Brother Bewitched 26
Added 2023-11-10 15:07:06 +0000 UTCDevin takes strategic action as he prepares to move against Pattenia, but will his choice doom Serren to a corseted life?
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Awesome. Keep having fun!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-23 23:17:51 +0000 UTCIt's not my intention to push you to spoil anything. Consider my comments as the ones of a Role playing games player suputing what happens and what will happen during the course of a game. You are the game master and you are not expected to confirm the players' guessing. However, this kind of suputing is part of the game, IMO. It makes the whole thing more real. And I enjoy it
Alexia
2023-11-23 14:22:45 +0000 UTCOf course, in the book I had made the spell much more involved in that it required a group effort. That was a problem I created for myself in this one. Now, at least, Devin doesn't have to worry about it. I am always reluctant to go into any spoilers, but you're reading of Devin's psychology is correct!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-23 14:14:06 +0000 UTCStill, I would insist how nice it is to have Devin resisting to the feminizing spell. Because immediately it raises suspicion toward Serren's maleness. OK, the spell had taken him by surprise, but still... If Devin could resist to the spell, why couldn't Seren do so? Could it be that some hidden part of him was ready to accept this transformation and maybe even to enjoy it? I am pretty sure that this is what Devin think now. And with that in mind, he is not likely to ever help the♀️and beautiful Serenina to come back to her former inappropriate male form... 🙂
Alexia
2023-11-23 01:58:04 +0000 UTCSo we know have Devin as a powerful male character and it is nice because this is IMHO what was lacking from the original book version. Consider that in three big volumes, no guy was manly enough to make love to the beautiful Serenina. On this department, Asryn's failure is abyssal. He is nothing more than the Paternia's escort boy, and is not even aware of his shameful status, and not daring to love Seren. I don't know how he will behave in the upcoming episodes of the comic version,, but he didn't achieve anything great until this point... 🙂
Alexia
2023-11-23 01:46:47 +0000 UTCThe easy and quick way the gender spell is casted, I have perceived it from the start as an issue. It made Paternia too much powerful and made impossible for any powerful male figure to emerge in the story. You solved this issue brilliantly. I didn't consider the spying system but you are right, this one had also to be balanced and it's nice if you had taken this in consideration.
Alexia
2023-11-23 01:34:52 +0000 UTCYou're welcome.
Joseph c guillory
2023-11-20 06:41:29 +0000 UTCThanks. I have found it. Gonna edit some and make a new cover. Then, I will post it up!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-20 04:55:54 +0000 UTCActually I mean an error its Barnes and noble nook and goodreads and kobo and fnac.com I found out so far.
Joseph c guillory
2023-11-20 04:07:12 +0000 UTCCool. I should be able to recover it the same way I did Princess King, then. I'll post it soon!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-20 03:09:11 +0000 UTCOn Amazon Kindle And Barnes & Noble nook.
Joseph c guillory
2023-11-20 03:03:02 +0000 UTCI haven’t reread Men Who Would in many years. I keep meaning to take a look! Did I ever post them?
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-19 12:58:26 +0000 UTCWell that was a big Surprise the male ego pushed out the female ego I Wonder what will happen to him and what He is going To Do. To the mage. By the way have you read the story men who would be queen again Both of them what do you think of?
Joseph c guillory
2023-11-18 21:57:25 +0000 UTCNo problem
Joe Blow78
2023-11-14 03:45:00 +0000 UTCYes, in my desire to keep some elements from the original book I feel I let the story drift away from the relationships with the guys. It is my intention to move back to into that as we will see Serren making a decision on who to pick. How could he struggle between Devin and Asryn? You'll soon find out!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-13 09:34:43 +0000 UTCSerren had his share of being teased in any possible way, and it's OK, but the poor girl didn't had many time to deepen her relationship with Devin. Or, more generally, to interact with 'real men' (Runtick doesn't count). However, girl/boy interactions matter to build feminity. The first flirting scene of King Jordain amongst the berry bushes is a nice example, if you remember of it.
Alexia
2023-11-13 04:55:15 +0000 UTCI had thought all along to show that Devin was protected, though at one point I thought I would show it as a flashback at some point when Actonia would try and fail to transform him. I also have an answer for the Actonia surveillance system, by the way! There are so many moving pieces that have to be accounted for, including now Asryn, but it is all coming toward a climax!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-12 15:30:53 +0000 UTCVery nice episode that solves smartly several problems I saw in the plot.
Alexia
2023-11-12 06:54:32 +0000 UTCThank you Joe for requesting, thank you Taylor for delivering 🙂
Alexia
2023-11-12 06:51:33 +0000 UTCThanks, Neha. Brother Bewitched gets among the fewest views of anything I post, but the passion of the readers is so intense that keeps me going!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-10 23:41:53 +0000 UTCnice chapter! unexpected, but glad devin was able to fight it off. look forward to next one. keep going taylor
Neha Raj
2023-11-10 23:26:16 +0000 UTC👍👍👍👍
Joe Blow78
2023-11-10 20:44:52 +0000 UTCI'll put something together!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-10 19:28:50 +0000 UTCI love to see the rewrites and the reshoots
Joe Blow78
2023-11-10 19:04:06 +0000 UTCThanks! This came about after a couple rewrites and reshoots, so I am happy to see the effort was appreciated it. Maybe I will post some of the out takes one of these days!
Taylor Galen Kadee
2023-11-10 18:06:00 +0000 UTCWow this just so awesome!!!!!
Joe Blow78
2023-11-10 16:38:44 +0000 UTC
