Small Town Homecoming (2/5)
Added 2023-11-25 14:56:29 +0000 UTCIzzy leaves her little town for the big city, and over a number of return visits home, her family watch her get more and more accustomed to the posh cosmopolitan lifestyle.
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She's changed so much (for the better) in 6 images...wonder how far she'll go with 9 more remaining. City living can really change a person!
Kr00ked1
2023-11-27 17:40:39 +0000 UTCShowing the family's noticeable reactions works if it were a simple before & after of suddenly returning home as a full city tart, and you can convey that stark difference clearly and effectively. However, when her change is happening over the course of multiple visits home over a length of time, it's all too subtle to think her family would have big demonstrative reactions over each little change. It's like the analogy about dropping a frog in a pot of already boiling water vs water that's room temp and slowly brought to a boil. Because of that, I thought to focus on the girl herself and with subtext try to convey how her behavior with her family subtly change over time.
Dynamoob
2023-11-27 02:34:04 +0000 UTCI love it. But when I made the suggestion I thought about the reaction of family members to the girl's changes. But this is not seen in your story.
Mapache
2023-11-26 19:20:23 +0000 UTC
