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Hey I hear you and thanks for the feedback. My decision to cut so much was based on the idea that while the extra scenes would have helped the story be more cohesive, they weren't sexy in the least. Which is pretty much death for a porn comic. I'm going to hang on to the lessons I've learned here though. In the next comic I'll try to do a better job to make sure the eroticism is never at odds with the story.

Reinbach

I kinda understood, but to be honest it seemed a bit abrupt. I get wanting to do the timeskip, but I think it would have been better with a few pages of, I dunno, montage before we got back to it? We don't need everything, but this new one does feel like there is if not a full issue, maybe a half issue missing. I think part of it may be that there is a bit TOO much of a change from the last issue. We also barely know the rules of how Switch works and now she's gone.

The BRM

That's what I like about this comic. It's more than just porn. :)

Lord Washington

I promise you'll have the answer by the end. :)

Reinbach

I'm wondering what this means about switch. Is she really just some scytsophrenic hallucination or is she a real, tangible creature? And if she is, does that mean Casey is the host to a demon? A demon that is surprisingly the angel on her shoulder a good portion of the time.

Lord Washington

Oh ok. Casey more renegade for life while Switch goes with a paragon option. I guess we'll see if she's still willing to go with diplomacy once she returns.

WarSapphire

Well one thing I can answer without spoiling anything is that Casey blames Abbey because their feud was an ongoing source of contention between Casey and Switch. As with every fresh incident with Abbey, Casey and Switch would fight about how to handle it, with Switch arguing for diplomacy and Casey being in favor of face-punching.

Reinbach

Since there was a three month time-skip and given how their relationship was going before he was kicked out, it wasn't too surprising to find out Royce knew about Switch. It probably would have been a bit more surprising if I saw this page first before Bria/Mr.Fontaine and Sylvia gangbang fantasy. I'm pretty sure majority of your readers will put the pieces together given the dialogue and remembering this is a possibility with the 3 month time-skip. I'm just curious as to why Casey is blaming Abbey for the fight she had with Switch that caused her to disappear? Even though Casey's had a mean expression towards Royce, I wonder if she's actually happy she has him to go to for this. It's a bit odd she's going to him now after two months so, I'm wondering if she actually knows the general time of when Switch might be back or feel her return?

WarSapphire

That's a good point thanks for bringing that up, I should have Royce ask her how long Switch has been gone. I meant for it to have only been a day or so but that isn't clear here.

Reinbach

Thanks! Glad to hear this attempt at a new story telling mechanic went over well with you.

Reinbach

Subtle! XD

Reinbach

I'm with you on that. It was a big part of what influenced my decision to skip forward in time. I realized that I had set myself up for more story than anyone looking for a masturbatory aid would ever have the patience for. This is my first graphic novel so mistakes were bound to be made, but now I know not to make them next time.

Reinbach

No spoilers but I promise you'll have an answer by the end of the story. ;)

Reinbach

I certainly do have a lot to fill in here. As for the last thing you mentioned though, Switch wasn't so successful at calming down Casey last we saw her. Casey tackled Synthiria at that party and she and Switch didn't have a terribly pleasant conversation afterwards. To me it felt pretty natural that their relationship was headed this way. But I agree that more explanation is needed, and we can get to that in the next few pages. :)

Reinbach

I didn't remember that Switch had left Casey, hmmm I have a feeling when she comes back Casey and Royce are going to have a very hot time :D

Bob Fink

If we're in a new chapter, then no, you don't need to explain. Time has passed, things have changed and the reader should be reading for new things. Royce's reaction to Casey talking about Switch should tell the reader all they need to know. Definitely avoid 'as you know, Royce' dialog or excessive exposition. This is fine.

Royce's Haggar-like build makes this a great idea :). I wonder how Casey would handle Poison... IF YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN?? (hint: I mean her being railed by a lady with a penis!)

ScuzzBucket

Oh yeah, I explained below about one comic strip that's had that kind of an issue before- "explaining an important plot event after it's happened" is a good narrative trick to use, especially if you want to hurry it along or not dwell on the event as it happens, but MAN, some people take it the wrong way! And yeah... there's nothing worse than reading a comic for faps, and just having never-ending scenes of people yakking and yakking. And a weekly comic doing it? You'd get maybe 2 strips in before people were losing their shit :).

ScuzzBucket

Yeah, it's a tricky mix. Though there's tons of cleavage in the meantime, so it still totally works! You've done a good enough job with the characters that I'm interested in what's going on, even if the results were PG-rated and not involving Royce basting girls with gallons of sperm. That said, the time-skip has been a bit... I dunno if "jarring" is the right term, but Angelo's correct in that a TON of stuff happened, and we had to wonder how much of it went down. Since I knew you were going somewhere with everything (and Bria helped out with some narration and exposition... after being railed), it wasn't so bad, but the weekly nature of the strip meant that there were MONTHS going by without a full explanation of what went down, or any hint of Casey. I think a possible solution might have been a series of "still frame" comics featuring a Royce/Sylvia fight, Royce being booted out, the aftermath, etc. Just to keep potential confusion down. But honestly, the only problem I think I have is that we went from "Switch successfully calms down Casey and helps her out" to "Casey & Switch have had a huge fight and Switch has now left" very suddenly, without build-up. It seemed like Casey was actually getting HELP from, and listening to, Switch, and now things are different. But that can be explained away later. Also, boobs are awesome.

ScuzzBucket

... Actually, have you ever clarified whether Switch was some kind of spirit, or whether she was 100% in Casey's head? If not, do you plan on keeping it ambiguous?

Kyman201

I was able to quickly piece together that he might have been told off-screen, but it was still a shocker to me to realize "Wait, Royce knows about Switch? Okay then..."

Kyman201

I agree! Especially in a comic that only updates once a week. Like most things I'll use this type of thing judiciously, but it would be a nice writing trick to master.

Reinbach

I most certainly do! :D

Reinbach

Royce looks like he should be in "final fight". I'd totally love to see him pile drive casey, if you know what I mean :)

Danny

Are you sure about that? I mean, fe. if you take visual novels, there are those that are practically one sex scene after the other and those that barely have any or none at all, but there's also a big group of those with a good story, good characters and a nice amount of porn. I'm pretty sure there's an audience for that as well. I can't speak for everyone of course, but I like that Switch actually has a story and more than one-dimensional characters. It's one of the reasons I am a patreon (however small my contribution might be). Well this and the fact that you share your comic with everybody, not just your patreons. Like InCase or totempole which are both other online-porn comics writers on my patreon list.

Walter L.

You sure can piece it together, but that doesn't mean you won't get the comments about missing pages. Some people simply don't read carefully enough or just really want everything spelled out. I wouldn't mind you working like this though. There's such a thing as too much exposition, it can ruin the story flow.

Walter L.

I'll admit a good deal of what I had written ended up being cut to keep the action from grinding to a halt. One thing I've learned from writing Switch is the reason that in most porn stories, the premise is rarely more complex than "hunky delivery guy" or "busty teen has no rent money." It's because the more story you have, the more exposition you need. And that's not what porn readers are here for. I'll try to balance things a little better in the future.

Reinbach

This was a nice surprise. I didn't have any trouble figuring out that she told him during the time skip. It does seem like too much stuff went down during this time skip though.

Angelo