Magical Girl Gunslinger: Chapter 33 - Identity
Added 2023-04-30 19:43:54 +0000 UTCComments
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Northern Wind
2023-06-11 20:01:35 +0000 UTCI noticed the RR page has the hiatus tag now? Does this mean there wont be any chapters for quite a while?
Harald Hüpfer
2023-06-10 20:57:05 +0000 UTCHey! Thank you for writing this, just binge'd it and couldn't wait. Hope you feel better enough to grace us with your talents! This is fantastic!
Tired
2023-05-25 23:46:31 +0000 UTCI'm halfway sure that Selene convinced her of that because of exactly that reason, doubly so because the combination of goth-loli and medical eyepatch gives her that rather distinctive cute chuuni look. Though, Mai probably doesn't realize that.
Jeanean
2023-05-07 20:54:36 +0000 UTCWhy a plain white eye patch? Since it's the only light colored piece of the outfit it would really stand out and draw attention to it imo and I thought that was something she doesn't want.
Garis
2023-05-06 16:27:43 +0000 UTCMoonshot or something similar would be a good nickname too, for when you don't want to repeat the full name all the time
John
2023-05-05 18:35:01 +0000 UTCMe too either that or maybe a type of cowl.
Garis
2023-05-05 02:01:29 +0000 UTCI still think a gunslinger should have a jackalope icon. But that probably doesn’t fit the “cute” needs of the Magic Girls. And horns would be pain if she had to sneak through tight spaces.
David Hoyt
2023-05-04 01:30:13 +0000 UTCAww, I'm sad she didn't go for something like Moonshot Bunny. Not much of a difference, but still. I wonder if she's gonna follow the advice and go down the 'small girl, big gun' route.
Ignorant Fool
2023-05-03 02:05:00 +0000 UTCthanks for the updates!
Falkara
2023-05-02 22:04:37 +0000 UTCDo note while it's been a few chapters since Mai woke up, it's only been like 2 hours in-universe time, so there's been no time to deal with any kind of trauma. There'll be plenty of future chapters to deal with Lily and her father
SamHawke
2023-05-02 08:30:40 +0000 UTCThank you for the chapter! I can't wait to see the shenanigans I'm sure will come in the next one ;)
Alice Blake
2023-05-02 02:40:26 +0000 UTCYAS!!!!! So good!!
YoYo Crow
2023-05-02 01:43:54 +0000 UTCA bit concerned about how things have been going since the end of arc 1. The things that really drew me to MGG was the high emotional stakes and impacts, as well as the cute trauma bean. And while we're getting more of Mai's cute traumabean reactions, everything else has slowed down. There's an expectation that the pace would slow after arc 1's very hectic nature, but the various available emotional impacts have also been deferred? It's been 8 chapters since the beginning of arc 2, and Mai has neither had to deal with Lily or with her home trauma or with school trauma or with anyone she has a strong personal connection to. She's barely had to deal with herself even, and her interactions with Selene has been mostly distracting herself with business and magical girl stuff. It also feels like worldbuilding elements are being overexplained? In this chapter we have 7 paragraphs on the topic of variable mana cost for astral shift, both in technical detail and in contextual evaluation of when you'd need it... and the answer is that it only matters if you're under attack while unshifted, because lower mana cost leaves you more to use in a fight before it regens, and shortens the shift time. Did we need this much explanation of such a relatively simple explanation for a slightly niche interaction? It's part of what's felt like an urge to overexplain the mechanics of the setting, and it feels like it's slowing arc 2's start down a lot :/ (the focus on the appearance and emotional impact from the astral shift was fine though, it was mostly the technical details I meant) Sorry, this is mostly to say that I'd love to see more of the emotional story telling that I fell in love with the story for, and hope that arc 2 can... move into more of that? This does seem to be the last chapter we'll have in the hotel room at least, so maybe this comment is unnecessary because the pace is picking back up from here on in. Also, welcome back, thank you for writing this story, and I hope you continue, I very much love it and hope that what's going on in your life becomes easier <3
The Softies
2023-05-01 20:27:22 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! Couple typos I caught: > Needles danced across my muscles in pinpricks of numbness, as If I’d been laying down for a much longer period of time. "If" should not be capitalized. > [Well, with that finalized,] Selene spoke cheerily, [you’re one step closer to realizing you full potential as a Magical Girl. *your full potential > I knew that my clothes weren’t really being destroyed, just being turned into energy and stored within my soul gem, but It didn’t make the feeling of my clothes swiftly vanishing any less startling. "It" should not be capitalized. > So, with a little nagging from Selene, we’d decided that one. I think this reads better as "decided on that one." Also awwww, Magical Girl Moon Bunny!
Fayhem
2023-05-01 18:32:00 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter!
Mane Gransow
2023-05-01 06:57:18 +0000 UTCWelcome back! Thanks for the chapter.
Wensber
2023-05-01 05:22:10 +0000 UTCThe half cloak, as you described it, reminds me a lot of an Inverness cloak.
Virnor
2023-05-01 04:41:08 +0000 UTCCan’t just turn off trauma and mental health issues because they’re “not interesting enough.” Her hero’s journey is intrinsically tied to her healing journey, that’s what grounds the story and makes it so relatable for some of us. For her to snap out of those behaviors already (she’s been magical for a matter of hours at this point) would be extremely weird. Plus, her growth in confidence will be all the more satisfying if it’s slowly earned instead of just being given a magical shortcut.
Daniel
2023-05-01 03:13:29 +0000 UTCLovely! More more more! The depth of the MC as she navigates the first steps of her new life, avoiding to rocks and shoals her trauma! Magnificent!
Steven Whitfield
2023-05-01 01:55:14 +0000 UTCGlad to see your back!
Dopplerdee
2023-05-01 01:27:38 +0000 UTCI want to power bomb whoever gave Mai insecurities about her eyes
Waffleman
2023-05-01 00:47:24 +0000 UTCAnyone want to take bets on how long it will be until fanart of her new outfit starts appearing? If I were better at drawing I might try my hand at it, but alas my talents lie elsewhere.
Tom
2023-05-01 00:18:18 +0000 UTC"Worse, I couldn’t really argue that it did look cute when my hood was up, the two ears trailing down the sides. " -> "I couldn't really argue (; or -- or : ) it did look ...). she appears to be saying that it is inarguably uncute, as she can't argue that it was cute; rather than the opposite.
saganatsu
2023-05-01 00:08:51 +0000 UTCThe chapters and concept (time/power/durability for armour) are awesome as always! Though I do hope Author won't stuck with her being clueless to what's good for her and (especially) social relations forever, because I could literally predict pattern of what happens in a talk..... And the tragic theme is good and all...but we need a break with wholesome stuff! From Mai perspective, not from side character Author! It's like Mai is in cycle of perpetual staleness. No strong sadness, no nothing but coping mechanism, it's not...healthy nor interesting enough.... All in all, welcome back Author! Great to have you here with us~
Touch
2023-04-30 23:55:48 +0000 UTCDescription says whe has a bunny hoody...so top part maybe more like Date A Live's bunny spirit - Yoshino?
Havencross3093
2023-04-30 23:45:56 +0000 UTChmm... If a 10% shift gives you half the barrier strength and happens almost instantaneously, I wonder if anybody's incorporated that into their fighting style, constantly dismissing and refreshing their shift to regenerate barriers between hits? It would be risky, since a poorly timed attack or clever opponent could hit you in the instant you're unguarded, and it would ruin your secret identity immediately, but you could potentially get 500% of the default shield strength out of a single mana bar even before considering regeneration.
Sindri
2023-04-30 23:19:59 +0000 UTCGlad to see you back > step closer to realizing you full your > but It didn’t make the feeling it > we’d decided that one on that one
John
2023-04-30 23:10:41 +0000 UTCHell yeah great chapter
jay the great
2023-04-30 23:05:47 +0000 UTCIf I'm understanding the outfit description right, Its similar to Rory Mercury's outfit, but more purple instead of red?
Osamaru Ta
2023-04-30 22:06:09 +0000 UTCI love how you're keeping a lot of the classic Magical Girl tropes in-universe and explaining them, like the anti-upskirt being a simple enchantment and now the "can't interrupt the Transformation Sequence." Another great chapter!
ultima threethreethree
2023-04-30 21:50:41 +0000 UTCEr, yikes? That is a terrible name lmao
Cuticle
2023-04-30 21:38:22 +0000 UTCWelcome back and excellent chapter! Really looking forward to Mai finally getting to take her nice new stats for a spin.
NoNane09
2023-04-30 20:55:15 +0000 UTCAwesome chapter!
Ethan Barrow
2023-04-30 20:25:54 +0000 UTCOh my lordt why is she so cute
Plastic
2023-04-30 20:23:18 +0000 UTCChapter was worth the wait!
JudahDragon
2023-04-30 20:19:26 +0000 UTCLove it! Absolutely looking forward to her going back into 'combat space' and making Everglaive do a *blink blink* after she savages everything. (at least that is a fun head cannon, shall see when it happens)
Maestro
2023-04-30 20:11:20 +0000 UTClol...Moon Bunny...jus awesome
Earth Grumble
2023-04-30 20:10:30 +0000 UTCWelcome back and love the chpter
Orgnok
2023-04-30 20:07:57 +0000 UTCYou're back!!
Santiago Cortes
2023-04-30 20:04:26 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nick ezelle
2023-04-30 20:01:15 +0000 UTCWelcome back! and thank you!
Maestro
2023-04-30 20:01:15 +0000 UTCWelcome back!
Hunter Helms
2023-04-30 19:52:53 +0000 UTC:D minor spoiler: you will not regret reading this chapter
Squa 81
2023-04-30 19:47:34 +0000 UTC
