And so, here's the continuation of the previous "first half" with commentary. Also, I'll be uploading a redrawn version of p.11of the first half in color. Showing my past works has been a valuable learning experience for myself, but it's seriously so embarrassing~~~ (sweat).
Page 13
I made some adjustments to Hasegawa-san's face in the middle panel. In the original artwork from 2011, his face looked a bit harsh. If I were to draw it now, I would probably make his eyes and such appear a bit gentler.
Page 15
The background in the first panel is made using 3DCG. Since it's 3DCG, I reused the data I created on the second page. It was quite enjoyable to lay out the room while thinking about the personality of Inoue-kunand the kind of room he would live in. The upper right corner of the panelis a PC desk, but considering it's now 2023, with smartphones and tablets, I don't think I would place this desk there anymore. I imagine I would replace it with something else. Also, the LCD TV in the upper left corner, in today's world, you can get a bigger one for the same price... When it comes to drawing manga, I've heard that some artistschoose not to show smartphones to avoid giving a dated impression. Since smartphone designs change rapidly, they can quickly make a scene feel "old." Perhaps this applies to most household appliances.
Page 18
In the first panel, it's the "pornactor resembling Hasegawa-san" from the DVD, but the difference is that the real Hasegawa-sanis dark-skinned with tribal tattoos on his arms, while the pornactor is fair-skinned and tattoo-free. It's really like a trivia quiz... (LOL). These are the really small details to be mindful of when drawing manga, and I'm often surprised by how other artists pay attention to even the tiniest aspects when looking at their manuscripts. Going off on a tangent for a bit, there's this one particular artist who meticulously draws wrinkles at the level of 0.1 pixels on the face to convey subtle expressions. I seriously screamed when I noticed that.
Page 19-22
Naughty scenes. I can't help but think that if it were now, I would draw them with different compositions and expressions... (LOL). Surely they should be completely different now!!!!!!(I BELIEVE SO!!!)
Page 23
I made some changes, like Hasegawa-san's dialogue in the first panel. I wanted to make him look a bit cuter. When drawing manga, it's quite important to experiment and strive to make your characters more appealing. The choice of words, expressions, and overall direction all play a role in that. Of course, back then I was too focused on drawing the mangato think about it that much (LOL).
Page 24
One thing I'm currently reflecting on is that I couldn't fully express the passage of time from when Hasegawa-sanand Inoue-kunhad sex until now, specifically in these pages 23-24. Although the dialogue hints at the passage of time, in manga, it's also important to convey it through the "visuals" (yes, because it's manga!)In this case, I intentionally left this issueas a point of reflection from back then. I wonder what other solutions could have been possible... At the very least, if Hasegawa-san's attire on page 23 and Hasegawa-san's attire on page 24 were different, it might have helped resolve that issue a bit. Oh why didn't I notice that back then!!!!(laughs) Also, for the bottom half of page 23, depict several cityscapes to create a "quiet atmosphere" and convey that "there was nothingbetween them." Then on page 24, I brought in close-ups of Hasegawa-sanand Inoue-kunto intensify the happy emotions. Gosh, these things are alwayschallenging~~~! I think experimenting with these directing methods will continue as I draw manga in the future.
Also, here's the updated color illustrationfor page 11 of the main story. When I think about it, even back in 2011, why were the vibrator and electric masturbator still wiredin the original version...??? I'd love to ask my past self about that!!!(LOL). And now, in 2023, lta-da! Look at this, it's amazing! Vibrators and electric masturbators are wireless!(LOL)They're probably Bluetooth-enabled and can be controlled with a smartphone! I also drew a version of Hasegawa-san without theelectric jerk-off device.
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