III : A Familiar Stranger (2/3)
Added 2023-01-27 17:00:06 +0000 UTCBy the way: (if you are like me who never reads a synopsis) Not long after his grandfather and guardian passed away, Hadrian’s mother[...]
It was about ten days ago, so yay! second funeral.
P.S.1: Hadrian was thinking Odin not Horus.
P.S.2: English typos/ corrections are always welcome.
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Don't worry Chai,on the contrary I'm immensely grateful for all the corrections!!!🙇♀️🙇♀️ ❤️❤️
2023-01-28 13:32:07 +0000 UTCSorry that was a really long typo time 😵💫 I promise I'm not trying to harp! Everything is just a suggestion; fix what you want how you want to. 🙏❤️
Chai
2023-01-28 05:03:58 +0000 UTCOooh things are getting spicy. I'm really curious to see what the deal with Horus is. 👀 Typo Time~ - Hadrian is missing his wrap-around tattoo in the panel Pete names Horus. - "Like the guy who hang himself" --> "Like the guy who hanged himself" (Thanks Nichole!) - "He's a dog, he can't do this kind of thing" --> "that kind of thing" - "Did I made a mistake" --> "Did I make a mistake" - Where Hadrian reflects on his mother not actually being a Duchess by leading in with, "By the way," could the "by the way" be removed? ("You know she wasn't...") replaced with a less wordy interject? ("Ah, you do know...") - "I keep forgetting that he is gone" --> "I keep forgetting he's gone..." ("...he's really gone...") - "But that's how the townsfolk..." --> "But that's what the townsfolk..." - "Back in the time she would still go outside the house" --> "Back when she still left the house" or "Back when she still came to town" - "Who I'm kidding?" --> "Who am I kidding?"
Chai
2023-01-28 05:03:12 +0000 UTC
