Written in the Stars - The Order of the Phoenix
Added 2022-12-18 14:00:05 +0000 UTCThings really will begin to pick up pace after this chapter with some nice actions scenes to come in the next...
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The 3 paragraph exposition that potter had telling people who fought the last war about the need to take it seriously and be willing to kill was a bit hard to swallow. It’s like someone who has never driven a car telling race car drivers what is necessary to perform, that last story where potter fought in the war was so much better in terms of character growth and a being more reliable. Potter in this one has had plot armour dropped on him a few times, which I have no problem with, but lectures from people who have not actually done anything but have lengthy interactions telling people how he will kill them all and about how he is not one to be messed with is too similar to poorly written naruto stories where 13 yr olds can fight toe to toe with gods
Luthanor
2023-02-02 07:55:46 +0000 UTCOdd that this chapter tipped the scales for people being unsatisfied when nothing has been mentioned in previous chapters really. I would hazard a guess that there are multiple differences in this story and your others that are causing it. A) formative schools years in detail to establish growth. B) Majority of OCs that require character development. C) A lack of action or direct confrontations thus far with Harry. .. I dont mind the varying pov’s but can understand that if you take the story on an individual chapter basis with a limited amount of harry pov that it could be disappointing since he is the main character but that is of course due to the need to develop the scope of characters and the plot. Perhaps if chapters were longer that could be avoided but then the update frequency would suffer. I would recommend readers go back periodically and re-read what has thus far been written to satisfy the lack of sudden progress which is unrealistic. These stories take in entirety a year+ to be released, have some patience. The only gripe i will agree with is the seemingly repetitive dialogue from harry about the war and how he will smite all followers of the dark lord, this chapter only highlighted this because harry reiterated it with dumbledore, the order and amelia in 3 separate convos. At this point its like he is psyching himself up to take the plunge and id honestly like for a character to speak up and call his bluff eventually. Besides this I am enjoying the story, look forward to updates and thank you for the content.
RC
2022-12-19 15:29:50 +0000 UTC
