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Added 2024-01-20 18:43:44 +0000 UTCErick stared up at Young Erick Flatt from 1997
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Hmm... that disease was rather malevolent and it came from red china, coincidence, I think not!
Alimaeus
2024-01-25 02:46:52 +0000 UTCThanks
Thando Nkadimeng
2024-01-23 16:18:19 +0000 UTCOh gods COVID killed all the magic users
bbk
2024-01-23 09:53:10 +0000 UTCEstáblishiment of history is important. Really done well. Even in this world you can be assassinated from your past in the present. Establishing what happened in the past is good defense against that. I really liked it. I think people may think that this all wasn’t meaningful enough because it didn’t take that long, even though 30 years of effort take place. You just got to remember that character journeys and readers journeys can be different things. So if the reader doesn’t go along for the ride, they won’t appreciate the journey. I liked it a lot though.
luckeybrady
2024-01-22 07:29:35 +0000 UTCTechnically, yes. But as we did not really go on the journey with him, it felt like nothing - just the time it takes to read this 1 chapter. I'm not saying the chapter was bad, but I think in later edits the story would benefit from taking more time into thinking about how to make his Fae transition more impactful. There was a lot of lead up to this major point, but it kinda fell flat. The off script stuff never really works in my opinion.
Overclocked
2024-01-21 17:47:52 +0000 UTCWait, what was the point of Ganymede if Erick just appeared in his own past? Is he Fae now or still becoming Fae? And if he already created the House of Reason why didn't he find magic users on his Tokyo jaunt? Does the House hide itself during that time to cause it's own birth?
jj
2024-01-21 13:26:34 +0000 UTCThe last time I read a time paradox done this well was The Seven Murders of Evelyn Hardcastle. You've hit it out of the park Arcs!
jj
2024-01-21 13:16:56 +0000 UTCSo mind bendy good. Now that he has established his past. It's time to established his future!
Spark
2024-01-21 02:28:25 +0000 UTCI don't want to imagine how much work making sense of all that was before writing it lol. All the recursive events and still keeping the story cohesive and such. Solid work.
Emily Gurnavage
2024-01-21 02:22:22 +0000 UTCIt did take Erick about 30-ish years to get back to Veird.
Arcs
2024-01-21 01:28:10 +0000 UTCThere is always a price for power. Time, money, lost relationships, etc. But there is a price, and Erick got off with a light tap on the shoulder. It just made his transition to Fae seem less substantial than it could have been. It wasn't bad, it was just that as a reader it felt too easy.
Overclocked
2024-01-21 01:17:54 +0000 UTCHe pretty much has sacrificed his old identity though. And the idea of paying a price for power sounds rather Malevolent lol.
James Skinner
2024-01-21 01:14:24 +0000 UTCHoly wow, what a way to continue the Narrative! Sidestep his own defeat through making it just not happen. This is wild!
Connor Alexander
2024-01-21 00:55:18 +0000 UTCI think the important thing to remember is that *anything* other than permanently destroying Nothanganathor is just treating "symptoms" rather than the "disease". We saw in this chapter that Erick tried to fully remove Malevolence from Earth multiple times throughout history and it never worked. This is a war that's being fought throughout time and throughout the multiverse at this point. Only once it's been Ended can Erick actually fix and Establish things so they stay that way.
Matt H
2024-01-21 00:08:52 +0000 UTCThank you
4eyed-god
2024-01-20 23:51:21 +0000 UTCI'm with you on "It was also a little annoying that Erick kept doing symptom work rather than disease work." Him just letting Malevolence flow about felt weird.
Heru Kane
2024-01-20 23:45:01 +0000 UTCOh interesting so he didn’t manifest wings like the War Fairy or manifest other aspects of Benevolence. Thanks for answering Arcs.
Zero
2024-01-20 23:26:16 +0000 UTCThat's great to hear! good luck on your own writing~
Arcs
2024-01-20 23:23:37 +0000 UTCSame appearance as usual. 2 meters tall, Hollywood muscular, short black hair, white eyes, usually wearing mage robes that are predominantly white with black accents.
Arcs
2024-01-20 23:23:15 +0000 UTCGood chapter, but I really thought there would be a price to becoming fae for Erick. Yea he ate his "heart" last chapter, but that was just something that was created in 1 chapter and us readers had no real emotional attachment to it. I figured in the past he would have to sacrifice Jane, or his old identity or something substantial in order to be reborn as a true extra-dimensional higher being. That at least would show us he had the resolve to do whatever it takes to make the universe better. This seemed too easy.
Overclocked
2024-01-20 23:21:52 +0000 UTCLoved the entire chapter. Erick Establishing himself in order to properly become Fae is interesting. The mechanics that you are going for kinda make sense but also not really. But that’s time-travel for you. In terms of the first half I think it really ties into what Erick is trying to be and who he wants to continuously become/became. Tho Jane being harmed and as a result of Margret’s Malevolence is such a mind bend. Ultimately it’s kinda interesting to see how a wizard time war works. Quick question tho can you give a description of Erick’s current appearance in detail post Faedom. Thanks for the chapter and I can’t wait for next Saturday,
Zero
2024-01-20 23:19:58 +0000 UTCErick could have changed the entire world, yes. But he was being selfish, for his own past, and the future. He did lay down plans for treating the world, but they were not to come to fruition at that time and they were hidden from the reader (this is one of a few different plot points that have been tucked away from the reader, on purpose; all of the various plans for the actual war, what about Kirginatharp's Dragon Curse, etc). tucking plot away like that doesn't always work in a web serial, but it's what I'm doing here for these events. thanks for reading! hope you like what's to come ~
Arcs
2024-01-20 23:19:52 +0000 UTCI loved the last half of the chapter but the first half didn't really work for me. It was a lot of Erick pretending to be other people while helping or interacting with other people for like 6k words or something. It just felt extremely verbose for a bunch of interactions we really don't care about. It could've been done in a much more condensed way and achieved the same feel without feeling like reading a completely different slice of life story. It was also a little annoying that Erick kept doing symptom work rather than disease work. I fully understand the point of the scenario, because Malevolence doesn't go away cleanly if you just purge it, but it was still annoying to watch him deal with metaphorical tumors in metaphorical legs while the heart is pumping them out to the rest of the body still. He justifies saving Jane from the Red with his own Malevolence, but he doesn't do that to literally anyone else, even her mom. I get that he really doesn't want to touch Malevolence, but isn't his Truth all about creating a better future for all? Shouldn't he be willing to touch Red to create a better everything for everyone? (Not to use it to solve problems, but to disassemble infections he sees via Red) Also just a minor note that it seems very silly he's worried about campus cops from a perspective of getting in big government trouble rather than a minor tongue lashing. It isn't rare to forget your wallet in your walk of shame after a crazy night. Let alone just a regular day. There would hardly be any repercussions besides getting a talking to. Anyways, just some minor criticisms I felt when reading through the first half of the chapter. I thought the second half was everything I could've wanted it to be. Desperately looking forward to next chapter's events.
Patchumz
2024-01-20 23:06:13 +0000 UTCFanstastic Chapter as always
Adrian
2024-01-20 22:45:11 +0000 UTCI'm not exactly sure why, but Rozeta is easily one of my favorite characters in this story. Every time she shows up these days I smile.
Matt H
2024-01-20 22:25:59 +0000 UTCThis chapter was so, so good.
David Bailey
2024-01-20 22:24:05 +0000 UTCI'm going to need to re-read this and the previous book to really get my head around some details of infinity and it's expressions, establishment, fae-dom, etc.. and I'm 100% looking forward to it. When I was Young Me, I made some attempts at writing fiction. When I eventually get round to putting some ideas together again, Ar'Kendrithyst is automatically going to be a huge influence on the result.
Redpike
2024-01-20 22:14:18 +0000 UTCHappy Birthday, Erick and Jane! I knew Jan 20 was important for some reason!
Drendude
2024-01-20 20:59:47 +0000 UTCI'm with you! I want good things for George!
Heru Kane
2024-01-20 20:54:06 +0000 UTCI choose to believe that George and his lover got cured and did great things with there lives and not another statistic.
twentytoo
2024-01-20 20:29:35 +0000 UTCI appreciate also that at this point your story has developed a wizardly immunity to plot holes. Any issue, anywhere, and you've just gotta look for Future Erick sitting on a bench nearby wiggling his fingers.
Rayse
2024-01-20 20:19:43 +0000 UTCThis part was always planned in the way that one plans very large things; a bullet point written down and a thought that swirled for a while, but not actually fleshed out until I got there.
Arcs
2024-01-20 20:16:33 +0000 UTCAmazing. Loved the diving into paradoxical time magic, and Erick stabilizing his own timeline. Was it always planned to be this way, Arcs? Or did the story just kinda develop into this?
Rayse
2024-01-20 20:15:09 +0000 UTCSoooo good! Sooo very good. I liked this journey here. I like how you empowered all Ericks and did not depower our Erick - he still made himself, he still brought them to Veird. All very good stuff. My only wish was us getting more info on the side powers. That would have been cool. But I love the Mark of Benevolence.
Heru Kane
2024-01-20 19:56:24 +0000 UTCWho knows?! hehehehe
Arcs
2024-01-20 19:50:16 +0000 UTCLoved the chapter. Question though. Is Deborah Debby from Erick's slice of infinity the same way Debby was a Jane from Solomon's?
Christopher Talbot
2024-01-20 19:48:32 +0000 UTC
