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Chapter 6 - Ties That Bind (Script 99% - SPOILERS)

I realize I totally forgot to share the current 99% script with you all! Apologies!


Below the break is a TON of spoilers for this chapter! But if you're curious about where this is all going, or want to see the script for the next few pages this is where you can read it!

Is it perfect? No. 

Will I make more changes? Probably (I can't help itttt).

Am I happy with it this time? Yeah. I think I am. It's intense, it's kinder, and I think it's hot. I hope you do too.

Page 11 still needs tweaking... I might just edit it on the page though. See how it hits with art next to it.











Context for the rework:

Like 3(4?) months ago I sat down to trim down the fat on my previous script. I also wanted to inject more moments where Nick could pull the cord on everything. I felt like I'd written him into a trap last time, and I really wanted the play talk to hit hard, but not feel inescapable. Owen's not fucking around, but if Nick says it's too much I wanted it to be crystal clear that he can say stop.

During the rework, I also tried my hand at writing a version where Judy was AWAKE for the whole escalation chat. But ultimately putting another voice in the mix thinned out Owen and Nicks, and it almost felt like it removed some of Nick's agency. With Judy AFK - we can see Nick really open up and ask for these things of his own volition. Maybe I'll share that version some time too? Though it would need to be cleaned up a tad bit more. 

Anyways, here goes, hope you like it!

Spoilers ahead!

Please don't flag typos it's ok for them to be in here! I correct that stuff as I go.





START

Page1

We see an open door and a dark room. This is Owen's apartment (jointly shared with another who isn't here this night)

We hear sex noises coming from the open door, as we see a tops-no-bottoms Nick sporting a hard-on (or an untouched semi?), opening the fridge. Maybe we're just seeing his lower half-lit in the dark. In the background:

J - Oh fuck oh fuck. It's so much... it's - I don't think I can take any more.

O - Mmmfph. Just breathe let it set in. That's it. Good girl-

J- Oh fuck oh fuck oh ---!

O - MMpph!

Judy starts to cum, and maybe so does Owen. Maybe with a howl or a squeak?


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Page2

We're still with Nick in the kitchen, as he retrieves two beers. Maybe we see him crack a grin as they crescendo. But it's quickly followed by a moment of silence from the bedroom, and Nick perks his ears up in curiosity at the silence.

From the room;

O desperately - ...Ah?

... NICK!? Help!

We see a panicky N spring toward the door, bottle caps flitting in the air behind him with a 'Fwip!'

Nick enters the room and so does the camera. We now get to see the full picture. Judy is atop of Owen, twitching and trembling, maybe her leg is doing that rabbit-thumping action. Owen's knot is deep in her, he's got a 'what's happening' face of surprise.

O frantically - Nick! I just... we did it, the get-hard-in-her-slow-tie... and-and she's gone all...


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Page3

If we have space: we show Nicks expression go from sweaty '!!!!' to 'relaxxxed'

Nick leans in looking at the tie, maybe his hand goes down to pull her cheek up. He's not frantic anymore, instead, he's a bit sly looking, Judy's all quivering and out of it.

N-  Oh no. This is Bad.

O - !!! Wha-Really?!?!

Nick shrugging or maybe looking at Owen with concern, beers still in hand.

N - Yup. You've broken her. She's broken.

O - ?!? Nick - What- I didn’t mean to!? It's our first- and-


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Page4

Owen looks up to see Nick looking down at Owen with a big ol teasing grin. Maybe tongue cheekily sticking out.

Owen catches on. His face sobers up a bit. Or Judy moans/purrs in happiness and it breaks the moment.

O - Right. I see... You're pulling my leg. Of course.

N breaks out in a grin and passes Owen his beer. Owen’s got :/ face.

N - Haha. I couldn't help it! Watching YOU wriggle for a change? priceless!

O comedically - Asshole. So, she's all right?

N - Oh yeah. Don't sweat it. It’s something that happens when she comes super, super hard. Freaked me out the first time, too. Till she woke up and wanted to go again. And again. And again.

Just ride it out a while...

A close-up of the tie. Or Owen patting the bed:

N - That tie of yours must be something else.

O - Grunt - Yeah, no kidding - reeeeeal tight in here. <3 ... Sit down with us?


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Page5

Nick happily flops down next to the pair, on the bed (***sitting on edge of the bed).

O with a grin: Been a while, right? Since your last tie?

N with a sheepish grin - Ah… yeah… it takes a lot of work so we usually save it for special occasions.

O - Sure. Nothing more intimate than being tied to the one you love right?

N - haha, yeah, it's... it's a big deal.

We have a pause, maybe the camera rests on Owen's balls and we see them moving/ tightening and flexing. Or we see them both have a 'swig' moment before Owen cracks open. Maybe Owne is chill and playful when he asks.

O - You a happy cuck, Nick? This all still doing it for you?

N sits up(?), hand behind neck as he looks to the side-

N - ... Oh! Yeah - yeah! It is....

N- But-

N looks at his hard (untouched?) cock, if we see Owen he's a bit concerned/supprised at that 'but'

N - -honestly?...


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Page6

N looks up just a smidgen or to the side - I have been wanting to talk to you about stepping things up a bit. You know, with me, us… cucking.

O looking pleased as punch - Oh! Nick! Haha, you had me worried for a sec... Step things up, huh? Spoken with the little lady about this?

N nervously - Ha, at length. She’s been wanting to go harder too and has been bugging me to talk to you about it for a while.I'm not sure why I've been so gun-shy about it.

Past Judy boopin him on the nose; -whenever you feel ready.

Just talk to him ya goof.

O - Ha, her side of things is easy! But I get it, shit’s scary.

I'm glad you’re speaking up. All this?-

Owen fingers a motion to symbolize all three of them

-only works as long as we’re talking

O - So, talk, Nick. Tell me.-

N - ...?

O - Tell me how bad you want me to fuck you up.

N - Urp!!


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Page7

The exterior of the building;  we see the goings-on outside, full-page; maybe 2/3rds? It helps the moment land and adds a level of ‘what's happening in here is intense by contrast to the usually of normal life outside.

N: ha ha- fuck.

N - Okay.

deep breath

N -  I love what we have, what we already do. But remember ages ago, in the coffee shop? You talked about wanting to do these… intense things with us, with me. Humiliation, denial, chastity...Cucking-as-a lifestyle.


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Page8

Maybe close up of Nick fiddling with his ring

N - You put a bug in our ears. What we’ve been doing has been so much fun and amazing. But. Knowing that there’s something more for us three to explore. Other uncrossed lines…

Owen: Mmm - go on.

Nick: We can see it, you pull your punches, you hold yourself back. And, knowing it’s right there… this darker side of you. This thing we shouldn’t wantit’s all Judy and I think about…

O petting Judy who purrs - Aw, shit - you two are amazing. I mean, your not wrong, I’ve held back.  I care about you guys a whole lot, and that kind of play takes so much… trust, you know? I didn’t want to damage what we already had going. I don’t ever want to hurt you two.


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Page9

N- Well… You could be... meaner... meaner to me, I mean. More entitled. Entitled to my wife, entitled to pushing me around and out of the bedroom. More YOU, more Alpha, more Bull.

Owen: [after considering]  Fuck… you sure Nick?

I can do that. Hell, I want to do that. I am hungry for it.

But, only if you're sure. Only if I can trust you both to speak up and say “stop” when you need it.

N - I’m sure. You can trust me, I’ll speak up. And you know Judy will too

O - Haw! I’m tellin’ ya, this rabbit don’t know the meaning-

N: But. Owen? I do really want you to fuck me up. I really do.

There's a pause. Owen is both shocked and beaming. He's genuinely taken aback.


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Page10

N- But I mean we don't need to-

O - You're not allowed to tie with your wife -ever again-.

N - Urp!!!

O - Sure, sure, we’ll run it by the wife when she wakes up and I’m sure together we’ll come up with some more ideas too - don't you worry. But, for right now, as your Bull, I’m telling you, Ties? No longer for you.

N - j-just like that?!?!

O - Just like that. The last time you two tied is now the last time you two tied.

N poofing a bit with excited/scared energy.

O - How’s that? Warmer?

N - haha ha I- I...

N - ...yes! I just… wow... that’s a big deal and-

O - Ha, not for me it isn’t. Cuck.



Page 11 maybe 12 also?

N shrinking a bit, he's off-balance, stunned, excited, and ill-prepared for this, but Owen continues. With a low growl. Maybe, we see Owen tenderly rubbing the small of her back as she purrs. Or the close-up of the tie gets messier as he talks?

O - You wanted Humiliation, Denial, Chastity, a lifestyle? Done.

From now on, Nick Wilde, this Pussy? Doesn’t belong to you anymore. Hell, it hasn't for a while now, and I’m expecting to see that recognition in your eyes.

Visuals; Owen talks quietly as he pulls her head up and gives it a lick/kiss and she coo’s a top of him. We whip back to a Nick who's feeling so many buttons being pressed. Either that or draw a fiction of what OWEN wants?

O- Sure. You can visit - have some fun - as long as you take care to never tie.

But know that it’s only because I allow it.

You’re to know your place in this pack: in and out of this bedroom. You'll be my supporting act, cuckold. A footnote to my story.

You’re going to watch me give her what a cuck-like-you-can't. And then? When I’m done? You’ll fucking thank me for it.

The room is still and quiet. It’s a wide empty shot. The moment breathes.

O - Understood?

N - I- I- Yes. fuck-yes.



O - Good!

Good boy! Proud of you pup, and don't you worry, I won’t hold you to nothin’- yet. We’ve still gotta loop our girl in and chat things out when our dicks aren’t so hard. But I do hope that helps with your-

Owen points at Nicks leaking twitching cock

O- little problem.

N- !!!

Owen takes a swig of his beer, while Nick sits in shock, his cock dripping.

After his swig;

O - Now, how about some thanks? I just gave you a treat -     (or maybe 'gave you what you so kindly asked for?')

N looks shrunken but still hard - Fuck, I mean... T-thank yo-   (make it sound more Nick?)

O - No. Do better.

N - ???



O spreads his legs wide -

I bet if I ordered you to pay my ass and cock lip service, clean up my mess, as your Bull, you’d do it, wouldn’t you? Judy's implied you might like it as much as I would.

O- But where’s the fun in that? No, you’ll gonna crawl between my legs and thank me with that lovely tongue of yours, of your own volition, ‘cause you know it's where you belong. Cause it’s your place in this pack.

Visual of a stunned Nick

O - Say no, safeword out of it - I won’t judge. But know this; this is the closest you get to a Tie, and sure as hell the closest you'll get to any pussy tonight.

O- Here, I’ll sweeten the pot: you can have my permission to jerk off while you do it, too.

The camera sits on Nicks's face, a complex of emotions. Maybe the camera keeps closing in over the course of a few panels, as time progresses in silence.

The composure in Nick breaks and he puts his beer down.

With a gulp he gets onto his knees and starts crawling forward, sweating.

O - ...

We see Nick's snoot get closer. We hear his heartbeat

O - ...

The heartbeat is louder, as we see Nick's tongue tentatively reach out and touch balls.

O - Atta boy.

The camera pans out as we see a whimper come from Nick, while his tail wags or twitches.

O - No rush now, take your time pup.

Mmmh!

Nice and easy. That’s it, good pup.



Time passes. ← this usually takes a great deal of space to depict. Maybe just fade to black up above?



Judy stirring awake, atop of Owen

'MMmmmmhhhh ah’'

PatsPat’s his chest in contentment; a physical ‘good job’ - he gives her a happy grin from above

J - Heck, I must have blipped out for a sec.

O - Heh/chuckle. Just for a few minutes. How you feeling beautiful?

J - Full. Fuck. -So full-, and -gods that feels good. What is-

Nick!?!?

We see his tongue on her ass/seam between Owen and Judy's messy mating licking with RELISH. His maw's all wet and sticky

O - Haw! Don't mind him. He's been busy cleaning up a few of our leaks.

J looking back at him in a flush.

J - Oh, -wow.- this is new…



She reaches back and runs a hand down through his ear/hair, maybe eliciting a happy whimper from Nick?

J - You look really good down there honey.

She turns around back to Owen and gives him a peck/rests her head on his chest in contentment.

J - I guess I missed out on something big, huh?

O - Oh just a few things… Don't worry, I'll fill you in.

J - Mmmm <3



The final page, just titled Aftercare!

We see all three nude, sitting at the kitchen bar, eating ice cream, looking disheveled. It's a silent love-filled page.

Maybe we see Owen with a big shit-eating grin, telling Judy about what was discussed. Nick is excitedly blushing. She's amazed and impressed with a 'really!!' face.

Owen squeezes them into a big three-person hug.

Maybe expand out to be a bit of banter? See how exhausted you are from so many pages. Extend if you have energy.



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Comments

ALSO - you could totally spin this into a QnA question; write it out as if you're an asker on their blog. Include a zootopian username and icon description and I can add it to my mega document. &lt;-- the higher tiers get to send me quests like this for me to pick over in between chapters!

Amadose

Just got back from a 2-week family trip! Sorry for the delay in replying. But whoa, so much great stuff here! Gosh, yeah your thinking is very much inline with mine. I really want to keep the intimacy there. Even if Nick starts to get denied more/chasity, or what ever - I don't want to take intimacy away from him. I just want them to have fun with the aspects of denial and control and such. I was thinking after this chapter we give Judy and Nick a short chapter of their own. Where Judy can talk a bit about her side of things: mostly the guilt at loving it all so much. And have them have an intimate moment (maybe they cheat against the 'rules' for a hot second - it would show that this is all play and can be broken at any point). As for your question about physical intimacy - we've alluded to Nick growing interested in that direction. Check out the last QnA: https://www.patreon.com/posts/56244914 I sort of figure he's nervous, to do anything 'gay' and is completely new to it all. But with a little bit of 'push' from Owen, he'll really grow into it all. While this series is about a cucking situation, I've always very much pictured it as a three-person-kink play; I really want Nick and Owen to have their own thing to explore, in addition to the other pairings. I think too as a creator I've just been getting more... Bi-curious to see Nick and Owne fool around too. So it's just stuff I want to explore =D

Amadose

I love it! My absolute favorite kinky comic, still always excited every time I see something new about it show up. The only thing that I would like to put out there is that I really hope you keep including physical intimacy between Nick and Judy, even with them going forward with this kink. And I don't mean vaginal intercourse or something like that, but stuff like cuddling while naked, Nick still being there while Owen fucks Judy, maybe even embracing her as Owen rails her from behind... The "cuck" getting completely cut out of those things (just sitting on a chair in the corner) is my least favorite part of the whole kink. Nick still getting physical intimacy from his wife (and his bull) are something that I hope keeps having a place in this relationship, and this comic series, even as they go forward with more extreme situations. Also, if I remember correctly, in this comic Nick has no previous experiences with doing anything sexual with a guy. Are there any plans of looking at how Nick feels about this escalating physical intimacy with a same-sex partner?

Bondrewd

Oooo I'd love to see/read a fan-fan-comic =D That would be super rad! So glad you're digging it! I feel pretty proud of it so far - even if the next few pages of art are gonna be scary to draw up!

Amadose

the script is really good and I can't wait to see more of what Judy thinks of these developments. I love how Owen draws a line between being a bull and showing he cares for Nick and Judy. Gives me ideas for fan fic based on your fan comic lol.

jim


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