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TDE Draft chapter 5

The first draft of TDE Chapter 5 is attached below. Your comments and feedback are most welcome - preferably on the #tde-drafts channel of my Discord server You will find the link to the Sync server where the latest versions of all the draft chapters are located in the #tde-drafts-announcements channel.

In order to access the Sync server you need to link from your Patreon account to my discord server. If you can't then see the #tde-drafts channels on my Discord server, please message me and I will link you in.

There are a few questions I am particularly interested in hearing your feedback on...

1) The 'voice' in TDE is Col's (Kal's) - so it is, at the start of the book, a fourteen-year-old nearly fifteen-year-old girl talking, seeing, thinking, doing. Does the voice come across as female and age appropriate? (Bear in mind that this is a very intelligent girl, speaking five languages plus Latin and her vocabulary is abnormal as a result).

2) The setting of the book starts in England but rapidly moves to Brisbane, Australia. This impacts on the language, colloquialisms and setting. Are there elements that impact too much on a reader's understanding?

3) Then there's the usual author worries about plot, pacing, characterisation etc.

Please let me know what you think - and negative comments are as welcome as positive ones (in fact more so as they help eliminate problems).

Thank you all in advance.
Robert Hart
(Iskander)



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