Diana the Hunted - Small Town Goddesses 5
Added 2019-01-31 13:28:49 +0000 UTCThe story of The Goddesses vs Buzzard-Kill outside the Best Buy! I really enjoy writing these! Renaming the series to Small Town Goddesses from Maiden Stars has helped me develop the characters, villains, and geography of picturesque Unnamedville.
If you are not up to date on Small Town Goddesses, read the previous stories here:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B3_KtJ5IKlKiZkNWVmVkMXQ5Xzg
I had to make a change. Nemesis Shade was originally named JJ (Juniper Jaden) in a story with a Janet and Juno Purple as main characters. It was a bad name that competed for visual space with other characters. I wanted her to have a first name that was a little awkward that she could change to initials after leaving town for college, but when she came back she was falling into her old problems. I renamed her ZZ (Zalana Zoey). I'm going back through Abigail, Valerie, and Nemesis to make sure those changes stick today and tomorrow. If you got used to the old name, my bad. I had as well and changing a name is very frustrating once I have the character in mind.
Thank you all so much for your support!
Comments
I'm glad you liked it! I'm a little sad that I won't be writing much Abby for the rest of it. I've been looking at the series as if it was a season of a TV Show. Thirteen episodes, each narrator getting a turn as princess and warrior: Abigail the Green and Diana the Hunted. That equals thirteen with Nemesis and Daphne being both the Purple and the Violet. The perversions are episode to episode antagonists but I have to have a smarter more intentional antagonist to be overcome: Echidna and Evan fit that role. "Do you want to see her tits?" piece of banter is because I decided Evan is the big problem of the season. I do have to go back and mention there's a point on the wand in Janet the White. I also have to go back and make sure every reference of JJ is now ZZ. Should have that done by next weekend. I'm hoping to have at least the first four packaged and ready for sale by the end of February with Daphne posted on the 28th. Glad the banter came through! I love writing it. I was told it was hard to read and that's the last thing I wanted for a superheroine sex story. Thanks again!
Neal Johnstone
2019-02-02 00:32:31 +0000 UTCOh, and regarding the ZZ thing... definitely the right call. ZZ is an interesting choice, hahaha, but it is much easier to keep track of than Janet-JJ-Juno as you noted. #thumbsup!
Istmael
2019-02-01 23:17:21 +0000 UTCGreat addition! Solid plot development with both the nature of the creatures and the introduction of Echidna - very curious to see what happens next! I will say I was really hoping the Evan-Abby thing would be resolved in this chapter given she was the narrator again, but I guess I will have to wait and see. I am not a fan of the whole "evil mind controller secretly also gets one of the good guys to be a double agent" thing. I can take solace in the fact that she seems to end up alright (given she's part of the banter), I just hope it does not take too long to resolve that situation. I can dig the notion of Evan getting his own posse (will they end up being good? bad? neutral? Can't wait to see!!!) - I would just rather see this amazing world continue to develop without the threat of a potential (eventual?) Abby betrayal. Speaking of the banter though, having just finished catching up on STG - I must say I have grown to absolutely love it as a narrative device. The first story, you have *no* idea who is talking and it is jarring. But as the girls tell their tales and, as a reader, you get used to their style, the banter slowly becomes more and more clear. Its just a very cool mechanism, and its definitely paying off!
Istmael
2019-02-01 23:14:20 +0000 UTC
