Prologue (chapter 1) of Broken Dreams (formerly Ballad of Snow and Fire) is out for Squires!
Added 2025-06-30 20:40:03 +0000 UTCFor Squires only!
First, I must apologise for the delay. I'm mostly better, and the chapter took longer than I hoped (and writing a new PoV for the first time is always more challenging).
Second, as I said, the title in the poll (Ballad of Snow and Fire) was a pending/placeholder, so it has been changed. For those unaware, the story won by one vote. The poll stayed up for a whole week. For the unhappy with the results... I can only point you to the troll voters or the... 400+-ish patrons who were too lazy to give a vote.
This is going to be quite a dark/grim story, as I mentioned in the og preview. I'll bravely dive into the more eldritch elements of ASOIAF. The change I considered on Discord and in the Patreon chat about Rhaella only 'seeing' the future instead of living it has been implemented. This is also probably my last Jon Snow-centric/relevant fic for a while, and this will probably be my goal to aim for the closest to ADWD! Jon Snow from the books, freshly raw from betrayal.
Anyway, I suggest you give it a chance. Let me know what you think in the comments.
Comments
Now that is how you do a proper curse...
Ripe
2025-07-03 22:53:05 +0000 UTCGood to hear that you are feeling better. Won’t really be reading the rest of this one as the premise didn’t interest me and I’m exhausted from all the Jon Snow. Still be supporting, but it is what it is I guess.
Groovy
2025-07-01 13:44:07 +0000 UTCMy vote actually mattered??
Birdy810
2025-07-01 07:02:34 +0000 UTCWell, that was one hell of a curse on Rhaella's part.
Luxanna Aeterna
2025-07-01 07:00:13 +0000 UTCTunnel Jons Rule, Harry Poopers Drool!!!
Grateful Bread
2025-07-01 03:03:39 +0000 UTCLol. Everyone seems especially focused on Jon hatching an egg. Doesn't seem to be implied so far. I'm sure whatever you come up with will work.
John Pinson
2025-07-01 02:14:20 +0000 UTCThank you. :)
John Pinson
2025-07-01 02:12:08 +0000 UTCOh. A bloodline struggling till the end. A past connects with an uncertain future. Fire and blood meet shell and scale once again.
StarBat
2025-07-01 01:24:02 +0000 UTCWell the results of Jon and Rhaella getting together can’t be argued by her family if Jon somehow hatches the dragon eggs in the future. If that happens in the story anyways. Can’t wait to see more!
David
2025-07-01 00:03:53 +0000 UTCWhoa, this is great. Looking forward to the next one.
Perraup
2025-07-01 00:03:31 +0000 UTCI will say this you are a fantastic writer. I was not wanting to read this story but I decided to give it a chance. I am looking forward to next week's chapter.
Charleson Charge
2025-06-30 23:51:26 +0000 UTCThank you, and I am not the biggest Targaryen fan. I was far more Starks, Durrundon, and Baratheon—the North and Stormlands in general. However, I do like a particular Targaryen, such as Maegor the Cruel, Aemon the Dragonknight, King Maekar, Aegon the Unlikely, Maester Aemon, and Rhaella. So I am very interested in seeing Rhaella in this story. I just want to know if Jon kills the Heart of Winter, will he gain the power of winter? Please let something like that happen. Great job, and I am very interested in seeing where this story goes, especially after No Joy in Command was such a great work. I am curious to see if Jon will somehow gain an Ice Dragon from this advantage. Fantastic job, and you're genuinely a gifted Author and wordsmith. I'm eager to see what happens next. I do hope you start feeling better too.
FallenMetalGod
2025-06-30 22:49:31 +0000 UTCI’m glad this one won. It was the more interesting sounding one
MyAfroAteMyDog
2025-06-30 22:45:10 +0000 UTCEpic!
InnerDemons
2025-06-30 22:29:42 +0000 UTCAerys won't be miffed about not marrying her they were both unhappy but the agency part I can definitely see
Cinema Man
2025-06-30 21:27:38 +0000 UTCI enjoyed the intro chapter of Broken Dreams. It was very well done and evocative. The ‘old gods’ taking Rhaella’s blood and her dragon egg was a nice touch. It seemed a fitting price to pay for what she was asking for. I enjoyed Rhaella’s POV. Thinking about it, with it twice being repeated in the opening chapter, Shifting Destiney seems like a good title. Mea Culpa.
stevem1
2025-06-30 21:27:24 +0000 UTCI didn't vote for this one, and damn do I regret that. This chapter was an absolute hell of a hook. Great work!
Archimedes
2025-06-30 21:23:21 +0000 UTCThanks and good to hear you're feeling better. I actually liked this a lot more than I thought I would. Certainly an interesting start.
Brewt
2025-06-30 21:15:04 +0000 UTCGreat start as always. Excited for the next one
Kai
2025-06-30 21:12:13 +0000 UTCWell I’m gonna read it anyways , truth is I was hoping for the other one cause first harry should not know about the world and second it was gonna be a big story , hope this one is a big one too, good luck lets enjoy !
nikos konteles
2025-06-30 21:11:33 +0000 UTCRogue Jon ( when he finds Dark Sister beyond the wall)
BaldRhaegar
2025-06-30 21:10:11 +0000 UTCReally happy this story was chosen
Haruto
2025-06-30 21:10:06 +0000 UTCOther Jon
BaldRhaegar
2025-06-30 21:09:36 +0000 UTCBlack Bastard Jon
BaldRhaegar
2025-06-30 21:09:28 +0000 UTCVillain Arc Jon
BaldRhaegar
2025-06-30 21:09:18 +0000 UTCDark Prince Jon
BaldRhaegar
2025-06-30 21:09:08 +0000 UTCGlad this story won. I’m mostly here for the scenes of Aerys and his dipshit parents losing it over Rhaella having a modicum of agency in her life and the whole prophesy thing “falling apart”. Should be fun.
MehOhWell
2025-06-30 20:49:35 +0000 UTC
