Scrapped Chapter 12
Added 2017-02-05 07:16:24 +0000 UTCAt only 3 pages before I threw it out, this isn't a very long or vorish one to start us off, but it shows what a very different direction the story was initially to take with Amelia.
She was going to meet Voyla or the Enclave or Brotherhood in this scene, but this plotline was ditched when I realized how absolutely forced it felt. There was no buildup to Amelia's outburst in this chapter about how she doesn't have any friends beside her brother. It just completely broadsides the reader, so it was bad. I just kept getting stuck and eventually junked the whole thing and started over.
I instead placed those concerns of isolation into Juno worrying about Amelia (after some much needed smut prior to that).
