Should I rewrite the Rachel story with Sophia?
Added 2023-12-16 09:51:12 +0000 UTCI'm considering rewriting the scene in the boutique. Maybe it's moving too quickly with Rachel, what are your thoughts?
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I'm new here, so please be patient. I know this is a fantasy journey. And I'm totally OK with that. But why must every single woman in the story all but throw herself at the main character. I think it'd be cool if, just a handful, of the women didn't. I think it'd be a lot of fun, and a humbling experience, if one or two of the women didn't want anything to do with the MC. Maybe one play hard-to-get, and the another just not want him at all. At least it'd be a challenge. Just a thought.
glrider
2023-12-24 17:29:17 +0000 UTCI vote no. But I think it would be fine if you did change it as long as we still get to this point. More buildup isn't bad but a hot milf being aggressive like this is extremely hot.
Tsun
2023-12-19 19:50:20 +0000 UTCDon't do it, it was a VERY HOT scene!
Eduardo
2023-12-18 21:59:35 +0000 UTCKeep it as it is. No Change necessary
Koppjaegga
2023-12-16 17:49:09 +0000 UTCYou rewrite it, you ruin the story. Rachel has acknowledged she wants him but wants it the right way
BamBam-3886
2023-12-16 17:20:12 +0000 UTCLiterally leave it. It's perfect.
BamBam-3886
2023-12-16 17:17:45 +0000 UTCWhat game dies after re-writing certain script?
Ulysses Odysseus
2023-12-16 15:57:54 +0000 UTCThat event was the catalyst to progress Rachel's story. She knew it is wrong, but she wanted to be in Sophia's place. If you are worried about her story progressing too fast, focus on Kendra and the girls in the house. There are more comments explaining why the rewrite would be bad while there are only a couple saying her progress is too fast or it is unrealistic. Meanwhile this entire premise is far-fetched
Delightful Douche
2023-12-16 15:19:28 +0000 UTCI also agree that a rewrite would not be good. It was quick, yes, but the easiest thing would be to have Rachel explain it to the MC at a later point. Every character has a reason for their actions and if you give Rachel a good one then that shouldn't be a problem for the later story.
Bio
2023-12-16 14:06:01 +0000 UTCDont rewrite it, just slow down afterwards. Let Rachel step back or something would be a better alternative, I think.
Ruffeus
2023-12-16 11:10:27 +0000 UTCRe doing is the act of death in games very few games recover from the change, instead “Correct Course” gives a reason for her sudden change in behavor actions, like a dare with Sophia or from Linda. Linda is the better choice here. add a flash back scene to them talking after the gathering at the pool on the day Mc pounded Lindia in front of her. it will fit with the hinted past adventurous teenage years. This for me is the difference in the AI generated after the original Nichole. They look nothing alike and it changes her look completely and that too will be a downfall of the renders in this game. use it in your next game or for future Models in the game. Good luck and keep it up
Lionheart
2023-12-16 11:05:48 +0000 UTCI don't see a need to rewrite the scene, but I agree that the pacing is surprising. Maybe just add a transitional scene before ?
Kiskocya
2023-12-16 11:03:10 +0000 UTCIt's too fast, might not good for the long run, you gonna lost the excitement as you have reached that stage even early in the game.
Ulysses Odysseus
2023-12-16 10:50:36 +0000 UTCI like how is progressed with Rachel,maybe not the way how direct is her involvement during MC's sex scenes. That seemed like too fast. She should just leave him with employee,imo. Sex on the party with Linda and rest was over the top too. So unrealistic. One thing is doing naughty things in mansion and other in real life situations.
Didi
2023-12-16 10:32:14 +0000 UTCI also like the part as it is now. Waiting ages for a particular encounter can be very frustrating. I think the pace you did is jus tright. I also liked it when we had the first sex scene already on the way to the mansion, and then the first scene with Anna just after meeting her without a long build up and the option to take Linda immediately at the pool. It's a nice change compared to other AVNs.
redsimon
2023-12-16 10:15:26 +0000 UTCHey, i don’t think you should rewrite it. I like that it moved from 0 to 100. it’s like an outburst of emotions and feelings kept in for ages. I really enjoyed the scenes and how fast it is moving.
ChickenBucket46
2023-12-16 10:05:07 +0000 UTCno！！There are already thousands of game out there take years to building shit up, and they mostly failed, people just wait in F95 for free after years of build. I stay, I support and I love your work because you take shit fast and fuck everyone, then we could focus into the harem fun. Like how you did it with all the maids and Megan with her mum, moving on to mum and aunt has already slowed down so much…. Please don’t do anything crazy😭
Peter Chan
2023-12-16 10:03:26 +0000 UTC
