Little Busy.
Added 2024-01-04 03:53:31 +0000 UTC
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Katie, not Kallie :-/
Hellofacritic
2024-01-06 00:16:40 +0000 UTCHey man. Just got to check that first part of chapter 8. Great to see it and I've got a few notes: _One of the things I didn't like much was Kallie's artificial tan. I prefer it to be subtle and come from ones's active/bimbo lifestyle (outdoor, beach and swimming pool). Also if done too much, you can lose the "paler woman vs more tanned/darker guy" contrast. Finally, I have trouble believing tanning would come before bigger breasts, constant heat, flexibility or any other enhancements. _ As a fan of more personnal NTR, I like the introduction of Ryan's boss. He's got it all and could be the type of guy to make Ellie his. I would be okay with her story more or less concluding with her finishing with him and the plot moving on to other young women to corrupt with only sporadic appearances from Ellie. _I'm also happy to see that impregnation is still central to the story. I'd like Ellie to show some maternal instinct though. Maybe checking on her children semi-regularly. It could further enhance the loss Ryan feels when the children made by Ellie with her bull now get more love than him. I find it sometime hotter when the girl isn't a complete bitch but her priorities and affection are redirected towards others.
Hellofacritic
2024-01-05 08:51:48 +0000 UTCAwesome pose. Cass rocks!
Neil
2024-01-04 17:43:56 +0000 UTC
