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Disintegrity 11 remake

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This original page is one I was never very satisfied with. It just looks so clean, with this incomprehensible guitar background (which is supposed to be the one that Larsen stole from Zee but what's the point of that being here ? Dunnow. I think I was just uninspired), Larsen looking really awkward and not on-model, the pacing being too fast to really build up Larsen's angry confusion, s'bad. S'just bad...


So here's the rework. First off, page 10 will be changed, the explosion in the background above is the one that previously was in the background of page 10. The background behind Larsen will simply be black, to imply that he's lost and doesn't know how to react for a while, until he explodes in anger in this page 11 above. It was the plan back then too, I just went at it too fast, Zee's panel and words fade to black and blur, then next panel, Larsen explodes. S'bad. I also added a penl in page 11 just to show more time is passing, also because it looked weird to have a single-panel full page dedicated to his reaction.

Beside that, I made the explosion red-pink cos it felt mor relevant than the normal explosive colors, after all it's about love, it's not a literal epxlosion. It's prettier too. Plus the black bacground is exploding into pieces. It looks cool and shows the shift between confusion and anger more interestingly than... doing nothing. Also Larsen's linework is sketchy and scratchy. I just feel like it feels the mood better than the usual clean thick linework.


So yeah ! That's the whole idea.

Disintegrity 11 remake

Comments

they gay seems to be intensifying.

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Sexy!


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