Outside the Heavens - Needed Changes
Added 2023-09-17 16:45:07 +0000 UTCWhen writing a new novel, I, as a discovery writer, am taking the time to feel out the characters, world, etc... I already had plenty of lore, history, and general background for the world, but assembling that into a cohesive framework requires actually writing.
I quite like the world, and I think it will make a fantastic novel, but I am definitely going to need to make some changes. So, before I get too far in, I decided to stop and consult with all of you about what I ought to do.
At the moment, I am giving too much exposition without supporting elements to balance that out.
I was also considering a change of view, from third person (limited) to third-person (omniscient). The plan would be to use a slightly more removed narrator to be able to set scenes, provide commentary, and so on.
Also wanted to see what ideas you guys had about making it work.
Thanks!
Comments
The Empire is vast and old. I am actually leaning the opposite direction. Certain aspects of politeness are universal, but I feel that there should be clashes of cultural expectations.
Foxmoor Fiction
2023-09-19 00:37:12 +0000 UTCI recommend making the culture more cohesive and matching mannerisms and tropes to it. The example that comes to mind is the late 1800's /early 1900's style butler. He fits if you are planning to lean into the early train equivalent period and are planning to draw from a British empire motif. But that doesn't really work well with the creche communal upbringing and the effects that'd have on society. (At least imo). Personally I'd consider leaning more into the wuxia aspects of cultivation, but that's a matter of personal preference.
ben regnard
2023-09-18 09:21:05 +0000 UTCYour very much on the path to that nonetheless, and making good progress.
ZCochraine!%
2023-09-18 01:32:37 +0000 UTCYes, but i won't settle for anything less than great.
Foxmoor Fiction
2023-09-18 01:31:48 +0000 UTCCaught up and gadda say, its just good. I’ll settle for agreeing that some explanations through be don through interactions like the above two comments, but things are otherwise still very good.
ZCochraine!%
2023-09-17 23:03:29 +0000 UTCYou don't necessarily need to do a complete rewrite as much as change the way you write further chapters
X Blade
2023-09-17 21:39:38 +0000 UTCI would just spread out the exposition between and within scenes. While simply switching povs every now and then too different characters. Rick Riordan style so to speak, that said a whole chapter as a different pov everytime would be too much and you can switch povs during a chapter.
X Blade
2023-09-17 21:31:42 +0000 UTCIt is a lot of exposition. I think it would benefit from being spread out. Have actions described or interactions happen between explanations and conversations that are dialogue heavy
Munirah Hutchinson
2023-09-17 20:57:51 +0000 UTCCool
Michael Lambus
2023-09-17 19:12:07 +0000 UTCDo what you think is best dude! I'll admit, I'm mostly here for SSD rather than OtH, but I assume you've got a better idea what you're doing then me!
Crazy Abe
2023-09-17 16:50:32 +0000 UTC
