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[NSFW]new dialogue for a Maru handjob scene.

I have noticed that one of the weaknesses in my game is how poorly the dialogue is written in NSFW scenes. Therefore, I have spent some time learning how to write dialogue in a more romantic style. Here it is. Please let me know what you think.

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r = Robin, ma = Maru

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"Maru push you into the bed then place her right hand on your chest."

r "!!!!"

"With a sinful sight, Robin panick and run outside the clinic."

r "I-I'll wait outside!"

ma "Well, I guess we can start with out her then."

ma "Now..."

"She move her face close and start kissing you."

"By how she a bit foward you stiff and keep you mouth shut."

ma "Fufufu..."

ma "No need to be stiff just relax, ok?"

"Shen then kissing you again and start to She nibble around you lip tentaly."

"You also slowly getting hard unti full elect."

ma "Haa..."

ma "Look like my methood is working after all..."

ma "Hmm...Now, for the next part.."

"She slice her hand from your chest move slowly to your dick and grab it."

ma "Let's me help you with that~."

"She slow move her hand with a very smooth rythm."

"She then start kissing you with passion, by push her toung inside.."

"The please form the kiss and form her hand make you can't last any longer."

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ma "It's okay, Mom. I'm just giving [u] a little help to get the test done."

"Maru gently pushes you onto the bed and rests her right hand on your chest."

r "!!!!"

"Maru's action causes Robin to panic and run out of the room."

r "I-I'll wait outside!"

ma "Well, I guess we can start without her then."

ma "Now..."

"As Maru moved her face closer to yours, her lips gently brushed against yours. She kissed you with a tenderness that took your breath away."

"But due to the excitement and nervousness, your face becomes stiff and your mouth stays shut."

ma "Fufufu..."

"Maru noticed that and chuckled softly."

ma "There's no need to be stiff, Mr.[u], Just relax, okay?"

"With that, she kissed you again, her lips more insistent this time as she nibbled around your lip tentatively."

"You felt your body respond to her touch, your lips parting slightly as you let out a soft moan."

"Maru smiled against your mouth, pleased with the effect she was having on you."

"You feel your penis get harder with each passing moment, and Maru can't help but let out a soft gasp of pleasure at sight."

ma "Haa..."

"Maru smiles as she looks down at your penis, a twinkle in her eye."

ma "It looks like my method is effective after all..."

"She says, her voice filled with affection."

ma "Hmm...Now, for the next part.."

"Her touch is electric as she slowly moves her hand down your body, and you can feel your heart racing with anticipation."

"As she takes hold of your member, you let out a small moan of pleasure, unable to contain yourself any longer."

"Maru looks up at you with a mischievous grin."

ma "Let me help you with that~."

"She says, her voice dripping with desire."

"Her hand moves slowly, caressing you in a gentle and tender rhythm, as if she wants to savor every moment of this intimate experience with you."

"As she kisses you, her lips feel like the sweetest nectar, and you can't help but surrender to her passion. Her tongue explores your mouth, igniting a flame of desire within you."

"The pleasure from her lips and her hands overwhelms you, sending waves of ecstasy throughout your body. You can't hold back any longer, and you let yourself go, completely lost in the moment with her."

Comments

looks good

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