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4.15 - Epilogue [T1]

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It's a simple iPad app called Charcoal. Very simple. Very limited! But I'm not trying to create masterpieces :)

Ted Steel

Off topic, but can you tell what do you use to draw your colorful formation graphics that look kinda hand-drawn? I need me something similar for my own story.

Sergey Che

Can an English football club buy a Welsh football club? If so I think Chester will soon own a club. Or perhaps Donny Wormwood will own a Welsh club. Maybe Gemma wants to own a Welsh Football club too.

Thomas

Nice!! Arc felt good, lots of focus on Max’s internal mindset and the back-and-forth between potentially climbing up to the Prem. Can’t say I’m not worried, though… there’s too much optimism in this chapter! The AI program feels especially dangerous. Is it too strong? Are they taking security precautions? 👀

Sam McGuffin

It's the arc from wanting to leave Chester to not wanting to win to returning to a state of Full Max.

Ted Steel

Cliff always says masseuse to the stars. Other suggestions noted, thanks!

Ted Steel

You checked about five seconds before I hit post!

Ted Steel

I've messed up the dates! Fixing now! Thanks for the heads up!

Ted Steel

ok, I loved it even though Im mad knowing its an epilogue. Quit it with the cliffhangers!!!!! Or dont, whatever, I love you and this is my favorite series. Anyways, is the date on the last part (February 9) wrong or did I totally whoosh on something? There’s two February 9ths.

MomoKokomo

You were given many, many chances, Angel. All that was expected of you is to hold firm. Well, you didn't.

Craxuan

Weird ending for this book. Feels unfinished and arbitrary

CMA27

I'm expecting a cameo from Angel's sister at some point (isn't she at Saltney, or am I conflating her with someone else?). Wonderful book, and really exciting setup for the end of the season. Thanks Ted! Edit Suggestions: She'll be back but as I say, I didn't have any notice of this." -- say -> said some five-a-sides and a kid's area next year -- kid's -> kids' would increase a players' Decision score -- players' -> player's "Dahvid," said Livia. -- Dahvid -> Dahvide (I don't actually remember how his name is spelled, but you spelled it the second way for the rest of this chapter) and wondered if I could tell just by feeling -- and -> and I Masseuse to the stars. -- Masseuse -> Masseur

Tareq Malikyar

Isnt Pascal all about that? His PA is low but he can still be a match-deciding factor in a game

EducatedFool

Sad if Angel does not reach her potential, but it would be nice to see the story move beyond the numbers… having a player be successful not based on PA but determination and intangibles

Andres919

When did this come out? I swear I checked less than 2 minutes ago

Will


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