INTEMPERANCE VI - Chapter 26, Good for the Soul

Thank you. I'm really enjoying the Massa-Tif-Meghan subplot myself and I have a loose idea of where it is all going, but even I am not ultimately sure how it is going to ultimately shake out. There was a time in my life where I was like Massa with the opposite sex and I just try to imagine my former self in a situation where there is both a Tif and endless groupies available and contrast it with a girl I believe to only be in the friend zone and that brings me down the path so far. I have much sympathy for Massa myself. And thank you for letting me know you are enjoying the advancement of the plot through the eyes of some of the supporting characters.

Al Steiner

The twists that Meghan & Massa's relationship is taking because their communication - until now - has been crap is amusing to watch. Less star-crossed lovers, more Marx Brothers-esque slapstick shambles. This is another strong chapter, and I really am enjoying getting a little more in-depth with the supporting cast.

Adam Driscoll

I think it's just the way I think. I don't ponder too much what I'm writing as I'm writing it. When I'm in the mode, the words just come out of my brain and into my fingers on the keyboard. I can't play the guitar like Jake or Matt, but I like to think I can play the keyboard on my computer like they do the guitar.

Al Steiner

I've been reading you for several years starting on SOL. I've enjoyed all your stories that I've read, and it isn't just because of the plot, or the characters, or the erotic components - it's your sentence structure. Yesterday, CBS Saturday Morning had and interview with Lee Child where he talked about deliberately choosing his words so that each word in a sentence acts as it would in a poem, basically introducing and complementing the next word. That's when the lightbulb turned on - that's the same reason why I like how you write. Whether you deliberately choose words in this way or it's just the way you think, you're very good at it. That's why typos will leap from the screen - they disturb the flow/the melody. You're a natural story teller and your characters are well constructed (Tiff is starting to challenge Matt for best supporting character) and very human, which makes the story line extremely realistic. Thank you for sharing your writing.