New excerpt from the book draft: I am always looking for this soup
Added 2025-03-27 22:59:48 +0000 UTCHere's a draft for a chapter I wrote last week, for patreons' eyes only.
I don't know if I should keep the dialogue at the beginning or not, what do you think? Does it work, is it interesting/distracting?
I am finally learning the lesson to attach it as a pdf to preserve my freakishly careful formatting that patreon always flattens lol
I'm over here just working on this book in my little corner of the world; would love to hear your thoughts if you read it <3
Thanks for your support!!
love, namee
Comments
Thank you for reading and offering feedback!
Christy NaMee Eriksen
2025-04-11 16:59:57 +0000 UTCYes to the dialogue as well; it sets the tone for the entire chapter. A beautiful scene that I could see, hear... felt like I was witness to observing it all.
Ashley Lally
2025-04-01 19:19:54 +0000 UTCThanks for reading and for chiming in about the dialogue!
Christy NaMee Eriksen
2025-03-30 17:39:05 +0000 UTCI love this so much. You describe the exquisite discomfort and hope and want so vividly well ๐ Yes to the dialogue! Helps me to see it. I love SunWoo chiming in. I love the restaurant sounds talking, and I love the powerful, beautiful final sentences ๐
MK MacNaughton
2025-03-30 14:08:41 +0000 UTC
