Book 1, Page 172

Hi patrons!

Here's a look at how this page came to completion.

The original script says:

PANEL 1

A  shot of Turtle’s face as he yanks/brushes the sandwich away. He’s  covered in mayo and mustard and a tomato slice is sticking to his  forehead and bits of lettuce everywhere (or however you want to do it -  the point is, he’s a mess.)

He no longer looks calm and civilized. He looks like he wants to murder.

PANEL 2

Inset  panel overlapping the other two panels. The smallest of the three  panels on this page. Lillian, wide-eyed and frightened, as her brain  reminds her that her actions have the likely consequence of getting  severely beaten and arrested.

LILLIAN (thought): Oh crap.

PANEL 3

Lillian,  big in the foreground, running full-out towards the viewer. There’s a  lot of fear on her face. Small in the background behind her, we see  Turtle beginning to give chase.

I sent Barry four possible Captain Turtles for Panel 1:

...and he liked the fourth one best.

This was the original page layout:

After  looking at the page as scripted, Barry didn't like having three panels  in a row of close-ups facing the viewer. We went back and forth about it  for a little while, and Barry sketched out a panel that looks more like  the final one. (I think he suspected that I wouldn't mind redrawing if  there were buildings involved?)

Here are a few Portland buildings I looked at for this panel:

If  you look at the faint blue lines under the piano store sign, you'll see  that it used to be rectangular, but I changed it to a curvy irregular  shape at the last minute. I thought it looked more interesting.

Barry had a final suggestion on Captain Turtle's  anatomy in Panel 1:

...and this is how I took it:

As always, I hope you enjoyed this peek behind the scenes! Thank you so much for supporting me on Patreon.
-Becky