Derideal "laura edit" Episode 4
Added 2023-08-17 22:04:54 +0000 UTCHello everyone, it's been a while since I last updated the "Laura edit" version of Derideal part 1.
but I'm happy to say it's almost done now.
I had to make a hard choice in this episode of removing certain bits that I like, but that I consider would only rise more questions and confusion,
I hope this enhances reading experience, and also confuse less readers.
- most dialogs have been changed a bit, so these pages needs text revisions again :/
- story should be faster, and easier to follow now.
- Improved color contrasts.
- improved margins.
Let me know if you find any spelling or text mistakes! or something without translations.
UPDATE 1- some text have been fixed, thanks @twilight @madpostman
Comments
I was a lot into dreams and confusing reality with dreams, as Aden mind isn't exactly right. But well, those narrative isn't for everyone, so I decided to finally remove most of that in the new version, I think it's simpler and easier to understand now
Andrés Barra
2023-08-18 23:30:00 +0000 UTCI can understand why you made some changes. I admit I got a bit confused my first time through.
Kit Foxboy
2023-08-18 23:14:44 +0000 UTC
