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What are you wanting to see in the elden lord fic? Please comment

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The dire wolves...give Ned one too. Also I think we should get a announcement that Ranni is probably with child. Maybe Rennala makes a appearance (her height would probably blow their their minds). Hell maybe others like Jar Bairn (since he's definitely Jon's cousin 😉), Nephili Loux and Rodericka would fight in too.

DeAngelo Ellis

I'm still hoping to see the Dire wolves

Payton Wilson

Definitely focus on more of Jon’s POV and also a little bit more context on his journey through the Lands Between.

VMA!23

More time spent with Jon as the central character Early on Jon always played a major role but as the story has gone on it’s become more about other characters reacting to him or westeroses reaction to Jon which I’m fine with in short bursts But when we’ve had several chapters where Jon doesn’t even appear then it becomes a problem We don’t even need to have very plot relevant chapters just Jon spending time with the cast is just fine but a lot of moments like that feel like they get skipped over in favour of seeing how dorne ir the river lands is reacting to Cersei and Jamie’s deaths when it’s really just not needed at all The focus of the story seems to be a bit everywhere lately so I feel like you should sort of being wbu thing back to Jon and the starks primarily Speaking of I really want to see Jon reveal he knows that Ned isn’t his father and that whole conversation is something I’m really looking forward to Seeing some more fragments of Jon’s journey in the lands between would be cool as well such as his first encounters with ranni and marika for instance A full talk between catelyn and Jon would be nice as well her guilt has been built up quiet a lot so I want to see a resolution to that maybe with Jon revealing he was never neds bastard to begin with Anyway I love this story it’s my favourite of your stories you write and I always look forward to new chapters but it could use some refocusing since it feels a bit all over the place right now

Aliata

See other eldritch beings appearing to face Jon, because the humans here are to weak and may make the story less interesting later down the line.

Goxo

Hopefully we don't see Jon get nerfed when he fights against mortal enemies

Erick Myrthil

More Jon povs

Jackson Stott


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