Chapter 214 - Tears of a lost child
Added 2023-06-22 16:01:30 +0000 UTCAfter Sofia’s little panic-like revelation episode, the group headed to a restaurant to have a long chat in a VIP room. The first topic was the circumstances of Sofia’s sudden and late arrival, and Mornn was the one trying the hardest to piece things together because she knew the least.
“So, let me get this straight. Your long lost sister that you thought dead is alive, because you saw her name on one of the Spire’s scoreboard. And that was on the last floor, where she finished second or third overall, AND you finished at rank 1 and won an actual crown?”
“That’s… about it, yeah.”
“Maaaaan, I knew this quest was rigged, Sun is always like this! What am I supposed to do? Get rank zero?” the tall elf complained, she looked deflated and defeated on her seat, “Congratulations on the win and the good news then. Do you know how to look for your Sister already?”
Sofia had a bitter expression as she shook her head. Certainly there were many ways to search, but search for what, how, where? How many girls named Saria were there? And if she kept a low profile, who exactly would have even heard of her?
And it had been so long, it was possible that even if they passed by each other in the street Sofia and Saria wouldn’t recognize each other.
Astelia found an opportunity to stop stuffing her face with ice cream and try to help, “Maybe we can find her fast, actually? We have embassies everywhere on the human continent, someone has to know something. We could also offer a bounty? I can try asking Moon too but I would not count on that…”
“You could also put up a request for information at the adventurers’ guild? You have that citizenship now, might as well use it. I wouldn’t mind going back to Drakron too, it’s been a while,” Alith added.
“I don’t know where to even start… But I appreciate the help. She probably believes me dead too…”
Mornn fixed her posture, grabbing a roasted chicken leg, she lightly waved it around as she spoke, “you know, Sofia, I don’t know you that well, but. If you’re strong enough to finish as the all-time first in the trial, finding one lost sister shouldn’t be too hard.” She bit into the chicken, and kept talking with her mouth half full, “I can hook you up with an old diviner if you want, his prices are high but he’s very good at finding lost things. You’d have to come to our city in the desert though, bit of a long trip.”
“Yeah… I- I’m not even sad or discouraged or… If anything, I’m too happy to explain how I’m feeling right now, but it’s so sudden. It makes it… Hard to focus on anything. I just need some time to get my thoughts together I guess. A diviner uh…”
[You have been affected by : confusion. But your skills negated the status]
Sofia jumped on her chair as if she had just gotten shocked by electricity.
Astelia and Alith asked if Sofia was alright.
“Yes! Yes, I . Woah. Sorry, one of my skills just activated on its own.”
“That’s all it took for you to stop acting like a wet mop? What’s this skill? I need it too.”
Everyone stared at Mornn.
“What?”
Pareth chose this second of silence to appear in the room, leaving a small envelope on the table and disappearing again.
Everyone urged Sofia to open it, was this a message from her lost sister? Was Pareth trying to communicate? Inside the envelope was a single sheet of paper, on one side was a pencil drawing of a Dragon mask, on the other was a very short message:
‘Quickly seek the wind fox, good luck - Sen’
Valeure?
“Hey, looks like we know where your next destination is. Do you know the wind saintess or want me to guide you?”
“No need, thanks I met her once already.”
“That so?”

Sofia having regained a bit of composure and with a clear goal, the subject matter moved to everyone’s results in the trial. The others had not yet shared their ranks as they had decided to wait for Sofia to be there as well.
Alith had the worst performance, failing at floor 89. Both Astelia and Mornn expressed that they also found it particularly hard, though they couldn’t discuss the details without being censored.
“I couldn’t use my ghost form so I really didn’t have a chance. But that’s not a problem anymore with my race evolution so it’s fine, I’ll perform better on the next one. My exact rank isn’t even worth talking about, I’m in the four thousands…”
“You were so close to the main rewards…”
“Eh, no point worrying about it now. I did the best I could.”
“You did good for someone who’s not even alive, shorty. You were just unlucky that floor 89 was a bad matchup. What about you, Astelia?”
“Rank twelve.”
Mornn stared glassy eyed at the small vampire who was somehow still eating when everyone else was stuffed.
“You managed to pass 97!? Ugh. It was too much…”
Astelia failed against the Master and Mornn failed at the orbs? Woah. Astelia was the one who started from the lowest spot as well. “So you failed on 97?” Sofia asked Mornn.
“Yeah… I just couldn’t… Too much too fast…”
She’s so tall, I can see how that would be an issue with the orbs, and her skills for the most part don’t look like they would help much. But Astelia found the black orb? It’s too bad that there’s this damn censor…
Astelia explained more, taking her time to find the right way to avoid being censored, “It was a floor very well suited for me. It was not easy but I managed without being hurt too much. But floor 98 was impossible. I had to give up. Were you close to finishing 97?”
“Not at all. During it I went from rank 433 to 348, when completing the floor gives rank 62. So mine was among the worst attempts even. Well, I’ll say it though, 300 out of who knows how many, not too bad. Sun might beat me up later, but I’m okay with my score.”
“97 and 98 were both very close calls for me too…”
Alith pointed at Sofia’s crown, “How was floor 100?”
“Uh… How do I explain that in a way that won’t get it censored… Whatever you may be thinking of, it’s worse than that, and then worse again. And if you still think ‘there could be a way’ then you’re not there yet.”
“You’re saying that… But you still won?”
“... I can’t say anything more it seems.”

The friendly discussions lasted through the night.
Alith had explained to Sofia that Zerei had left ahead to start building her school, which she had explained in a letter passed down to them by a city guard. After that, it was decided that after a quick teleportation to the goatkin city-state, Mornn would take everyone back to the human continent on her giant sword as it was by far the fastest way they had to cross the sea.
When they arrived in Hooasow, the group split up, Agran picked up Astelia, promising they would be on the lookout for any trace of Sofia’s sister. Mornn also left, explaining that she had to return and report to her Oracle quickly before he came to fetch her himself. Before that, she gave them an explanation on how to reach Herzal, the elven capital in the desert, and the name of the Diviner she had mentioned before. That left Sofia alone with Alith in the city, on a random bench in the middle of the night.
“So, we’re going to find your sister or what?”
“I can’t believe I’m saying that, but that is the plan. You’re going to come with me?”
“Uh? Yeah. What else am I gonna do? Let you chase after your past alone again? Last time I did that you started murdering the whole church. What kind of a friend am I if I leave right now?”
“Let’s go to Valeure’s place then.”
“Alright! I want to see the immortal fox lady too!”
Sofia stood up and started walking through the street, “she might not even be there again though…”
Alith jumped off of the bench, trailing behind Sofia, “Then we can wait for her to show up. You won’t be able to focus on anything else anyway, might as well follow this clue for now. If it’s from Sen, it should be reliable. Also Saria is probably stronger than you by now, I reckon she can survive a bit more until we find her, right?”
Sofia’s gait as she walked regained a bit of energy. After a few steps along the unlit homes of the city, she turned around.
“Hey, Alith.”
“Uh?”
“Thank you.”
“Wh-... Sofia, are you crying?”
Comments
Well, Floor 100 is supposed to be the hardest, most insurmountable floor, so I get why they did it the way they did.
Logen Felxon
2023-06-22 22:50:35 +0000 UTCTrue enough, but she been trying to get to that Floating Island and She said a while back that's wear she believed her sister is buried and recently revealed in the Flashback that's wear she thought she died Died.
Jonathan Wint
2023-06-22 19:56:08 +0000 UTCWhile she probably considered that, I'm pretty sure she said she was just latching onto the first chance to get real magic. She didn't exactly have many choices and she just stumbled upon the necronomicon.
Wensber
2023-06-22 19:23:30 +0000 UTCShe did say that its no longer a problem with her race evolution. Its pretty clear Sen agreed that being locked out of it is not intended.
Wensber
2023-06-22 19:21:57 +0000 UTCThats bogas Alith ghost form is her main form and she is constantly locked out of using it
TheLost
2023-06-22 18:56:59 +0000 UTCYeah I kinda figured there would be something like that (which is why I said it might be a terrible suggestion). Overall I wouldn't sell yourself so short, I think you've done a decent job of fleshing out your characters and their relationships (which is what I value out of character interactions, aside from progressing the actual plot). At this point I would just suggest that you don't avoid multi-chapter conversations too much, because they are necessary sometimes and I think people being confused and having to re-read a bit is way better than having people complain about skipped dialogue and rushed character interactions.
Delibird
2023-06-22 18:46:40 +0000 UTCYeah the release schedule really isn't helping but as far as this story goes I'm pretty much stuck with it until at the very least the amazon release, if not until the end. To say it candidly, changing it now is pretty much a financial suicide.
Mornn
2023-06-22 18:27:52 +0000 UTCYeah I feel like your daily release schedule isn't doing you any favors here. I get that frequent release = more engagement and bigger numbers (especially if you're grinding RR) but I would suggest maybe seeing if you can find a schedule that allows you to release larger chapters (this may be a terrible suggestion, I ain't no author). As a reader I find that for webserials that have say a weekly release schedule, the chapters are long enough (think 7x length of one of yours like if you were to combine 7 of your chapters) to the point where it's not that difficult to include longer conversations. The fact that the last Valeure conversation lasted 5 chapters and made people confused isn't necessarily a sign that the conversation was too long, but that interjecting four 24-hour gaps into a conversation does not allow for a continuous flow of immersion. If those 5 chapters were instead just 1 big one then the conversation would've been way easier to digest. The fact that you had to condense their post-trial discussion into the current length of one of your chapters is what made it feel 'rushed' to me and probably also to Clark.
Delibird
2023-06-22 18:14:32 +0000 UTCWell, first of all... All of @Delibird's answer is what is going on in terms of why what happened happened pretty much. Now for the out-of-story context, a few things. First of all, character interactions is a weak point of mine, that I would tend to agree on. I'm doing what I can but also I'm on a tight schedule so it's kind of a 'learn as I work' process, and there aren't many occasions where a lot of characters talk like this so I'm not getting much training in... But also, I'm planning these chapters as what they are, both a daily webnovel and the start of a new book, so you get a chapter every day, but there's also people who will read this after waiting two or three months between the two books to come out... It's a difficult thing to account for and play around both pacing at the same time. And in general, I dislike spending several chapters in a row in a single conversation, because it makes it increasingly hard to keep track of what's been said by who. The first conversation with Valeure, for example, was five chapters long. Had it been a single chapter it would be fine, but as five separate pieces of a single conversation, I had some readers confused and lost by the end of it. Worst of all is the fact that some details will always have to be left out despite the obvious inevitability for two characters to talk about it at some point, which is always unsatisfying, but It's just not realistic to mention everything every time. Maybe it's just me who need to learn how to handle it better, but yeah, complex topic.
Mornn
2023-06-22 17:35:04 +0000 UTCWind Foxxo gonna be really jealous of Sofia’s Crown!
Quentin Cozzi
2023-06-22 17:29:09 +0000 UTCI bet the entire reason she wanted to be a necromancer was to be able to revive her sister and she is alive.
Jonathan Wint
2023-06-22 17:16:15 +0000 UTCPareth Appears suddenly with a handkerchief and vanishes just as quickly
Arnon Parenti
2023-06-22 17:11:08 +0000 UTCOn one hand it did feel a bit rushed but on the other hand it sort of makes sense to me. 1. Remember that Zerei wasn't taking the trial, so regardless of whatever time dilation shenanigans the trial might have, I don't think it makes sense for Zerei to wait weeks or months or whatever for them to come out, she has her own stuff to do and they can catch up later. 2. They're censored from discussing the actual contents of the trial, so it's not like they could get super into that (if that's what you're referring to with what they learned). 3. In terms of growth (and general rewards) I don't think they would want or need to discuss that in depth right away. It's not like they're super close with Mornn or anything either, they literally met her in the trial so I don't see them divulging that much personal info with her around. 4. unlikelyhood of how impressive they all were - we're talking about Alith - a scuffed hero, Astelia - an oracle of a god, Mornn - a saintess, and Sofia - whatever the heck you even want to label her. None of them were mediocre in the first place so it's not surprising that their performance was super good 5. the whole sister thing is more of a personal issue, it's not like any of them knew Saria. They offered their help and advice and moved on, I don't see any issue with that. Overall I think we'll see them unpack Sofia's stat sheet gains in the future (not sure if she's dropped the level debt on Alith yet) but I think this chapter covered everything we could reasonably see them discuss
Delibird
2023-06-22 17:03:22 +0000 UTCmeh, This chapter was pretty dissapointing if Im being honest, particuarly when contrasted to how excellent that last few chapters have been. I was very much looking forward to the post tower debreifing, where they disscussed what they learned, how they had all grown, and be generally flabergasted at sofia's rank, and then at the unlikelyhood of how impressive they all were. At the very least Mornn should not be used to sofia's nonsense but all we got was some irritation at the impossible task of beating her. Even the whole reveal of Sofia's sister was practically skipped over. They chatted a littled bit and dipped. Even Zerei was just already gone. I feel like missing the end of such a signifigant milestone in your friends life is pretty low. Like missing a graduation except worse, and that feels out of character to me. I expected signifigantly more dialouge and characterization in this chapter. Skipping over dialouge and kindve fast pacing charater interactions has been pretty common in this story so far and Id go so far as to say that its this story's greatest weakness. I still love it for its strengths(which are demonstrated liberally in the last few chapters), but this could defintly be improved. Hopefully the Valeure dialouge is better, talking with her requires careful thought from sofia, and last time the depth of the conversation reflected that so heres hoping.
Inv7ctus
2023-06-22 16:39:00 +0000 UTC"Was it just that he wasn't used to saying the new number yet from Saria?" Yep, the change was too recent to him compared to the time he'd spent saying the same line, so he fumbled it
Mornn
2023-06-22 16:37:32 +0000 UTCI can't decide if I feel sorry for Mornn that no one can tell her where the orb was, or happy that she'll never know what a cheap trick that floor was... Huh. I'm thinking of Master Calm Breeze's stutter back in chapter 188. ("Only fi- six students have ever triumphed over me.") I thought someone else must have beaten him in this batch, right at that moment, but I guess not? Was it just that he wasn't used to saying the new number yet from Saria? I'm glad Alith's going to be by her side through this. Emotional moments need a friend.
Tejing
2023-06-22 16:35:04 +0000 UTCxD
Mornn
2023-06-22 16:33:32 +0000 UTCThank you for the chapter! Lol to beat the filter, just have Sophia break the fourth wall and say floor 100 is a fromsoft game. ( They just hand you a sword and say kill god. Bout sums it up)
Chance Rose
2023-06-22 16:31:54 +0000 UTCWholesome!! Im glad they all became friends after going through the tower togethor and alith is a real homie
Beeees!
2023-06-22 16:19:29 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! Can't wait for the fox lady's reactions to all the crazy stuff.
Wensber
2023-06-22 16:18:00 +0000 UTCAwww Sofia 🥺 She's been through so much I just want to give her a hug 🥺
Chrystal 1776
2023-06-22 16:13:04 +0000 UTC