Emperor's Shadow: Chapter 23
Added 2022-02-25 22:35:32 +0000 UTCIn which Vishta comes face to face with a legend.
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“I was merely concerned that another would have to be a sacrifice for the greatest good.” Greatest or Greater? Might want to double check that. “Better to be the pet of the bestest one I’ve said.” Bestest one? I think you should replace it with, Better to be the pet of the greater, nah, greatest dragon to ever live. (A HA I FOUND THE THING I WAS LOOKING FOR!!!) though that’s no surprise considering the connection that we share, ancient, but powerful. I took him for a naïve fool, yet here he is with what should be mine. I bet he thinks this prize will garner him a place at my father’s side.” Missing a " in the beginning. Seeing how the queen is apart of Tiamat i might suggest changing the soul piece to something else where instead of a white mist a gold sliver or gold misty orb appears and then swallowed.
Cryodrake
2022-03-08 21:42:53 +0000 UTC