Prologue Feedback (Book 10) and some other stuff

Hey all - I'm currently writing and almost at 100k words into book 10 atm.

I occasionally do some re-reading of the stuff as I write, trying to make sure things make sense.

Let me first say this before I ask my question ;)

I'm going to do a few different PoV's. Each god will get a little PoV time as we do this. Mind you most still comes from Max/Bob but I want to start showing some of the personal views/ideas/etc of the other gods.

When you get to those as I release them, please let me know if you can sense the individual personalities as they start to form and bud. I'm going to do some work on trying to make sure their individual voices and own character progression are tracked a little more for you all.

That's all based on the idea when bigger stuff happens later in the series you have a platform for why /what happens and how that impacts the 'grander' systems games.

Now back to the prologue.:

Life grew too vibrant and too swift.

Death sought to prune every intolerable overgrowth.

Matter found pride in density and form while Void whispered of flawless simplicity in absence.

Time controlled every motion, insisting upon sequence.

Thought ascended beyond the sequence, doubting the need for any.

Element drifted between them all, chaotic yet deliberate, scattering sparks of possibility.

Binding forged unseen chains that linked matter, flesh, and spirit.

And Force became a dragon, exulted in sheer emotion, its roar begging for resistance and war.

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I think i'm going to take out 'Force became a dragon' and just have it be Force, exulted in sheer emotion, its roar begging...

I feel that having 'dragon' there gives away too much (and then i'd have to give away more of the other Nine, which I'm not ready to do.). So thoughts on changing that line?

Thanks and looking forward to adding more chapters for you all soon!