and Sam need to discover, along with introducing a potential adversary in the fae. As far as I can recall, you haven't introduced them yet.
Richard Cartwright
2024-11-23 17:17:22 +0000 UTCI really like that chapter. It makes the explanation of Morgan being missed so much better, and makes things so much richer. And confirms my thoughts about who the person Aurora had the message for is! (Noah is too much a "stupid boy" - to quote Sam - for me to take as reliable - for now!)
Jesse
2024-11-23 16:11:54 +0000 UTCYay, early morning treat!
Kato
2024-11-23 15:15:21 +0000 UTC
