year project (questions...)
Added 2024-06-11 16:13:32 +0000 UTCHello everyone, I hope you are well.
I have a much bigger project than what I normally do, which is to make a comic that tries to tell a good story unlike the fanservice comics that I usually make.
As such I have written the summary of the first intro chapter of this comic that I want to do. and I would like to know if you would be interested in helping me improve it.
In addition to giving criticism and indicating narrative errors, being able to complicate things with some character designs, names and other things.
A quick summary: "it's about a girl who discovers a magic school, where she wants to go when she grows up. As you grow up and participate for the first time in this faculty, you will realize that the wonderful place you wanted to go as a child is not as you imagined." history Nsfw with tf content references
If you are interested in knowing more about my project, I leave you the text with the first 8 parts of the intro chapter.
If you read it, I would like you to be honest with your opinions, in addition to giving me a grade between 1 to 10, of interest in the story.
Spanish version
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LrNUTDerFsCjOs29G3TbJXcr10aQkPCmfY6u5rxrVf0/edit?usp=drivesdk
English Version
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QJv8nZg0emgG3VoL3_VbxWQa8nVb363Trfi5KNnTPfo/edit?usp=drivesdk
(Keep in mind that it is written to be converted into a comic. and many of the names are not defined.)
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Facungo.don't
2024-06-12 11:23:30 +0000 UTCYou also don't necessarily need to tell the story in chronological order either. You could for example jump straight into the fetish and magical stuff right away(ish lol) and then later on do a flash back where your characters were younger and completely obvious to what actually goes on in that place.
Malinter
2024-06-12 06:57:33 +0000 UTCOh, interesting, as such I thought for the following chapters if the intro chapter turns out well, I had planned to make mini chapters expressing the history of the characters, what they usually do and how they end up in X situation.
Facungo.don't
2024-06-12 00:30:09 +0000 UTCMight i suggest going the "Slice of Life" route as a practice run? That way you can establish your characters, the world and the daily shenanigans of this "Magic" School and then once you've found your stride, then start telling a larger over-arching story.
Malinter
2024-06-12 00:20:35 +0000 UTC
