Experiments in Recruitment - Editing Banter

Story: She had managed to completely knock herself out with just a pillow. 

SG: I guess if you're determined enough, it's possible :oP

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Story: She wasn’t confused…she was aroused, and that confused her even more.

SG: That's a vicious cycle I can relate to :oP

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Story: Laura’s expression turned serious, although she still kept her friendly tone “When you do an instant induction, at least a shock induction like I just did, there are two parts: the shock, and the suggestion. The shock is designed to make the person’s ‘fight or flight’ instinct kick in. When it does, all of their thoughts are dumped from their mind for a brief moment while they try to figure out if they are in danger, and if so, if they should run or fight. With me so far?”

SG: the author said, breaking the fourth wall to look at his audience... :oP

Me: Guilty

SG: I know, that's why I said it :oP i think it's entertaining though, and making porn educational AND entertaining is impressive

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Story: “In fact, I can show you one right now. In my hand is something magical…” She held up her closed fist. “So magical, in fact, that the moment you see it, the moment you lay your eyes on it…no matter what it is…your mind will find itself simply…falling back into hypnosis for me, Rayne. You may not think this will happen, consciously…but what you don’t realize now is…you have already been hypnotized once. And even though you're awake, you’re also still lightly hypnotized. So your mind will simply accept it...and sleep.” 

SG: Nicely written :oP out of curiosity, have you ever done that one with me? I know what it is, obviously, but i couldn't remember if you'd ever tried one on me or not

Me: I've done expectancy ones with you, although I'm not entirely sure if i've done an in person one with you or not.

SG: if you have I don't remember (although i don't really remember any, period, in fairness). like i said, just curious :oP

Me: I do expectancy inductions all the time, but one's like that not so much.

SG: I could see why, honestly. You do expectancy inductions all the time, though?

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Story: As if, in order to access the right information, she needed to be more deeply hypnotized than before. 

Sg: Would she actually need to be at a certain depth to access that information or answer the question? (inquiring minds want to know)

Me: depends on the person, but when people access memories they go into a deeper state of 'thought' all the time then come back up afterwards, happens in hypnosis sometimes too.

SG: Ok well that makes sense, thank you for this educational moment :oP

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Story: “Controlled…helpless, just like you are now…isn’t that right Laura?”

SG: oh good, now you're pushing my buttons, thanks…

ME: I don't write porn to be boring.

SG: No, you definitely don't, and let me assure you it has not been boring...at all…

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Story: The young woman's voice had an odd cadence to it, almost like she was speaking sarcastically even though she wasn’t. 

SG: I imagine that's what my voice sounds like pretty much all the time :oP

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Story: You can see how that might be nice, can’t you Jackie?”

SG: Thought process while editing hypnotic language: "yeah that might be nice...wait there should be a comma there...but yeah that still might be nice...dammit" :oP

ME: LOL, i really need to get a catalogue of your best replies and add that as a bonus for patreon one day

SG: that could be kinda entertaining, actually :oP

Me: Permission acquired

SG: by all means, feel free, because now i'm just curious to see what will end up in this catalog :oP

(And now you know)

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Story: “When you played freeze tag you were kind of in a trance all to yourself, you just never knew it. You held your body in place, just like Laura is now. You didn’t move, you didn’t talk. And if you were one of the really, really good players, you didn’t even think. You just imagined you were a statue on display, a doll to be posed…just like Laura is now.

SG: That is actually a really good comparison to being frozen while hypnotized, to the point where i read that and was like "holy shit, THAT'S how I've always wanted to describe it but never thought to"

Me: It's like I'm a hypnotist or something?!

SG: yes, smartass...yes it is almost like that... :oP

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Story: Back and forth, back and forth.” 

SG: i'm just going to start writing 'litmus test passed' every time one of these things drops me…

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Story: Until finally her eyes rolled all the way up into her head as it lolled back completely and she sank to her knees, sending her arms falling limply to her sides and her head down to her chest. 

SG: Ok, well...damn...this whole scene pushed buttons.

ME: That was the point =c)

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Story: “I froze her... “ she reached around and tapped Cheyenne in the center of the forehead as she whispered “like I just froze you…” 

SG: I like the center of the forehead as a trigger point...don't ask why, it just seems like a good on/off switch.

ME: oh I love it. that and that spot on the back of the ear, there is a little divit in the back that a finger pad fits in perfectly.

SG: i never think about that one, honestly, but yeah you're right that one does work well too

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Story: “So…let’s make sure you are all sorority material…”

SG: Aaaaand there's the start of the harem :oP

ME: Thats the plan