Invader Syndrome Ch. 23 (Star Wars AU)
Added 2025-10-15 15:16:10 +0000 UTC(Every character depicted in the story below is a consenting legal adult over the age of 18)
A/N: Vader can’t keep getting away with this (he will though).
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Comments
Greatest televised villain (not evil) reference found.
MasBoss
2025-11-12 22:07:13 +0000 UTCI voted for Option #1...but I'd like to suggest the idea that Vaderkin isn't suddenly being sloppy while getting a sloppy and he's observed throatfucking Depa or even folding her in half in person BUT that someone gets an extra special look at them via the Tenple security cameras because they already watch over or out for Depa in secret so she can let go a bit while practicing in privacy. Dunno who to suggest...Aayla Secura, maybe? In any case, loved this chapter and can't wait to see the conclusion to Vaderkin's seduction of Depa next week! Though I do want to note a couple of points...firstly, when Vaderkin realizes Depa's motor is running from what he did to her with the Dark Side, you use "aroused" when I think "arousal" fits a bit better. Secondly? The bit of dialogue where Vaderkin explains to Depa what he wants with her feels a little bit clunky with how Vaderkin repeats himself before expanding the statement...but a second reading to parse out tweak suggestions shows you did have Vaderkin switch "from" to "for" when he made the repeat. So maybe just have him put a little more emphasis on the correction to make the reader's eye pick up the distinction easier?
Alun Lewis
2025-10-16 16:15:35 +0000 UTCI think it would definitely be more interesting if he got distracted, but I just don't see it happening without it being contrived considering Anakin's level of power/control. Depa would have to be a blowjob queen - nay, empress - for that to make any sort of sense and catch him off-guard for a second. That said, still voting for it out of sheer curiosity.
RichterQ87
2025-10-16 09:54:28 +0000 UTC
