Predators of Denali - Page 9 HD
Added 2017-11-12 02:56:15 +0000 UTCPage 9, as mentioned, covers a more 'formal' meeting between Bailey and Tala. Bit of insight to their character and thoughts. As I said in the sketch upload, took a bit of a breather for full-page art as opposed to the tons of frames in recent pages. I think I overdid it with cramming stuff in there. Anyway, I hope you like this finalized page for now!
Comments
You know, something i figured out about page 7 was that Kiga didn't even give Tala the option to train and try to learn how to hunt and fight after the climb. Instead he just forcing her to be married and raped.
Antoine Davis
2017-11-15 15:29:18 +0000 UTCIt might be a little overdone, yes. This may have been better split into panels across two pages. The main issue with a conversation dump like this is that we have a *single* image of Bailey and Tala's expressions, but the dialogue definitely implies they both go through a range of reactions and tones. So we don't see Tala sheepishly smirk at Bailey's "chief fuckface" comment, for example. Don't be afraid that you're not getting to the fucking/action right away. I get that the Predators comics are meant more primarily as erotica with a story to support it, but that story is still important. The phrase I always see for comics is "write to the archive reader, not the update follower." You want this to flow well as a complete work. Making us wait a little bit longer so a meaty conversation like this can play out more fluidly is not a bad thing. That criticism aside, I do like their interaction here. Bailey is already dipping a toe into her protective/motherly role for Tala, without even knowing she's going to be her guide. Tala is loosening up a little and relaxing, and earning someone she can fall back on in an unfamiliar place. It establishes a positive connection for our timid little pup, and I'd like to see how she intentionally turns to that outside of just being partnered with Bailey.
Volpethrope
2017-11-14 18:06:00 +0000 UTCShes the big blowjob giving sister we all needed in highschool. wait. Not like that... i mean. nevermind
August kowalski
2017-11-13 08:23:30 +0000 UTCWhat I would say if I were there? "LOL good pep talk, man, good pep talk. XD"
Kraton Haddock
2017-11-12 13:44:52 +0000 UTCWoohoo, good!
FluffKevlar
2017-11-12 08:19:47 +0000 UTCLooking good, man! ;3
Korben the Dragon
2017-11-12 06:25:01 +0000 UTCLooks great, glad that they're starting to have a conversation. Hope you take some of my advice, also sick backgrounds.
Antoine Davis
2017-11-12 04:23:23 +0000 UTCCasual conversation and a bit of pep talk. Really enjoying pages like this one and it's good for story too. Nice work Fluff :D
SVKwolf
2017-11-12 03:30:25 +0000 UTCMan, Bailey's a babe.
KCDodger
2017-11-12 03:16:57 +0000 UTCI like Bailey already.
Heretic Morgan
2017-11-12 03:01:52 +0000 UTC
