Editing: Areas to improve on.

When I started this project it was a holiday project. I got lucky on Royal Road and it took off.

Now that it could possibly be more than a hobby at some point, I am going to have to edit Singer, Sailor, Merchant, Mage. Probably not until the summer though when I have a little more time.

I am going to try to somehow fix/adapt/edit errors out of some of the chapters where I have lost readers. See chart below

What I was thinking was that I would continue with Singer Sailor Merchant Mage as is.
But re release hopefully improved edited version with a different title in the summer while still leaving up the original. (Kind thoughts welcome)

I have been watching a few videos on writing https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CSSL_0ddi3s&list=PLDb22nlVXGgcljcdyDk80bBDXGyeZjZ5e&index=1
And there are just a few areas I need to improve on also there are a fair few reviews now with similar criticisms of the story. For example here are some of the criticisms and possible solutions.

1. The age progression of the MC
(Eg speed up aging through chapters 10 - 40 so by now at chapter he is closer to the age of 5 when he should be able to see his status, changing the by age 1 to by age 5 for traits etc.)

2. Stronger story Arcs (less rambling  slice of life)
(Add minor characters to clash with over the skills he has been learning or more internal clashes within the family, eg defeating father, mother, sister, grandfather extended family with new skills)

3. More consistent pacing of the story
(Add more description to earlier chapters and cut back a little on later ones)

4. Longer chapters.
(Most books in the top ten have chapters around 5000 words per chapter releasing once a week after an initial dozen chapters.)

5. Stronger personality of MC
(Pull more info from his past life?)

6. General anger at abusive grandpa
(Tone the violence down and feed him properly?)

I'm sure that if I dissected my reviews there are some more points I could include but these seem like enough to start off with. If you have any thoughts on editing, improving story lines, particular chapters etc I would be interested in hearing them. Just try to keep them as kind and as constructive as possible and numbered to the points highlighted or a new number.

Thanks

Notlimah

p.s. did anyone see the song lyrics in the last chapter I was listening to the song and the lyrics drifted into the writing by accident but I left it there anyway.