Saturn Seven: Chapter 60

Many thanks! I feel exactly the same way as you. I always want to get rid of the repetition and away from the detail and move on with the plot. But then I rewrite and rewrite and I find that I do really like to flesh out just the same stuff slightly differently. That's just the way it happens. I got so desperate for plot, I even ventured into the occult. Those bits I really like, though. Hey, you know what, you've just made me notice I did it again in the next chapter I'm working on. Don't wanna spoil anything, but I erased a really intricate political sub plot with tons of world building for another random torture scene. Gods, give me some rope, I want to hang myself. Nice catch, I'll go back and rework and I'll really try to be more interesting. Massive thanks again. Cheers. P.S: How did you soldier through to chapter 60 when you already lost interest before?

So, it took me ages to gear up to leave a bit of feedback here. I can't imagine how you gather enough inspiration to create these huge chapters so (relatively) consistently - your muse must be working overtime! But I felt that this last chapter especially called for leaving something here, so here it is. If it's long and not particularly well articulated, apologies. I definitely put less effort into it than you put into your stuff! Overall, I am a big fan of your work. When I first stumbled upon saturn seven it really felt like a breath of fresh air in our niche of fantasy-story-telling genre. You managed to tap into a combination of sizey horror themes, power imbalance from different POVs and some horny stuff, all while telling a story with an actual plot, in an interesting setting with compelling characters. First dozen chapters had a number of awesome dark twists, further removing this story from typical sizey cliches, but still being engaging read. Not to mention the worldbuilding and the brutal, interesting setting. That being said, somewhere after the second dozen chapters, story started to lose me a little bit - it started to feel samey, like it's in a loop, ever repeating itself in a: "stumble upon a settlement" -> "find a reason to stomp everyone and everything in the settlement, spiced up with some lewdness" -> "proceed to do just that" -> "sprinkle some character development / world building stuff" -> "back to step 1, but up the ante for lewdness and violence a bit!" Now, that stuff is kind of the point of sizey stories, I'll be first to admit that. But it started to feel over-indulgent in a way? For me, it certainly lost that focus those first chapters had, that feeling like anything can happen, that any tiny character, as much as they feel like Main Character in the middle of their arc, can be erased from the story unceremoniously in an instant. I've seen folks complain that Dari is gone - I am astounded it took so long (and Steve must have bribed author to get plot armor of that quality). Anyway, all that rambling was to say, that Chapter 60 reads just like those first few chapters again, that I praised so highly. It was so very cool to get a new viewpoint to observe those same-y behaviors of the girls, making them fresh again. And it felt like anything goes, the stakes for tinies are high and the world is as unforgiving as ever. Maybe it's just my preferences talking: I am getting more of what I like, and I'm happy, just like that. But I felt like sharing, and I feel like you don't get enough feedback here for the quality of stuff you put out. So kudos. P.S. bonus for anyone who managed to read this wall of text: look up The Miller's Daughter by stegosaurus on giantessworld. It's very high quality writing in a setting that's somewhat similar (if only by how unforgiving it is). Sadly it looks like it's been abandoned - but what's there is good!

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