Announcement: MUST READ
Added 2024-09-03 15:15:24 +0000 UTCHi everyone!
As I was starting my work on Chapter 102, I went back and read the last 10 chapters of the story for inspiration. I started reading from Ch-92, which was a major turning point in the story, and went all the way to 101. After reading it, I came to just one conclusion: It fucking sucks.
I wrote myself into a corner with chapter 92 after Gia's death, because of which the overall tone of the story became very gloomy and sad. I don't write stories to make anyone sad. If I don't like what I write, what's the point of writing for others? I know I had held a poll for Ch-92. I held it not because someone else asked me for it, but because I wasn't sure if that was the correct direction for the story.
In hindsight, it wasn't. So I have done what should have been done from the beginning and went back to change the last 10 chapters, starting with 92. That's why I didn't post one yesterday because I was busy editing and correcting my past mistakes.
To all my readers, I apologize for changing such a big chunk of story. If any of you still want to read the old version, I'm attaching it here, but if you go back to the chapters, you will find only the updated versions. It may take some time to show the updated text in the app, but it should work fine in the browser.
I wanted to post a chapter today, but I couldn't because I was busy correcting the past chapters, without which it would have been impossible to write Ch-102. Don't worry though, I will complete my quota of four chapters this week.
I hope you understand why I made this decision. To anyone who is unhappy with me because of this, please shoot me a DM and I would love to talk with you.
List of Updated Chapters:
Chapter 92 (Major Changes)
Chapter 93 (One scene changed of police investigation)
Chapter 94 (Interview of Gia's mother changed)
Chapter 95 (Minor changes)
Chapter 96 (Interview with Ellen changed)
Chapter 97 (Major changes)
Chapter 98 (Major changes)
Chapter 99 (Minor changes)
Chapter 100 (Minor changes)
Chapter 101 (Minor changes)
Comments
Thanks!
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-04 06:00:49 +0000 UTCYou are correct, I will revisit these chapters over the next few days to smoothen them out.
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-04 06:00:30 +0000 UTCThe chapters need some polishing I think, the occasional comment was out of place, not sure if some other parts of those chapters were added to, but there was some stuff that needed polishing there too. It's a better direction for the story IMO. Her death would have hung like a bad cloud over the rest of the story otherwise. Because it'd be unrealistic if the controversy wasn't brought up every time they want to smear MC or some rival wants to hurt him. Now they can at least come out of it better. Not sure if you want to write this in, but MCs mother would bury the girls mother in defamation suits and insist on an NDA of anything to do with Troy within a year or two if she wants to stay out of debt. She wouldn't get away with screaming at Ellens like originally. The most effective and realistic way of killing off this story arc I think.
David Karlsson
2024-09-04 01:22:05 +0000 UTCTo be honest, the new version feels better and with more details ... Maybe it would be good to go back every few chapters and review any details. Good job!
Rafael
2024-09-03 22:41:54 +0000 UTCGlad you think so.
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 22:01:25 +0000 UTCI like the new version. :) can’t wait for the future :)
Milena Gonzalez
2024-09-03 21:30:47 +0000 UTCThank you!
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 20:14:01 +0000 UTCI like the new version a lot more. It felt like Gia's death and her mom's behaviour was casting a large shadow over his future career and all the choices he would make. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
AbbyR
2024-09-03 20:13:29 +0000 UTCThank you!
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 17:34:01 +0000 UTCI like the new version more too…I haven’t realized that the quality had fall back a little until i reread everything… I think that changing it was the right call…
Vilas Boas
2024-09-03 17:33:29 +0000 UTCDefinitely. I have no intention to make him a cheater.
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 15:39:28 +0000 UTCThank you!
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 15:38:41 +0000 UTCI like the new Version a bit more, but I dont really like the cheating part in the last few chapters if it stays like this its fine, but not more
Leonard
2024-09-03 15:38:36 +0000 UTCIt is because of the killing actually. Usually, whenever the story gets boring, I add some fun happy moments to counteract it. But ever since then, there is this looming threat over Troy, which took away all joy of the story out.
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 15:38:34 +0000 UTCYeah… the quality of work really fall back. But I don’t think it’s because of killing. Idk… there is something else.
GioKobalia
2024-09-03 15:18:01 +0000 UTCWell, im glad u followed your creative heart. Thats all an author should do.
Catherine Colin
2024-09-03 15:17:21 +0000 UTCI would love it if you guys can read the new chapters and give me feedback if this version is better or not.
TheLazyWarrior
2024-09-03 15:16:08 +0000 UTC
