Written in the Stars - An Unfamiliar Fear
Added 2023-02-16 14:01:00 +0000 UTCI suppose I should say that the conclusion is drawing quite close...
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Children defeat adults all the time both in fantasy and in real life. Prodigies and people with very specific gifts or access to specialized education are often considerably more able. Luka Doncic was one of the 20 best Basketball players in the world by the age of 18. There have been children graduating college before puberty. Harry in canon was an exceptional duelist by the age of 15 despite not being raised by Wizards and also not taking his studies seriously and without any sort of personal training. He was able to keep up with Antonin Dolohov and Bellatrix at 15 and they're considered two of the most dangerous dark wizards ever. So, yes, a Harry that has access to Tom's memories, Grindelwald and Dumbledores mentorship, training by his aunt, and having taken his studies and training seriously with better teachers than he had at Hogwarts, and having the Elder wand, it's perfectly reasonable to think he could keep up with Voldemort. This is especially true as he's not fifteen in this story. He's closer to 17. The same age he actually fight Voldemort in the books.
michael H
2023-02-19 16:40:15 +0000 UTCSo two things one when you decide to get rid of the Horcrux you need to acknowledge that Harry loses his connection to Voldemort, Harry loses his ability to feel them and find them with the same level skill he originally but instead you choose to simply ignore that simple fact because it's convenient, I may have missed an explanation but that's just how it feels. Secondly this is a story recommendation and plot advice but you focus to much on a OP ruthless Harry that you push everything else to the side so all his bonds usually feel fairly disappointing. For instance Harry and Ana basically declare that they are best friends but then barely said a word to each other through out the whole story and someone even said that she is in love with him which really feels cheap. So I would recommend truly fleshing out his relationships more and expanding on the people around him rather then a bunch of exposition. Lastly I would recommend pushing the timeline back a bit to where when the "war" occurs Harry and his friends are actual adults rather then fifth or sixth years, the idea that harry can match people who have dedicated their entire lives to the mysteries of magic and achieving greater heights of magical power when he's sixteen or seventeen is idiotic and far to fanciful for me personally. Honestly pushing back the time line to make everyone older only gives you more time to expand on his friendships on relationships which is quite honestly a net positive, early on I loved this story but as you went on and moved the focus to be nearly nothing but Harry essentially having nothing but a revenge plot really detracts form everything, not to mention only ever presenting the idea that Harry has to be brash and arrogant in his dealings with people it's far to overdone to truly be any good so sometimes it would be better to go the charming route instead and make people like you and follow you because of charisma rather then because your brash barbarian with no understanding of subtlety. Buts that's just me.
LT Butterfly287
2023-02-17 09:40:02 +0000 UTCLee. Can we get one in present day Hogwarts where Harry stays at the school? I think that will challenge you. I do like the powerful Harry with a good pairing though. Also, where the women aren’t such banshees, mad at anything and everything (I do think the other fics were better but just finished reading Honour Thy blood” for the 10th time ), just not a good representation.
GeorgieD
2023-02-17 07:54:35 +0000 UTC
