Thy Rusted Knight
Added 2024-07-01 06:01:29 +0000 UTCFor Thy Rusted Knight 12!
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You saw the speech I had Jaune do, that was from a Superman Vs. The Elite Movie. That lit a fire in all those there. Seeing hope in adventures, that they are not just these selfish people.
Robert Walker
2024-07-03 06:28:06 +0000 UTCOh OK I gotcha thank you. All I got to do now is, figure out how I want to write everything
Robert Walker
2024-07-03 06:26:05 +0000 UTCIt actually makes it more bloated if you don't break it down.. It's easier to read 1000 word chapter if its broken down that it is to read 500 words thats compressed into 2 or 3 paragraphs.
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-03 06:23:56 +0000 UTCBut, I may do start doing that more, I just need to figure out when, and where, to space it out more, learning curve of course
Robert Walker
2024-07-03 06:19:42 +0000 UTCI think people have been saying that a lot about breaking down the paragraph. I just honestly felt that if I did that with a lot of paragraphs it would have felt bloaded, does that make sense to you?
Robert Walker
2024-07-03 06:18:08 +0000 UTCIt's essentially the same but it is easier to read and you could add flavor sentences or paragraphs to set the tone more
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-03 06:15:15 +0000 UTCThe concept is great! I'm actually griping more about the paragraphs. I think you could break them down more like this one: - Well no time like the present right? I would like to do some good in this world, and I feel that being an adventurer would help." Jaune said, giving his reason. That cause Bell to pause. This guy wants to make a world a better place, like a hero, like him. Eina gave a neutral look. ----- You could turn it into this: Well no time like the present right? I would like to do some good in this world, and I feel that being an adventurer would help." Jaune said, giving his reason. That cause Bell to pause. This guy wants to make a world a better place, like a hero, like him. Eina gave them a neutral look however.
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-03 06:14:13 +0000 UTCHow do you like the story so far, I am not as creative as others so I hope this is good
Robert Walker
2024-07-03 05:37:26 +0000 UTCYup, got it!
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-02 16:43:15 +0000 UTCDid you get the link ok
Robert Walker
2024-07-02 16:41:37 +0000 UTChttps://m.fanfiction.net/s/14364533/1/Is-it-wrong-to-be-a-knight-and-find-girls-in-a-dungeon
Robert Walker
2024-07-01 06:38:42 +0000 UTCHold on, it's also the second story I have made
Robert Walker
2024-07-01 06:38:00 +0000 UTCDrop the link here dude. I'd be happy to read it
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-01 06:37:27 +0000 UTCI did create a story though, with Jaune in Danmachi, he died killing Cinder
Robert Walker
2024-07-01 06:33:40 +0000 UTCGoddamn that's an amazing idea.
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-01 06:33:05 +0000 UTCNope, imagine him in Danmachi, in the Hestia Familia.
Robert Walker
2024-07-01 06:32:47 +0000 UTCThis is the type of guy you never want to meet in a dark alley.
Biggs Ringor
2024-07-01 06:32:14 +0000 UTCI am armored, and filled with rage.
Robert Walker
2024-07-01 06:31:34 +0000 UTC
