This Romantic World Page 78
Added 2019-05-24 02:05:22 +0000 UTCI think I wrote and re-wrote the dialog on this page more than any other page of the comic so far. I imagine there are many who would give a good hard "scoff" at the idea that I might be struggling with the writing for a porn comic, but I really wanted to get this conversation right, and I ended up obsessing to a perhaps unhealthy degree. (This wasn't helped by the dreaded "character on the right has to speak first" scenario that I found unavoidable in panel one. Still not sure if I handled those bubbles correctly.)
Since Abbey's scene, I've gotten a fair amount of comments about her and how Casey appears to have blown her off. I hope this page makes it perfectly clear why Casey's been reluctant to show up for that particular sleepover. But as always, I'd love to hear what you all think of the page, especially the dialog. I'm not afraid to make tweaks tomorrow morning if need be.
Comments
Dude you need to get a website built to host the comics.
InkstainedFox
2019-05-30 09:20:22 +0000 UTCMore like 199X... XX
MysteryStreet
2019-05-27 04:31:48 +0000 UTCI agree the first panel isn't ideal. It was that nightmare scenario where the character on the right simply HAD to talk first, and I couldn't find a way to manage the word balloons without things getting a little clunky. As for the rest of the scene, I hope you like how it goes! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:19:26 +0000 UTCGood to hear, I stressed about it plenty lol.
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:17:42 +0000 UTCThanks!
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:17:29 +0000 UTCHey thanks for noticing! I do my best to make these sex scenes seem like a natural culmination between the characters, hope you like how this one plays out! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:17:22 +0000 UTCGlad this is going over well for you! Despite how things look here, I don't plan on keeping Morgan exclusively lesbian. :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:16:07 +0000 UTCGlad to hear it! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:13:02 +0000 UTCAwesome! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:12:28 +0000 UTCI like working in canonical commission characters, but I'm not sure this party is the best place for them. OC's are generally pretty unique/colorful, and draw focus like a magnet on the page. When I snuck in Zoe/Zowka a few pages back, it seemed like 90% of the comments the post got were about her. Not exactly a bad thing, but I'm holding off on more cameos for now, until I can work them in in such a manner that they don't steal the show.
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:12:12 +0000 UTCIt's just a matter of time on that one. :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:08:29 +0000 UTCX.
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:08:11 +0000 UTC20XX.
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:08:03 +0000 UTCGlad to hear it! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:07:52 +0000 UTCThanks! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:07:42 +0000 UTCI might consider the colored balloons in the future, thanks for the idea! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:07:31 +0000 UTCWe'll find out in a few pages! :)
Reinbach
2019-05-26 21:06:44 +0000 UTCI feel like the first panel is too wordy, but every detail of the next four panels are close to perfect. You are the best at dialog and facial expressions by miles. The build up is incredible between the shower scene and this, I hope we get at least two pages of these two.
Mike M
2019-05-25 11:19:57 +0000 UTCNicely done scene and I think you got the dialog spot on for the situation
Stephen Rice
2019-05-24 21:08:51 +0000 UTCCasey's face on the fourth panel is truly amazing =) You're really good with eyes. Great job dude!
adam
2019-05-24 16:06:01 +0000 UTC¡WOW! Thing are getting intense :3 What i like about TRW (and SWITCH) is the way you build up the scenes. I mean, sure... sex is great, but when there is no background or something that "hooks" the reader it gets boring. In this case, i love how we get to see Casey has matured with the time... And, again... the way you use space and charactes says a lot of the scene. In the third panel Morgan looks in control, above Casey... i think it's because of what they were talking, but now Casey is on the top (literally hahaha). Sure they will have fun.
David
2019-05-24 14:33:30 +0000 UTCBuildup to this sex scene has just been excellent! I like how Casey actually layed out her expectations for this hookup... a definite character development since Switch. Think Morgan is drawn INCREDIBLY... her breasts are the perfect proportion, same with her ass. I REALLY look forward to many more sex scenes with her going forward... please tell me we'll be seeing her 1st with a guy soon! Also love the wetness details again 😀.
NomadicWanderer
2019-05-24 10:33:04 +0000 UTCCasey sure has matured a lot, good for her. Suspense is killing me in a good way.
S.R.R115
2019-05-24 07:26:15 +0000 UTCI think this page shows how hard you worked on it. I'm digging reformed Casey a ton.
Squid Hills
2019-05-24 04:53:21 +0000 UTCArgh the wait between these kills me. Its worth it though. I love this pairing and I'm hoping this nothing serious thing turns out to turn serious anyway. Also hopefully after this the party isnt over, still hoping my commission character Melanie gets a cameo lol. And Aiden I guess lol.
Malcolm Tent
2019-05-24 04:26:29 +0000 UTCI think you handled this page just right and I can't wait for the next page and just how Casey fuck Morgan. Still holing out hope for your first 69. :D
Bob Fink
2019-05-24 04:10:39 +0000 UTCThe dialogue seems very appropriate to Casey's character. She doesn't want to get anyone but she still loves to fuck. The question left on my mind is whether or not she's really read Morgan right. Or will Morgan get attached after her first time with Casey...
Slaughterbug
2019-05-24 02:50:30 +0000 UTCA bean Bag chair... what year does this take place?
MysteryStreet
2019-05-24 02:45:56 +0000 UTCIt sounds fine.
InkstainedFox
2019-05-24 02:27:32 +0000 UTCSome comics use different colored text for each character to reduce confusion. I see that in modern Marvel comics all the time. I think it looks fine and reads OK too. I like the panels, choice of CU, MED, angles & expressions as well. Sorry you obsessed about it, but it's nice work. (hoping business between these two last for several pages, hint hint).
frank barry
2019-05-24 02:26:45 +0000 UTCMorgan looks soooooooooo perfect in that undershot panel there- holy crapbiscuits. Absolutely gorgeous. And Casey kissing near her flawless breast is a great shot, too.
ScuzzBucket
2019-05-24 02:17:33 +0000 UTCLooks great!!
frank barry
2019-05-24 02:14:15 +0000 UTC
