Comic Script Idea
Added 2020-01-11 22:55:59 +0000 UTCOkay, so after reading through your ideas and going over them in my mind I had a sudden spur of inspiration.
I really liked the idea of Rick and Night going to a porn studio audition to get to shoot a scene with Rex and I started writing up a script. It is just a first draft, but it is a start!
Now:
What I have done now is attached this document as a file to this post (let me know if you can't open it and would like it in a different format). You can either read it and let me know in the comments what you would like me to add, change or if you have different ideas.
I also uploaded it to google docs: Click here - There you can comment on it directly, even without an account. Just please, if you leave an anonymous comment, include your Patreon username, so I know who to credit later. :3
I'm super excited to hear what you guys think and read your suggestions!
Comments
Your idea before reading the script definitely has a lot of promise - maybe a sequel? ;P Not bad for a first draft though I would say for myself! ;D And you are right, there needs to be some transition there. I think it could work if Rex makes it out to be a "personal" audition but only under the circumstance that Night joins them.
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-15 02:14:49 +0000 UTCLove love love love it. It's gonna be great. Thank you SO MUCH Tweedly for breaking the ice. original comments before reading the script: I was thinking about how it could be fun to have Night in the background of scenes, getting talked down to, exploited, dragged off to other areas, while the dialogue takes place in the front between Rick and whomever, no-one noticing, to reappear in the last scene as a bound down bottom bitch part of the scenery perhaps. It happens you know. The dialogue needs some shaving. Not that I'm a writer, but I think we can make it pop. Last thing is that I miss a transition for Rex to just fuck the shit out of them after the pizza scene. Does he flaunt it as an audition? Is everybody just enamored? What's Night's motivation to go along besides getting DICKED.
Siber
2020-01-15 01:52:31 +0000 UTCI just read them, thank you! Sorry for the grammar mistakes - I was really rushing to write all of my ideas down, so I wasn't paying attention at times. It's a rough draft after all. :3 Some of your ideas are really good! I hope that there will be more! :3
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-13 01:01:08 +0000 UTCI made a couple idea comments (and a few tiny grammar fixes, but nothing big). I'm LOVING the comic idea, by the way! Keep it up and thank you for asking for input from us!
Tweedly
2020-01-13 00:58:55 +0000 UTCNoted! :3
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-12 18:53:24 +0000 UTCThank you!
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-12 18:53:20 +0000 UTCForgot to say: I think the security guard should be a hyena
Wowz
2020-01-12 18:28:07 +0000 UTCThis is fantastic! Props to you Dream! I’m really happy with how the comic looks, keep it up!
Wowz
2020-01-12 18:26:23 +0000 UTCThanks! Looking forward to hear your feedback, if you like to. :3
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-12 12:13:58 +0000 UTCWell now, this seems quite interesting. :>
Duke Nauticus
2020-01-12 09:58:17 +0000 UTCOh I will put up some notes later if I can, but I was thinking black bear or rhino for the guard. Someone bulky and gruff to boss Night and Rick around :P
Tweedly
2020-01-12 03:41:52 +0000 UTCWell, there are a couple of notes in there, maybe you would have a suggestion for the species of the security guard or the director? :3
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-12 02:34:22 +0000 UTCThank you! :3 Are there any suggestions or things that you might want to add? :3
Dream&Nightmare
2020-01-12 00:19:56 +0000 UTCSo far I love it. It's funny in the right ways and it seems good in the layout. I can't wait to see this comic!
Sugar Sammy
2020-01-12 00:08:21 +0000 UTC
