The Tarnished Potter Chapter 11 (Threads of Fate)
Added 2025-06-06 16:34:55 +0000 UTCClick the LINK Below to Read the Chapter
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Comments
Love the story but I agree with TheWanderingWizard about the Harry's friends monologue. Harry sounds like Draco When I hear "what will Hermione do?" Or "Hermione this or Hermione that." All I hear is Draco saying "My father will hear about this" Still love the story though
GodoftheSeas21
2025-07-17 01:53:33 +0000 UTCLove the story but I just have to point out that Harry’s very repetitive inner monologue of “Had Sirius escaped the Dementors? Were Ron and Hermione safe? Had anyone been hurt?” or any similar variation is getting pretty old. I get what he’s feeling but I got it the first time. Plus it should be clear to Harry that he’s not leaving this world within the next couple of hours so he needs to realise that either time froze in the HP world he left and therefore he has nothing to worry about for his friends, or there’s nothing he can do about them anyway because considering the danger they were in, it’s probably too late to influence anything. Sorry if it’s too harsh, it isn’t my intention to be rude, just wanted to point out something that’s been bothering me for quite a few chapters now. But after the double mention in quick succession at the start of the chapter, I had to talk about it. The quick mention of Hermione being the planner or similar is fine but otherwise I’d rather follow Harry immersed in the Elden Ring universe.
TheWateringWizard
2025-06-27 16:02:34 +0000 UTCMay i have some more please
Austin Chambers
2025-06-10 11:39:08 +0000 UTCOne of my favorite stories right now, looking forward to more!
DarkLightKage
2025-06-07 14:43:22 +0000 UTCWell, the Comet Azur build obviously, it will one-shot everyone. 😁
Drinor
2025-06-07 13:57:56 +0000 UTCYeah, that was my bad. I never really used Godslayer's Greatsword that much but Harry will use it for Story reasons, I usually just use Bloodhound's Fang or other strength weapons.
Drinor
2025-06-07 13:55:54 +0000 UTCWhat’s Harry’s build
Andrew Steven
2025-06-06 23:22:00 +0000 UTCReally good job, but is the sword at the end the Godslayer’s Greatsword? Cause the royal Greatsword does not spiral and is Blaidd’s weapon
Daniel slaton
2025-06-06 22:32:51 +0000 UTCAnd now I need more lol
Josh Robbins
2025-06-06 17:16:18 +0000 UTC
