The Intro, Reworked a Touch
Added 2023-10-30 01:15:36 +0000 UTCHere it is, the expanded introduction to Out of Cruel Space.
I've moved some things around skipped others. More along the ideas of bundling everything together properly.
For example, Love and Longing will be standing on it's own, maybe with Not Exactly Hidden mixed in later.
Your Comments, Advice and any Summaries are appreciated. The really good ones will be used as little defining blurbs, like you'd get on the cover of a book.
Comments
Thanks
Kyle Kent
2023-10-31 02:05:38 +0000 UTCPage 12-Miles refers to his rifle as his baby. It's a hold over from the very first draft where he talks more in depth about the rifle, but it's given here with no context and it's a bit confusing without the prior knowledge
Nick
2023-10-30 22:07:00 +0000 UTCI really like how the new information about events fills in gaps about stuff that was only briefly mentioned before.
Bob's your uncle
2023-10-30 07:48:15 +0000 UTCWell Anyways i remember starting to read this while I was still over seas and ive greatly enjoyed it. I also appreciate some effort actually going into the rank structure. So many stories have high ranking people interacting with the lower enlisted where if yours was written like theirs admirals would be leading troops as a squad leader. Thanks for actually caring about how the story is written and I look forward to what you will write in the future.
Speedsaber
2023-10-30 01:38:07 +0000 UTCWe all have our gifts, and to be frank I spent fifteen years writing all over the place and pushing myself all over the place before I really landed in this.
Kyle Kent
2023-10-30 01:31:54 +0000 UTCIll be honest the fact you have daily updates where writing a thousand word essay for myself sucks is absolutely mind boggling.
Speedsaber
2023-10-30 01:27:08 +0000 UTC
