After-hours 27p28 up, what's next?
Added 2019-07-06 02:24:39 +0000 UTCleave your ideas below, give a like to those you're ok with.
Since next week i'll be doing KENNOCON starting friday, i'm afraid I won't be able to do an after-hours page that week. So i'll work on my pending ref sheets and some curiouscat questions on wednesday instead. This means the next page will be finished until Friday 19th.
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and yes, a train station feels more Japanese.
MizaruSketch
2019-07-06 19:21:41 +0000 UTCI have a line Fel could say to Al: I spent my entire adult life just trying to figure out where I fit, where my place in this world is. But it was only last night with you that I realized... my place is by your side Aldo-kun!
MizaruSketch
2019-07-06 19:20:35 +0000 UTCand how about the girls are mad at Fel for butting in. It was supposed to be between the 4 of them since Fel already had her chance with Al and blew it. I have some other line ideas: Soph: What did you do to my husbando, Fel?! You don't even have anything in common with him like I do... Alex: Typical. You couldn't stomach me beating you at work AND love so you ruined everything! Trace: I could handle competition between three other girls but not some nosy cat that already had her chance with my Aldo! Muggs: It really made you insecure seeing Al with a woman bigger than you, huh? So much so that you scared him off!
MizaruSketch
2019-07-06 19:14:29 +0000 UTCFel would scream "Aldo! Wait!" offscreen, as aldo was waiting in the platform with his luggage in hand. She would try to convince him to give -them- another chance. She knows she broke his heart once, and she's feeling the exact same way right then and there. She wants to start over, she's in for real this time. Regardless of how much he works or how much he makes. Aldo looks unsure still. That's when the other 4 girls show up, to Aldo and Fel's surprise. I'm thinking this is where the page could end. Next page it could be the other girls showing how he has changed them for the better, and potentially the ending :o
Kenno Arkkan
2019-07-06 03:01:26 +0000 UTCHow about next page starts at the girls' locker room, as all the girls are changing and arguing about what happened. Blaming Fel for scaring Aldo away. I imagine a few lines like: Soph: What did you do to him, Fel?! We were finally hitting it off! I thought you were my friend... Alex: "Aldo-kun was so mine! I was willing to have some "friendly competition", but you couldn't compete, didn't you? He had to be yours, or nobody's" Trace: "What did you do? You jumped the gun, didnt you? You said the "L" word, or worse! Muggs: "--I bet you proposed to him! Only to scare him away! You couldn't deal with -a bigger woman- beating you at your game!" Fel would think for a bit, then grab her stuff, and run to the train station (train or plane? being japan, a plane sounded a bit excessive xD)
Kenno Arkkan
2019-07-06 02:51:18 +0000 UTC
