v0.3.0 - Ready!

We will all be blessed with Jymsar's undies soon~

GigaSaddle

My comment just vanished from existence, after I was done editing. No idea what happend. Let me try to recall everything I wrote down. I hope the protagonist is going to posses abilities somewhat similar to Sylar (Heroes series) without the negative side effect, if you want him to be over powered. Sylar's skill is, I quote: "intuitive aptidude", the ability to innately understand and manipulate patterns within complex systems. There's more to it, but I won't go into the details. Let it just be said, his almost god-like power comes with a handicap called "hunger". What it primarily means is 'forced to kill for knowledge'. He's the villain of the show, though not on purpose. If you're planning on making MC op, maybe you can give him a self thought out handicap that doesn't stray away from the logic of this world. An idea you don't have to consider using. :) Why am I writing all this? Well, my "hero of justice" sense is tickling, even though I'm reading Overlord at the moment. lol When you perfect your work, will we be able to see Jymsar in his undergarments...? =^.^= This new update felt kind of short, but the artwork was as outstanding as the writing. Both didn't fail to deliver. You may not be 100% happy with it, but it is what it is for now and it's good. However, for the next version, I only wish for more or a deeper dialogue between the trio, because this time you focused on Alen and MC, which is fine of course. Thank you! And don't forget to not stress out, push and pressure yourself. Being able to be patient is a virtue~

Thank you! Yes, I think I could've done more to iron out some of the personal dynamics, especially between Alen and Jymsar.

GigaSaddle

I love the lyricism in your writing, which complements the dream-like qualities of your art amazingly well. The magic system you've developed is also fascinating, and I like the way you're introducing it to us: half-steps through curious shadows, just like how the MC is himself learning. Overall, these are qualities rarely found in visual novels - writing that actually draws the reader into the world that you're building, rather than drawing brusque straight lines between plot points. One small suggestion: I do think that some things can be made clearer by being more explicit. For example, Alen does tell the MC why they took the time to do the things they did in this chapter (I'm trying to avoid spoilers), but I'm not sure if this was told to Jymsar - and I thought him more patient than I would have expected about time being taken away from time that could have been spent on the road. Looking forward to the next version!

Darkpaladin