The Toondocks. Thoughts?

So, I'm working on a new pitch for something I'm calling "The Toondocks" . I don't know what I'll do with it since I don't have an agent, But let me know your thoughts if you have a free half an hour or so. Warning: it's rough. Also, yes...I'm going back to the bunny missing a leg thing. Oddly, that started when I was  about 5 years old. I didn't know Aquaman's origin, so I made one up for him where he was secretly a three legged rabbit who turned into Aquaman whenever it got wet. Anyway, if you have the time, let me know your thoughts. Especially where it needs work Thanks!:

SETTING:

THE WORLD OF ANIMATION IS AN ACTUAL PLACE!

In another dimension, there is a world of animated characters made up of several lands. Those lands call themselves The United Animation Nations. Lands that make up the UAN are The Fields of Creativity, where ideas for animated cartoons are born, and the lands where all the cartoon characters from the Fields of Creativity are trying to get to: Loonland, Fantasy World, Ad City, Hero-opolis, Education Junction, and Gross-Out Point.

In the center of those places is: The Toondocks!!!

The Toondocks is where all the animated characters come to pitch their ideas for their shows to get to the main lands where they will be filmed and sent to the human world. This is very important as animated characters only live for as long as you’re remembered in our world, so the more humans who remember you for the longest period of time, the longer you live. (Sadly, most animated characters don’t make it longer than the memory of their creator)

While in the Toondocks the characters pitching their shows take day-to-day jobs, from garbage men to politicians to grim reaper (more on that below), that keep the UAN running.

MAIN CAST OF CHARATERS

Stumper Bunny: Stumper is the world’s unluckiest cartoon character. Created with a missing leg which would have included her “lucky rabbit’s foot”, she is our lead character. Usually a cheerful optimist but due to her lifetime of bad luck, she has underpinnings of self doubt.

Despite her bad luck, and possibly because of it, she was picked to come to the Toondocks by her co-stars of a proposed show called “Wise Acres'' about a forest full of funny woodland animals. Now the existence of all her friends depends on her selling the show.

She is trying to become the next Spongbob, but the odds and her luck are against her…and that’s not all that may be against her. Secretly it may not be her missing foot that’s causing her bad luck, it may be that deep down she doesn’t actually want to be famous, and is only doing so because of her famous mother’s pressure on her (see “Recurring Characters” below).

Still, no matter what she discovers about herself, she’ll handle it with unbridled enthusiasm no matter how many obstacles may try and crush her brave spirit…or how many falling anvils squash her fragile body.

Chase the Dragon: Back in the 1980’s, Chase did everything from smoking dragonweed to snorting pixie dust through a hollowed out unicorn horn. Chase was originally the villain in an 80’s anti-drug PSA cartoon. After the gig, Chase cleaned up and has since been working as a counselor in the local “Drug and Children’s Cereal Rehabilitation Center” in his neighborhood.

The deadpan snarker of the group, Chase has realized he was literally drawn to be bad, then abandoned. Due to what he sees as this absurdity of his creation, he’s developed an ironic self of humor. He represents Stumper’s self doubt.

He is also a cryptozoosexual, only being attracted to mythological animals.

Anna May, The Monster Hunter: A cross between a Muppet and “Blade, The Vampire Hunter”, Anna Mae is a half monster/half human (aka a Manster aka a Humon) in the year 2000, she set to have her own have a toy line and cartoon where she protected kids from the monsters in their closets and under their beds. Then “Monsters Inc.” came out and children began crying at the site of Anna May thinking she was going to hurt Scully and Mike from that movie and, as Anna May herself put it, “That’s not nice”.

Despite no longer having a show or toyline, almost everywhere Anna May goes her arch enemy, Queen Green Meanie, turns everyday objects into giant monsters she needs to fight and defeat.

She makes her living working for Golly G. Goat (see “Villains” below) as a sort of cartoon “Grim Reaper” collecting no longer remembered cartoons and sending them to cartoon limbo.

Despite all the above, Anna Mae is childlike, innocent, sweet, and upbeat to a literally limitless degree. She has NO self doubt. Ever. As such, she represents Stumper’s optimism.

Professor Featherbrain: The stereotypical “wise old owl in a graduation cap” from a 1960’s childrens’ show who at the end of every episode would throw his cap in the air and catch it. Every episode but one. The one where he missed and his graduation cap embedded itself in his head.

Due to being an education character, he lacks the self healing a “loon” cartoon would, and is now the “dumb guy” of the group, ala Patrick from “Sponge Bob Squarepants” or Soos from “Gravity Falls”. He’s simpleminded, but extremely loyal, and…a complete party animal! He is ALWAYS looking for a good time!

He also has a secret…he’s faking it. The missed hat catching? The head injury? All fake. He actually became SO smart he realized the smartest thing to do is just enjoy life, so he faked the accident so people wouldn’t expect anything from him. He represents Stumper realizing this same thing about herself.

Puber-Teen: A puberty based teen superhero, Puber-Teen has the world’s most disgusting array of superpowers: Explozits (pimples that can be used as bombs), Attacne (like expozits, but on his back, and firing en masse), “Pubues-scent” (a stench so powerful it can knock people out), Body O-Door (his one armpit is a portal to a dementia filled with monsters) and a voice so screechy/pitchy, it can destroy the eardrums of all who here it. .

Clumsy and awkward, Puber-Teen represents Stumper’s fear that she is too damaged to be loved.

Jo Caffeine: Jo is the stressed out “big sister” of the group…if your big sister is like the Kool-Aid man chock full of coffee! Owner of “Caffeine Nation”, the coffee shop our cast hangs out in and where Anna Mae works, she is the “good parent” to Golly G, Goat’s “bad parent” (see below) and gives her customers an ear to listen to them and often pours a hot up of advice along with their beverages. Of course, she’s also an anthropomorphic coffee pot filled with scalding hot coffee, so all this sistering comes out in a manic manner with a pitchy, screeching voice, but a heartfelt manic manner and pitchy, screeching voice.

Being almost completely made of caffeine, while also being the “rock” of the group, leaves Jo as stressed out as she seems. She represents the stress Stumper is under to sell “Wise Acres”.

Mr. Scribbles: An anthropomorphic scribble, Mr. Scribbles is Stumper’s pet that she found eating trash in an alleyway. He can eat anything and, since everything in The Toondocks is drawn, he poops it out as silly little simplistic cartoons. Like a puppy, he's little, cute, happy…and mostly oblivious.

THE VILLAINS:

Golly G. Goat: Due to his possessing The Necronomicomic, a comic book that acts as a portal between the animated world and our own, Golly G Goat is one of the most powerful creatures in show business. He is the owner of The Hackneyed Corporation, and Anna-May and Stumper’s boss.

He’s a 1930’s “rubber hose”-style animated character who started out at the same time as Mickey Mouse, Bugs Bunny, Felix the Cat, etc. but soon realized he wasn’t meant for the same stardom as them, so he got into the business end of the animation business. How did a cartoon character do this? Easy. By selling his soul to corporate America. Seriously. He worked with the animation studios to produce The Necronomicomic.

Since then, Hackneyed Corp provides all the other cartoon characters with anything they need, from doomsday devices for supervillains. jellyfish nets, anvils, to tasks like casting to on-set catering while providing the cartoons we watch to the various animation studios in our world.

He hires Stumper as his right-hand-character because he realizes giving her a job she hates, when combined with her own bad luck, will make her (and hence Hackneyed Corp) incredibly successful.

He has three G’s on the side of his head that look like a 666.

Toast-Borg: Toast-Borg comes from a future where advertising cartoons for food products rule the world. He was teleported to the present when Professor Featherbrain tried to invent a toaster that would toast bread in no time, and accidentally created a toaster-time machine.

Toast-Borg wants The Necronomicomic in order to bring about the future from which he comes.

The Creator: The main villain, The Creator is an out of work human cartoonist who wants to transport himself into the animated world to become its ruler! Sure, other creators have had themselves animated into cartoons but The Creator wants to be the first 3-Dimensional human to enter the animated world, the world’s first Animated Astronaut, so he can be like a GOD!

He is working with Toast-borg to meet his ends, although Toast-Borg doesn’t know the extent of his plans.

(If picked up, I’d want to use a pen name, like Sid O’Nimm or Alan Smithee so it seems like this is the creator of the show itself doing this.)

RECURRING CHARACTERS

Beatrice Bunny: One of the most successful childrens’ educational characters of all time, Beatrice Stumper’s judgmental mother. She is embarrassed by having a daughter who is a “loon” instead of being an educational character like her.

Secretly though it’s actually because Beatrice has a secret: Her daughter wasn’t just born a “loon”. Stumper is the result of an affair Beatrice had with a “loon”.

Rip: Jo Caffeine's paper-cup son. He’s hyperactive and mischievous (due to being filled with coffee) but not too bright (due to the tear in the top of him). He gets around on a skateboard made from a spoon.

OVERALL PLOT AND THEMES

The overall theme of “The Toondocks” is finding yourself, and the idea of happiness vs success and discovering personal happiness is the most successful thing you can achieve and not material things. We’ll do this through having Stumper discover she wasn’t born unlucky, she’s sabotaging her attempts at fame because she doesn’t want to be famous like her mother, she just wants to be.

Plotwise the show will start off as a “episode of the week” show, but there will be an overreaching arch of The Creator using Toast-Borg to steal the Necronomicomic and enter the animated world. When they do finally get their hands on the demonic comic, they find out organic matter can’t go through it, so they send a drawing tablet from the real world to the animated world, and The Creator draws himself into the animated world on the three dimensional tablet, making him a God. He is defeated when Mr. Scribbles eats the tablet, turns ginormous and then eats the creator. Scribbles then poops out the tablet with the creator trapped in a file on it where he thinks he’s still a god in the animated world.

With their world destroyed, and a tablet that can redraw it, Stumper realizes she can recreate the world however she wants…and that she wouldn’t create it in any other way then it was because she loves her friends, their life together and, at long last, herself.

INDIVIDUAL EPISODES:

(Work in Progress)