bald space monkey update
Added 2021-02-09 01:00:02 +0000 UTCi had a lot of trouble with this one. the props were easy enough to find but i could not think of how to make their conversation feel natural and now too "wordy" if there are any typos in this one please let me know. and if the dialogue does not make sense
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the character i am eluding to is going to be recurring for quite some time. i have this idea in my head that jenny becomes a really good mechanic as the story progresses .....because i have (what i hope) is a really cool "toy" for her in the future
Hatton Slayden
2021-02-11 01:17:03 +0000 UTCright oh fixing
Hatton Slayden
2021-02-11 01:14:08 +0000 UTC.... no, okay i think you succeeded ❤️ riffing on David i would change the conversation as such: - 1st panel "...if you didn't..." (implying: "what made you change your mind?!") - 2nd panel "...without <u>proper</u> education..." (she did not exactly take a college or anything and she can get an instruction manual anywhere also i would stress the "propriety" of the education to be obtained, so he's basically telling her "let's do baby steps and try on unessential stuff first") also "modules" is the correct spelling in the bubble below. - 4rth panel "... get apprenticeship from..." as far as i know apprenticeship is a non-numeric word as it is a period of one's life spent in that but "an apprenticeship" could also work, but for certain it's spelled this way tho and not that letter salad there 😜
Simone Spinozzi
2021-02-10 13:12:21 +0000 UTCfirst panel: "...soooo if you don't want me working(rest of convo) Second panel: "No, I said I didn't want you to work on the ship 'without the proper' education." third panel: "...besides, the communications systems are the only ones I know how to fix. fourth panel: "once we get to port, I know a guy you can get a crash course in ship repairs with (this part depends on how long they'll be around for her to get that kind of education)
David Ewell
2021-02-09 04:29:18 +0000 UTC
