AH21 p14 up, what's next?
Added 2017-04-08 03:04:14 +0000 UTCleave your ideas below, give a like to those you're ok with.
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Though I'm unsure of is Wolfy's motivation at the time. Does he imminently starts looking for a way out or is his crazy enough to think he can stay in a den of horny supersolders with just an oversized fursuit? I think the latter would be funny and something to work with for the next chapter.
Mr Ru
2017-04-08 20:55:55 +0000 UTCMight be a good time to close the chapter up with a 1-2 page montage narrated by present-day Wolfy. Showing some 'morning after' and ending on Alpha finding her first clue about her 'spy'. Maybe Wolfy's phone fell out of his suit at some point and Alpha finds it, thinking it's a spy device or something.
Mr Ru
2017-04-08 20:50:45 +0000 UTCLast page had a typo that has been fixed :D
Kenno Arkkan
2017-04-08 16:49:28 +0000 UTCwe need a way to come full circle with the opening, I suggest a quick side plot of soph or mugger working on fixing the "human detection sytem" for the den. One of the hybrids could mention something like "hey where's soph/mugger? I thought they'd want to get in on this for sure!" cut to a panel of soph/mugger frustrated that they had IT duty today and had to fix the security system. Then the main plot can continue and when you're ready to wrap things up just have the alarm start going off because the security system got fixed.
Slikfiji
2017-04-08 16:18:29 +0000 UTCthat could lead into a little collage of various hybrids experimenting with the new male
Slikfiji
2017-04-08 16:10:34 +0000 UTCWell now obviously we need to have the next morning come up, and a snoozing Monica and Green to be had wrapped around Mr. Wolf, maybe in some silly poses or cute cuddle spots until they hear a knock on the door, Mr. Wolf gets up and looks out with Monica finally waking up, and a small little huddle of ladies are outside just kind of curious to all the hub bub that happened, and little does Mr. Wolf know, his 'zipper' is still down so they see his morning wood and he's just like. "Oh.."
Bigweld
2017-04-08 03:50:00 +0000 UTC
