Part 3 - Chapter 14
Added 2023-08-07 16:59:01 +0000 UTCMay as well get the bad news out of the way first. It was time to look at Scarred again and see if he’d missed anything. It was totally unfair. A fight to the death with an absurdly high-level undead, and he got a decrease to healing speed? He had to be reading that wrong. When he pulled up the status screen, there was a little more information.
Title: Scarred
An undead delivered a wound to your face that inflicted necromantic rot. You have been scarred.
Your wounds heal 10% slower.
This title cannot be lost while the wound or scar remains.
That sounded like the Title had come from some kind of ability or Skill. The wording “while the wound or scar remains” was promising, though. Hopefully that meant that there was something he could do to nullify it, or possibly even turn it into a positive?
He remembered back in his old world, there were a bunch of people who liked to come up with worthless superpowers, and then find a way to exploit them to be crazy powerful. Your toast always lands on the butter side down? Put butter on both sides and you have infinite energy. Try as he might, he couldn’t think of an exploit for ‘your wounds heal slower’.
It was dumb because he wasn’t even scarred yet. Scarring is what happened later. You weren’t scarred when your wound was still bleeding. The cheek where he’d been punched ached, while the one where he’d been cut felt like it was on fire. He didn’t even have anything for it now, but he didn’t think he was in danger of bleeding out or anything. He could take care of it when he got home.
The next notification was more exciting.
Alert!
You have defeated:
Elite Undead Soldier Scout [32]
Due to level disparity extra experience will be rewarded.
Alert!
Your System is currently locked. Experience will be rewarded as free attributes.
+5 free attributes.
Please assign them within the next 13 hours or they will expire.
Brin pumped his fist. That was eight now. He could bring Dexterity, Will, or Vitality to the second threshold. Or if he put them all into Magic, he’d only need three more to get to the first threshold. Then he’d have the complete set.
He could do it, too. He didn’t need to fight monsters alone anymore; he already had that achievement. He just needed a bit more experience. Surely Hogg would help him with that.
It was also strange that Cadwy was only level 32, when he was so much stronger, or at least faster, than the other undead he’d fought. The word Elite must be important. Levels weren’t always a good judge of how dangerous something was. He’d proven that tonight.
Congratulations!
You have upgraded an achievement.
Warbound (Epic)
Without aid, you have defeated an enemy soldier before unlocking your System.
You sing the song of the battlefield and your enemies fall before you.
+10% Dexterity. +50% experience from melee combat upgraded to +100%.
Skill granted: Battle Fury
Notice: System skills are locked pending full System access.
Oh come on! Why was he only rolling snake-eyes today? The System had unlocked Monster Sense for him, but not Battle Fury? That was unfair. He couldn’t wait to find out what it did. It sounded awesome.
Although, the 100% experience increase was incredible. He’d basically level up twice as fast as anyone else, from melee combat, at least. He was starting to realize he didn’t actually like melee combat. Too much a chance of getting his face cut to pieces, even when he won. He should really learn to use a bow.
The notifications weren’t finished.
Congratulations!
You have gained an achievement.
Filial Piety (Epic)
You performed a noble act of service to your father at great risk to yourself, freeing his captive soul from those who bound him in servitude.
Extra resistance against mental manipulation, soul manipulation, and Mana pool manipulation.
You may also pick one of the following options:
Strength of arm to match your strength of character
Mental fortitude to always know what must be done
Magical growth to gain more wisdom of the world
Brin didn’t have to think about the choice for long. He selected magical growth.
You have received:
+100% Magic attribute growth.
He had been hoping it would be a straight-up increase to Magic to push him over the threshold, but still it was an unexpected boon. He had never considered that man his father, but apparently it counted even if it was only your birth father. The hundred percent Magic attribute growth was like water in the desert. Hogg had made light of the regular +10% attribute growth he’d gotten with other achievements, saying it didn’t mean much against the natural rule of diminishing returns from training your attributes, but 100% still had to be something special. He might even be able to train up to twenty-six using the mana drainer, never mind getting Hogg to help him hunt monsters.
As far as the other stuff was concerned, it was kind of scary to hear the System talk about soul manipulation. Was that something that could happen? Hopefully that just meant being bound as an undead. Cadwy hadn’t seemed all that bothered by the experience. And mind manipulation? What did that look like? Would he even know if it was happening to him? Well, better to know what was out there and have resistance to it, rather than not know and be vulnerable.
Things were looking up, but he was feeling… down.
The adrenaline from the fight was wearing off, and now the pain from his wounds were starting to overwhelm him. The burning cut, the aching bruises, not just on his face, but everywhere. Was there any part of his body that didn’t get hurt somehow? Even the spider bites from earlier were painfully itchy.
He grabbed everything from the area he felt he should. His sword. The spear. The head of his father. He needed proof of what he’d seen tonight. Hogg would believe him, but he figured the town would need to see a zombie head for it all to sink in.
He stumbled back south… ish. Night was falling and he couldn't find the sun behind the clouds.
His journey felt long, although he probably only went ten steps before Hogg caught him.
“Oh thank G– thank Solia,” said Brin. “Were you watching?”
“Of course I was watching,” said Hogg.
“You said you weren’t going to watch.”
“Of course I said I wasn’t going to watch. Otherwise you’d have known there was a safety net and your rewards would’ve been smaller,” said Hogg. “Look, you can trust me. Just not always my words.”
Hogg eased Brin onto the ground, and then started digging around in a satchel. He had that and a backpack–Brin’s backpack. The one with Marksi in it.
Hogg himself looked pale and worried. Oh, he probably heard all that stuff about the army.
“I didn’t like it. I knew you wouldn’t want me to intervene in that fight, not when it still looked like you were going to make it, but just sitting there watching you fight for your life and not doing anything? I didn’t like it. I really–” Hogg stopped abruptly, frowning hard.
“Thanks,” said Brin. “Thank you for trusting me. And thank you for looking out for me. Next time, you can step in.”
“There isn’t going to be a ‘next time’. Your days of going off on our own are done, you hear me? You want to get stronger, you're doing it the normal, slow way.”
“Fine with me. But Marksi–”
“Huh? He’s fine. He’s in here. Sleeping.” Hogg absently patted his backpack, and then apparently found what he was looking for in the satchel. It was a white square. An adhesive bandage of some kind. He pressed it against Brin’s cut cheek.
He hissed when it felt like he’d been stabbed all over again, this time by something cold, but the pain soon faded, and it took the burning pain with it, drawing it out like oil from the desert. From the corner of his eye, he saw the bandage turn black and start to steam. Hogg
“He got you with something potent here. Lucky I got to it,” said Hogg.
“Was it… poisoned? I didn’t know they used poison,” said Brin.
“Probably a Skill of some kind.”
“I got a Title off that. Scarred. It’s a permanent ten percent loss to my healing speed,” said Brin.
Hogg winced in sympathy. “Stronger undead have permanent debuffs. Nasty stuff, that. Scarred can be fixed, but it’ll take a specialist. Nobody like that in the Boglands. There are other ways to turn it around, though.”
Hogg prodded his spider bites, then took out an ointment and started dabbing it on.
“Ok, but Marksi, he ate something,” said Brin.
Hogg paused. “What?”
“Some kind of stone. Probably a beast core, from the Fecal… Falafel…”
“Facaldagart.”
“Yeah, that.”
“Bit of an expensive snack, but he can probably handle it. We’ll keep an eye on him.”
Brin sagged in relief. “Oh, good.”
“Alright, where else are you hurt?” asked Hogg.
“My chest?”
“Nothing broken, but you’ll be sore in the morning,” said Hogg. “You’re bleeding somewhere else. I can smell it.”
Brin tried to think. There’d been so much today that trying to think of every time he’d been hit was difficult for his frazzled mind. The spiders had bit him, the giant lizard he knocked him around, but the armor had protected him. The undead soldier… Oh, right. His arm.
He held up his forearm. “I’m surprised you couldn’t just, you know, see in the dark.”
“We don’t know what else is watching. I’d rather not turn the lights on,” said Hogg.
Brin held up his lighter with the other hand and created a candle-sized flame. His forearm looked worse than he remembered it being. Blood ran through the rent in the armor and down to his elbow.
“I think I can glue this shut,” said Hogg, and reached into the rent with a dab of a green substance that smelled like rotten spinach. It stung when it touched the skin. Hogg pinched the cut closed, and the bleeding stopped soon after.
“Next time I go on an adventure, I’m bringing medical supplies,” said Brin.
“You think?” asked Hogg.
Hogg dug in his rucksack again, and brought out a small yellow bottle. “Drink this.”
Brin examined it. Ten silver. He knocked it back and it tasted like nothing, but somehow had a really terrible limey aftertaste.
He started feeling warm. Light. The pain in his body seemed to melt away, and the fog in his mind lifted. He’d really been fading there for a second; now that he was back to himself, he could tell.
He wasn’t just free from pain, he felt good. Energetic. He could run the entire way back home.
“What is that stuff?” asked Brin. “You’ve been holding out on me! I know it wasn’t that expensive, so why aren’t we drinking that all the time?”
“Because it’s absurdly addictive. I’m not even going to tell you what it's called, because you’re going to be craving it for the next two days. Also, it doesn’t actually fix what’s wrong with you. You’re still going to be very sore in the morning, and now your headache will be ten times worse.”
“Huh,” said Brin. Sure that didn’t sound the best, but right now he didn’t care. He tested winding his arms around in circles, marveling at how all the soreness was just gone. “So you heard all the stuff my zombie dad told me?”
“I did!” Hogg’s face lit up. “It’s great! Well, no, it’s terrible. The worst possible scenario. But at least now we know! Finally! I’ve been in the dark for so long, imagining every possible nightmare, and now finally we have something to go off of.”
“What are we going to do about it? We have to tell everyone,” said Brin.
“Already on it. I have a mirror image in Oud’s Bog as we speak, dictating letters to send to every corner of the nation, and hopefully it won’t matter if they arrive or not, because I have eyes heading to the capitol and the Tower, as well as the front lines with the same message. Soon, everyone will know. We need to warn the town, too, though. You should take that head and bring it to the Prefit. Tell him everything you saw and heard. The undead, the army, and don’t forget to mention that a certain [Weaver] manipulated a child into near certain death. She may have saved us all, but that kind of thing is illegal around here, or so I hear.”
“Got it,” said Brin with a smile. “But what are you going to do?”
Hogg looked off into the forest, then back at Brin, clearly conflicted. “I have to go after them. They can fool my illusions, but I can track them in person. This might be our one chance to find the real army. Even with the letters, and even if it’s me saying it, if we don’t have the army, then…”
“Go,” said Brin.
“But–”
“You should go! Get going now, the trail is getting cold! I’ll be fine,” said Brin. “I’m going straight back to town, and you just came from that direction. There’s nothing there. I’ll be safe. Just make sure you come back, ok?”
Hogg clenched his jaw. “Arg! Fine. I’m keeping a mirror image with you, just in case.”
A fake Hogg popped up next to Brin, and the real one disappeared into the forest.
Brin shrugged. “Well, I guess I’ll be getting back.”
He started walking with Hogg’s mirror image by his side. He didn’t engage the man in conversation. Hogg was doing at least three things at once right now, and it wouldn’t be helpful to pull away any of his attention. He contented himself with the cool night air and the feeling that the danger was finally over.
It was probably the drug potion Hogg had given him, but he felt good. Content. It was a beautiful night. The clouds were blocking the stars, but the rain had stopped and the world felt fresh and that beautiful after-rainstorm aroma hung in the air. It was quiet, the birds and bugs were still asleep from the cold and rain, but he figured they’d start chirping any moment now.
Hogg knew where to go, so Brin followed him, hands on the back of his head.
With no warning, Hogg’s illusion disappeared. A second later, Brin heard crunching footsteps behind him–loud walking so he wouldn’t be startled. It was Hogg, the real one.
“Nope. I don’t feel good about it. I’m not letting you walk back alone. I’ll pick up the trail later if I can, but only after I see you safe in town.”
“That’s stupid,” Brin pointed out. “Even if I die on the way back, which I won’t, the army is more important. Figuring out where the army is could save thousands.”
Hogg shook his head. He walked right past Brin, moving quickly so that Brin had to trot to keep up. “I was thinking, see? I was thinking about what the [Weaver] done. She used you, she messed with your mind playing all those games, pushing you to get stronger and meaner. Oh well, people are mean sometimes, I thought. Lots of people are mean to children because they just don’t like children. [Weaver] at least, she got a reason, right? [Weaver’s] always got a reason.”
Hogg was slipping into an accent, one Brin didn’t really recognize. Hogg never had the most meticulous diction, sure, but this was new.
“Maybe it was a good one,” said Brin, not knowing why he was sticking up for someone he truly didn’t like.
“Yeah, but then tonight. She put you in danger with her ‘choice’ that was no choice at all. And I… I went along. That’s what I’ve been doing wrong, see? A village elder, she can say ‘One must die for the good of all’, but a parent, that’s something different. Parents protect their kids no matter what, even if all the rest of the world burns for it. I had no call to let her do that to you. I should have put a stop to it.”
“I didn’t want you to,” said Brin.
“That’s the truth. Well, so what? That’s also part of being a parent. I should have done it anyway. I should have told you that you had to take a break once in a while and have some fun, rather than training all day every day.”
“I’m not a child. I–”
“Grown-ups need someone to tell them that, too. You have one week of childhood left and I learn all this now. Noctis’ starry abyss, I’m a slow study.”
Brin put a hand on his shoulder, awkward because of how quick he had to walk to keep up. “I think you’re doing just fine. You’re trying. I can see that, and it’s all I ever asked.”
Hogg grunted.
They walked along, and Brin expected his energy drink to wear off, but if anything the effect just got stronger and stronger, until he started feeling like they were going too slow. Yeah, people really shouldn’t be drinking this stuff. It hadn’t even worn off yet and he already wanted another one.
“What’s she doing now?” asked Brin.
“She’s with the Prefit,” said Hogg.
“What are they talking about?”
“I don’t usually eavesdrop on people I know, but… yep. She’s flirting with him. Awkwardly. He’s not having it. I’m shutting that out.”
Brin laughed at the scandalized expression on Hogg’s face.
“Hey, so listen, I was thinking,” said Brin. Now was as good a time as any to bring up the Magic threshold thing. He figured he’d start with asking Hogg to skip town, and when he shot that down he’d ask Hogg to help him hunt monsters. Better chance of getting a yes on the second question. “System day is in a week, and frankly it sucks. It’s completely unfair that I’m losing out on almost six months of preparation just because this town has a stupid Skill. Is there any chance you could get me to another town and register residency there, so I’d have a bit more time?”
To his surprise, Hogg actually took the time to mull it over. Then he nodded. “Sure, we could do that.”
Brin stumbled over his own feet, tumbling to his knees. Hogg helped him up.
“You mean… just like that?”
“Well, why not? I mean, I want to protect my home. But I also want to protect you, and frankly, Lumina would thank me if I took you away from the center of the coming disaster. There are plenty of places that would be safer than Hammon’s Bog for the next year or two, looks like. I could get you to Eduard’s Bog in a day, or Oud’s Bog in three days if we hurry. Hammon’s Bog won’t miss me if I’m just gone for a week or two. I reckon they won’t miss you at all.”
Brin laughed. “No, I imagine they won’t.”
A notification appeared.
Alert!
You have reached majority.
Your System will be unlocked.
Please prepare for Class Selection.
“What? What, no. That can’t be right!” Brin said, desperately trying to blink away the notification. “I still have a week!”
“What is it? What’s going on?” Hogg searched Brin’s eyes.
“It’s saying I’m unlocking my System. Can people spoof System messages?” asked Brin.
Hogg’s eyes glazed over. “Damn it all! The Prefit did this! Tawna had him move System day up a week!”
“What? Why?”
“More like, how did she know what we were just talking about? It can’t be anything else, can it? She doesn’t want us to leave. Burn her! And burn this town! They can’t do this to you.”
“What should I do?”
Hogg wiped his face with his hands, “Get ready, I guess. Let’s find someplace dry so you don’t wake up soaking wet.”
Hogg found a pine, and swiped away the lower branches with one slash of his shortsword, making a nice covered little area where they could sit on dry pine needles.
Brin sat, in shock. Well, no, the sad part was he wasn’t shocked. He knew, somehow, that they were going to take it away from him.
He had to make a quick decision. Vitality was higher than Dexterity. He put six points into Vitality, bringing it up to the second threshold. Notifications announced that he got the expected Lively II and upgrade to Workhorse. He didn’t read them. He put the last three points into Magic, bringing it up to eighteen. Hopefully it would be enough.
Hogg couldn’t even look at him. The old guy’s jaw was clenched so tight it looked like he might break his teeth, and he kept gulping.
Brin sighed. “I’m ready.”
Class Selection Initiated.
Comments
Then drop it lol. It's not an airport you don't have to announce your departure.
John Evans
2023-08-09 17:10:41 +0000 UTCToday is the daaaay.... Please no more cliffhangers.
Elvis Malkic
2023-08-09 16:31:35 +0000 UTCYah, Tawna needs to fucking die. She may not have the Witch class but that bitch is nothing but spite and evil. Fuck her. Edit: also, I'd bail any damn way. And try to get all my friends out too.
Fortunis
2023-08-09 08:08:49 +0000 UTCI would not say it's cartoon evil, it's a megalomaniac power tripping when her control is challenged. It's dumb and basically what you would expect from Karen. Entitlement, check, belief that people should survey her, check, thinking she is above the rules, check. As to him not getting everything, I'm kind of happy he did not. If he did he would have less room to grow. If you start out of then conflict is contrived or meaningless and change to fix flaws is equal irrelevant. Don't get me wrong I love watching people brake the chains and get elevated to dumbness but the path is more interesting if there is real struggles.
Nick Pincus
2023-08-09 04:21:38 +0000 UTCI actually think the chapter is good. I do not understand all the comments acting like Tawna is a cartoon evil, from what I read she hasn't revealed the whole story yet. I am a bit dissapointed he couldn't reach the magic threshold however, but as long as he gets a cool class, it's probably fine. He got the 100% magic attribute to compensate for the 10% he would get from the title anyway,
Samuel Alexander Vall Andersen
2023-08-09 02:00:22 +0000 UTCIf this bitch gets no consequences for doing that Imma be pissed.
Mario Nunez
2023-08-09 00:49:49 +0000 UTCThis is starting to get a little ridiculous like we are getting into Bleach Izan territory with how this is playing out. Also wouldn’t every other parent in the bog be kind of pissed about this? This is kinda shattering my suspension of disbelief. At first I hated Tawna now it just seems so forced how she knows everything and plans for everything. And how all she’s done is in service to the one timeline where they all get out. It just feels like bad writing at this point.
Baconwargod
2023-08-08 15:33:02 +0000 UTCNah, I might be dropping this depending the next level of cartoon level evil.
Krimo
2023-08-08 15:28:00 +0000 UTCIt can also be ok if the characters can't control what they see and all they get is very vague. So it works more like "the insiting insident". "So why are we in this town again? Right something might happen". Also helps if the oracle isn't an direct part of the storry they are more like the pope. They are there you can listen to what he is saying. But he talkes more about the overall stuff and not the individuals. There is also the people the mother used that was an greate use of "divination". High cost can't be used on everyting and when focused on the past it's is relativley presice.
Håvard
2023-08-08 14:59:21 +0000 UTCI have half a mind to drop this. I do not hate the fact Brin doesn't get more time for stats, but the timing and the way it was depicted? Tawna, AGAIN? Honestly, I hate stories where divinition is actually a thing. Where is the free will? What is the point of it if some character knows the future? I usual just ignore those parts if possible, or in your case you did mention that Brin's future is supposed to be hard to divine but... it obviously isn't given Tawna literally forsaw all this. And I hate it. It is the equivalent of adding a ROB into the story. I'll give it a go a bit more, but overall, the way it is written (way too overdramatic plot, too much MC bashing / Tawna centric), and the plot device of divinition being an actual branch of magic that is seemingly widely used is... eh, not my cup of tea.
Dull Pen
2023-08-08 10:51:03 +0000 UTCThe story so far seems to have established that Tawna gets a free pass to be obviously evil because…. Poor old spinster everyone feels sorry for?
David Ford
2023-08-08 10:07:16 +0000 UTCI think I get it. Tawna has serious control issues. Imagine if you could see the "future" or something like it for years. You feel like the queen of this small bog town and no one doubts your word. Then a little freak with a VERY strange name strolls into town and NOTHING in your weave makes sense anymore. She's gone from being in complete control to absolutely helpless, so she does what she can to reclaim her power. Flirt with powerful men, spread rumors, lead a child into potentially deadly situations and rob him of all the joys of childhood. You know, typical megalomaniac stuff.
Jax9d8
2023-08-08 10:00:33 +0000 UTCThis is very cartoon villain level of evil… the evil witch seduces the dim prefect to screw over the MC for…. No real reason beyond ohhh im an eeeeeevil witch
David Ford
2023-08-08 09:29:21 +0000 UTCPure rage
julian hu
2023-08-08 07:00:22 +0000 UTCDoes Tawna run the Bog or something?
Traellium
2023-08-08 02:51:42 +0000 UTCDude. This is too much...
Krimo
2023-08-08 01:06:17 +0000 UTCNah I still want brin to bounce and leave them to their fate. Maybe take his one friend with him. Screw that whole town.
Austin
2023-08-07 22:14:59 +0000 UTCHogg shook his head. He walked right past Brin, moving quickly so that Brin had to trot to keep up. “I was thinking, see? I was thinking about what the [Weaver] done. She used you, she messed with your mind playing all those games, pushing you to get stronger and meaner. Oh well, people are mean sometimes, I thought. Lots of people are mean to children because they just don’t like children. [Weaver] at least, she got a reason, right? [Weaver’s] always got a reason.” Hogg was slipping into an accent, one Brin didn’t really recognize. Hogg never had the most meticulous diction, sure, but this was new. *******RED FLAG****** Who the hell checks for mind control around here? The priest? Yea a quick detour might be advised for back-up and moral authority. Might be the best bet before face-checking the resident meat-shield.
Bryan Thew
2023-08-07 22:00:23 +0000 UTCthis was extremely heavy handed imo, i dont really like this chapter
DANTE
2023-08-07 21:27:22 +0000 UTCIs everything set in stone? Because this could convince Hogg to let Brian quickly hunt something to get the extra attribute points to get all his stats to the first milestone. Maybe at least magic.
Quyan640
2023-08-07 21:15:09 +0000 UTCUnless she's seen a time limit. The army attacking before the system day and that would have lead to his death etc
NoviceNouns
2023-08-07 21:08:20 +0000 UTCI wonder whether the deaths of Tawna, Elmon and Hogg are actually down to this - Hogg's gonna go fecking nuts at the Prefit and Tawna for manipulating Brin's development, to the point where I think he might try and kill them both. Self-fulfilling prophecy created by Tawna's own manipulations that ends up killing her.
Torauth
2023-08-07 21:01:58 +0000 UTCI wonder if Solia will have anything to say. She's been quite protective of Brin so far and making sure he gets a fair deal out of things.
NoviceNouns
2023-08-07 21:00:18 +0000 UTCHopefully the punishment comes from his mother, perhaps conscription
FuriousDee
2023-08-07 20:29:20 +0000 UTCNever at best she may get a heroic death
FuriousDee
2023-08-07 20:27:37 +0000 UTCConsidering everything if she doesnt get any punishment from the system or from the law for this somethig is very wrong. She just intentionally with full knowledge about what she where doing interfered with a child and well his development.
Håvard
2023-08-07 20:14:22 +0000 UTCI really like what's cooking here with Tawna manipulating fate, she set up Brin to get as strong as possible & bring back word of the undead threat, or die. Either way she solves her problems, with Brin dead the future that was clouded when he came to town becomes clearer, with him strong the town has a better chance of surviving what's coming no matter what so she's giving him the tough love treatment, initially to drive him away out of frustrated spite but now to make him strong in case the worst comes. What she didn't anticipate when she manipulated him is him coming across his own dad and getting so much good info that was immediately actionable by Hogg, or that they would bond so much & get that magic achievement. With that the undead army is now exposed and forced to make its rush to safety through the town, Brin now wants to move to another village to work on his magic and get more achievements and Hogg is likely to join him, removing two major pieces of protection for the town. So belatedly seeing that she takes the only path that would keep the two there is moving up the system initialisation so that Brin and Hogg don't have a reason to bounce and also a reason to stay, to get justice from Tawna, so they have more of a chance of being in town when shit hits the fan. It's purely selfish from her and she's purely doing it to save her own / her daughter's skin but she said herself that when she sees the future with Brin in it, he's either dead or a shining beacon of safety so she needs him a. Powerful and b. In town so she can try to make it through what's to come. It sets up Brin to get an interesting class and then immediately get to use it when things start falling apart now the secret of the army is out and the magic feat still allows him to get a cool magic swordsman class. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Ed
2023-08-07 20:13:07 +0000 UTCIm also starting to believe that Tawna is not a common weaver variant, and that the only way to save everyone was for her to manipulate Brin. Taking bets that she will turn into a positive character
Elvis Malkic
2023-08-07 20:04:12 +0000 UTCThe more I think on this, the more it annoys me. Hasn't it been established that messing with children's system stuff is basically a death sentence? If so, the Prefit essentially just committed suicide. I'm giving the benefit of the doubt here, but this one is stretching my suspension of disbelief.
hmDrake
2023-08-07 19:57:28 +0000 UTCI bet weaver can spy through anything she made, and she put a single stitching on him before she left
Rhys Jones
2023-08-07 19:30:04 +0000 UTCwowee. im foaming at the mouth for another chapter, worde than that pcp potion brin took. or is it skooma? I think where we are in the story is perfect but this last freaking prestige reveal from Tawna is on the edge of reality. Right now it has this feeling that she is a puppet master, literally moving everyone to her tune. Now characters without magic have been shown to do that in media but they are always presented as a mastermind. Tawna has not been presented in that way at all beyond her weaver abilities . i mean if she had a super rare variant of weaver like [supreme weaver of fate] why is she even in this town? why hasnt she left this town and headed somewhere safer long ago? oh her weaver power told her to stay.... well now everything that feels off or as a plot hole can be neta explained by her powers. so when fate or oracle powers like these are over used it feels contrived and with little method to fight it. even hog staying felt like it was all according to kaikiku. the story still works for now but i think she needs to be removed. thanks for coming to my ted talk about how i reeeeeeeeeeeeeealy wanna kill tawna riiiight now!
Lazerus56
2023-08-07 19:21:43 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
George R
2023-08-07 19:19:40 +0000 UTCSo the theory Tawna is doing all this to strengthen him thru adversity is out the window since she definitely sabotaged his change to get even stronger. Even if it had only been another week instead of 6 months he still could have pulled something more off. I am starting to think she could be in league with the enemy, and not just some selfish shrew.
Eric M
2023-08-07 19:17:19 +0000 UTCFinally!
Brandon Baier
2023-08-07 19:16:48 +0000 UTCHe's had a lot of time and agency to power up, interference by others was expected and foreshadowed a TON. The play by the Weaver angers me emotionally (which is a good sign for the reader, we're invested) but I agree I think it's better for the story.
Nodlehs
2023-08-07 19:08:53 +0000 UTCI hope he gives both the Prefit and Weaver the what for, just a nice strong beating to almost death.
Nodlehs
2023-08-07 19:03:49 +0000 UTCI would disagree. At no point in time did Brin have his agency taken away. Every choice he made was because he wanted to. Tawna just acted in a way that Brin naturally makes the choices that she also wants. Brin even stated that it’s also what he wanted. Up until now, Tawna has only helped Brin achieve the things he was already trying to achieve.
Zadumu
2023-08-07 18:59:48 +0000 UTCsounded ripe for manipulation, from god.
Lazerus56
2023-08-07 18:58:40 +0000 UTCIt’s clear that she was flirting with him in the hopes to convince him to move it up a week. It’s everything she’s doing is part of some plan. She gave Brin a choice knowing he’d likely do both and then immediately went to the prefix knowing that Brin was going to try to leave afterwards to better prepare for the upcoming war. Since Tawna already said that the towns fate is tied to Brin whether they leave or stay she’s likely trying to keep him there so she can better manipulate him into the outcome she wants. I think it’s probably best to not think of her as mean and vindictive but that everything she does is to achieve a specific outcome.
Zadumu
2023-08-07 18:55:22 +0000 UTC"Mental fortitude to always know what must be done" probably best he didn't pick this one. This would tie into Know What's Real far too well.
Nictis
2023-08-07 18:52:12 +0000 UTCIt was pretty clear that the Brin was never going to get the extra six months, it would have absolutely wrecked the story pacing. I thought it was going to be a conscious decision on his part though, not another Tawna incident.
GoodOldChap
2023-08-07 18:33:23 +0000 UTCWonder if she helps to pick class to previous witch as well.
mahu
2023-08-07 18:25:40 +0000 UTCCliff hanger!!!
Pike
2023-08-07 18:24:47 +0000 UTCWe talk about mind magic and necromancy being types of evil but I would say manipulation of fate is as evil or more evil then both. Mind magic removes people agency but so does fate to a even more extreme and soul magic and necromancy are often interwoven but again that problem is remove people's agency and that's exact what fate magic does.
Nick Pincus
2023-08-07 18:21:13 +0000 UTCYeah, this feels very very contrived. There was hardly time for a switch in the conversation for the weaver bitch to have managed to convince the prefit if she was originally flirting with him, also since this bs is actually gonna happen, Hogg and Brin, need to leave this bog asap, they really don't deserve their presence and it'll be extremely funny if they suffer for their actions. The only reason I don't want to outright watch them get totally destroyed is because brins friends don't deserve that.
Daniel is ŁØNE
2023-08-07 18:21:02 +0000 UTCSo many things I want to say, but the majority of it should be censored.
Eric M
2023-08-07 18:17:07 +0000 UTCThis twist is good but fuck do I want the weaver to burn. At this point she has dug her own grave, lashed out at a minor multiple times, manipulated his class, social ostracized him, used her authority for a personal grudge and tried to get him killed. If she is strug up as a witch I will be made, if she is strug up for abuse of power, harming the youth and endangered the town I will be very happy. But I think I would be most happy to watch her burn by his adopted mother's hand and the mayor with her.
Nick Pincus
2023-08-07 18:14:23 +0000 UTCI don't think so.
Austin
2023-08-07 18:09:02 +0000 UTCThank you!
Andrew
2023-08-07 18:05:30 +0000 UTCThe mayor moving up System day has to be a Big Deal. Every kid working on stat prep is about to be screwed over. Even parents of kids not affected this time would have to be incensed, knowing that he might just decide to do it on a whim again if he's done it once.
A B
2023-08-07 17:59:02 +0000 UTCCome on Miles, dont leave us hanging like this.
Elvis Malkic
2023-08-07 17:56:47 +0000 UTCSooo he got all other stats with strength and vitality 2, and we got a cliff
Touch
2023-08-07 17:51:47 +0000 UTC:D
Efi Rabkin
2023-08-07 17:44:10 +0000 UTCI really want to see Hogg beat them both up.
Ahppy
2023-08-07 17:43:50 +0000 UTCI honestly hope it drives them to leave. Hogg and Brin would probably do so much better in a bigger town or even at the tower with his "mother". Fuck the town and the weaver. At this point I'm kinda ready for it to be demolished by undead
Austin
2023-08-07 17:43:05 +0000 UTCGood chapter! This story has made my day infinitly better. Pulled me right out of a depression funk. I love how Bron isn't just a Mary sue and the conflict in the story is great
Toknightly
2023-08-07 17:42:37 +0000 UTCBrin: i wanna 6 more month pleeeeeese. Good pacing + Weaver: No
Moonkiller24
2023-08-07 17:38:59 +0000 UTCMy reaction to the system unlock is really different that a lot of people it seems. I would have dropped the story without a second thought if he had hit every threshold. Him unlocking everything isn’t very compelling storytelling imo, he has plenty advantages as is and I find some of the boosts he has received to be excessive. We will see where the author takes this.
Tycho Green
2023-08-07 17:38:42 +0000 UTCTawna is a b*tch
Adunn
2023-08-07 17:37:43 +0000 UTCBurn the witch.
mahu
2023-08-07 17:37:14 +0000 UTCHer reason won't be different than it was so far, or at least her claimed reason. She is doing it to save the town and most importantly her daughter.
Efi Rabkin
2023-08-07 17:36:54 +0000 UTCOh I'm already there
ReadingObsessed
2023-08-07 17:33:28 +0000 UTCNooooo I can't live with this cliff for days. 😭😭. Double chap today right???? 😥😥😩*insert Williem Dafoe 'you can't do this to me' meme*
Seriously
2023-08-07 17:33:15 +0000 UTCI am hoping that he now takes the "Child" class, out of sheer spite and to fuck any possible plan she has for him.
Efi Rabkin
2023-08-07 17:32:28 +0000 UTCI think she was flirting to make sure Hogg was not listening when she changed the subject.
Efi Rabkin
2023-08-07 17:31:04 +0000 UTCThe timing seems odd; they were flirting and then just a minute later the date gets changed? Seems like not enough time to even change the topic
Nim
2023-08-07 17:30:00 +0000 UTCpetition to push the next chapter like.... right now cuz sir this cliff is worse than stepping on rusty nail
Grish99
2023-08-07 17:29:08 +0000 UTCHonestly getting tired of this prophecy/weaver bs. It had its uses early on, but at this point with how many people should have stopped it, its just making it seem like he has no control or influence at all. And stories like that always end up just being frustrating to readers to the point they and eventually the author drop it.
PlasmaticPi
2023-08-07 17:28:53 +0000 UTCSame. I know it means nothing in the end: Brin will have the power the author had planned him to have. But it feels like this twist is ruining his potential ...
Viria
2023-08-07 17:28:28 +0000 UTCTawna is the worst
CMA27
2023-08-07 17:28:11 +0000 UTCOuch. Interesting twist. I'm not mad about it by itself, by everything done so far, this absolutely seems like something Tawna would do. Still. I'm hoping she's had a very good reason for it. It's certainly possible, what with reading the weave of fate and all. It just seems like such a... Hostile way to go about it.
Swinter
2023-08-07 17:25:53 +0000 UTCNoooooooo! Fuck, tawna. I was really enjoying racking up the bonuses before he even gets a class. Burn her!!
Emil
2023-08-07 17:25:06 +0000 UTCI'm so angry at her it's crazy
julian hu
2023-08-07 17:23:40 +0000 UTCAnyoneknows if there are more Chapters in the Big Standard tier?
Elvis Malkic
2023-08-07 17:23:07 +0000 UTCHmm, really not a fan of the unexpected system unlock twist.
Disclancer
2023-08-07 17:22:54 +0000 UTCYeah I'm not a huge fan of this. What's the Prefits reasoning? How did the weaver convince him so quickly? I doubt it's just hogg and Brin that are pissed about this.
Austin
2023-08-07 17:22:07 +0000 UTCDoesn't that mean they just irritated every parent in town? Also, if the prefit can move it forward, he can move it back too right? Why didn't they just ask him to move it back a month way the other day?
Jason Hornbuckle
2023-08-07 17:21:40 +0000 UTCThis feels really contrived. What's the point of Tawna moving up System Day exactly? Why did the Prefit agree? It doesn't actually keep Hogg from leaving the village.
AverageGuy
2023-08-07 17:21:10 +0000 UTCThe weaver has got to be using skills on the Prefit right? What else could explain that much influence?
Austin
2023-08-07 17:19:44 +0000 UTCWow. Man, that weaver is going to die. If not by his hand, then by his adoptive mother's. He absolutely could have gotten magic up to the threshold, and probably some others up to the second with those gains. She just removed permanent power from the table.
Nathan Sto
2023-08-07 17:18:44 +0000 UTCThis... This seems very likely to destroy any trust in the Weaver and Prefit, lose Hogg, and is really pushing the bounds of credulity. I'm not sure if you have a big plan here, but it feels like you're over pushing this one.
hmDrake
2023-08-07 17:18:00 +0000 UTCYeah that wait is gonna suck.
travis pancake
2023-08-07 17:17:46 +0000 UTCI don't understand why. This makes me so angry.
ReadingObsessed
2023-08-07 17:17:34 +0000 UTCAaaargh, Ill pay for a higer tier to not have to wait for the class selection for two days
Elvis Malkic
2023-08-07 17:17:15 +0000 UTCI guess he was having it
Gardor
2023-08-07 17:17:12 +0000 UTCThere should be an article in the Geneva convention against that kind of cliffhanger !
Viria
2023-08-07 17:15:56 +0000 UTCThat Bitch!
Efi Rabkin
2023-08-07 17:15:26 +0000 UTCI think it makes the most sense, he was just in very traumatic melee combat and in intense pain from the injuries he suffered while.making the choice. "I don't wanna spend my whole life doing that" seems pretty reasonable from a human perspective, especially since he's being affected by being a child
Avery Theron Murphy
2023-08-07 17:14:25 +0000 UTCI just don't get why no one else at town sees what the Weaver is doing as malevolent.
ReadingObsessed
2023-08-07 17:14:14 +0000 UTCLike there's just about no way to spin 'move up system day and surprise everyone' positively
The Human
2023-08-07 17:11:41 +0000 UTCFeels like hubris to keep pushing hogg so much when he's shown he's starting to reach his boundary for fucking with brinn
The Human
2023-08-07 17:10:55 +0000 UTCWow, I can't believe he chose the increase to Magic. His current build (so far) seems very focused on melee combat. His martial attributes are higher and is he going to pass up on DOUBLE xp because he doesn't want to fight in melee? Seems weird how lightly he's taking these decisions with the fact that he has [Know What's Real] and has been through multiple life-threatening situations. Would've thought he would think more from a perspective of survival and less from a min-maxing gaming perspective (and even from that perspective choosing magic over the strength of arm boon makes no sense).
Cuticle
2023-08-07 17:10:42 +0000 UTCSo all of that to just give up melee combat wtf
king seed
2023-08-07 17:06:00 +0000 UTCHi
abrandedeye curtsinger
2023-08-07 17:00:45 +0000 UTC